The Trining
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "THE TABLETS OF KYRN"A man must discover his identity and destiny.
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Comment from Ritsal
I read your author's notes and, despite the lack of action, I found this chapter totally captivating as we learn more details.
Also, consciousness cannot die. It is the pure I Am. >>God is the only being I've ever heard called the I Am, so depending on your target audience, you might want to change that reference.
Now we were getting somewhere; and I needed to concentrate as never before.>>need to either change semi-colon to comma or remove the "and"
Best wishes,
Rita
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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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I read your author's notes and, despite the lack of action, I found this chapter totally captivating as we learn more details.
Also, consciousness cannot die. It is the pure I Am. >>God is the only being I've ever heard called the I Am, so depending on your target audience, you might want to change that reference.
Now we were getting somewhere; and I needed to concentrate as never before.>>need to either change semi-colon to comma or remove the "and"
Best wishes,
Rita
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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You know, Rita, I think I agree with you. I could change it to I Was, LOL, no, that would be just stupid. Will jump right one it. Thanks for the heads up.
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You are very welcome. I'm ready for the next chapter! :)