Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from Showboat
Outstanding chapter, Bev, so tight and creepy. You maintained that feeling throughout the chapter, and the closing dialogue is just excellent.
Wooo, you go, girl!
Hugs,
Gayle
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Outstanding chapter, Bev, so tight and creepy. You maintained that feeling throughout the chapter, and the closing dialogue is just excellent.
Wooo, you go, girl!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Gayle, thank you so very much. I appreciate that you felt the writing was both tight and creepy. I'm taking the time to clear up some loose ends... the finale is in sight, I promise. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Dean Kuch
Geesh, this Cassie wants to be argumentative at a time where Maggie and the assistant are dealing with a patient, Agnes Longacre, having a psychotic episode of some sort. Not the time to be arguing semantics, I'd think! If I were Maggie, after I got a hold of Agnes's surgeon and got her calmed down, I'd punch that girl right in the head, lol!
Cliff, an orderly at the hospital, comes quickly to Maggie's aid, however, before Agnes can do any real damage to herself, or anyone else for that matter.
Maggie has a premonition of sorts, that this Tony that Agnes keeps calling out to is in some kind of real danger, but she keeps that information wisely to herself. Still, she can't seem to shake the odd feelings of dread. Of course we, as readers and privy to all aspects of the story, know that Agnes is clearly sensing the immense danger her brother Tony is in at the moment.
And, we are not left out in the cold, either, for you tell us precisely where Tony is, and the inhuman monster he's facing. Arms and legs shackled, Tony is at the mercy of this despicable beast.
Brilliant terror tale, Bev...simply awesome story telling!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Geesh, this Cassie wants to be argumentative at a time where Maggie and the assistant are dealing with a patient, Agnes Longacre, having a psychotic episode of some sort. Not the time to be arguing semantics, I'd think! If I were Maggie, after I got a hold of Agnes's surgeon and got her calmed down, I'd punch that girl right in the head, lol!
Cliff, an orderly at the hospital, comes quickly to Maggie's aid, however, before Agnes can do any real damage to herself, or anyone else for that matter.
Maggie has a premonition of sorts, that this Tony that Agnes keeps calling out to is in some kind of real danger, but she keeps that information wisely to herself. Still, she can't seem to shake the odd feelings of dread. Of course we, as readers and privy to all aspects of the story, know that Agnes is clearly sensing the immense danger her brother Tony is in at the moment.
And, we are not left out in the cold, either, for you tell us precisely where Tony is, and the inhuman monster he's facing. Arms and legs shackled, Tony is at the mercy of this despicable beast.
Brilliant terror tale, Bev...simply awesome story telling!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Dean, I am so very honored by this encouraging and generous review. Coming from the master of horror, it means more than I can say. Loved the accompanying graphics, too. I have to learn how to do that!
Warmest regards, Bev
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Hey, I give credit where credit is due, my friend. And if you ever want me to teach you how to add the graphics, just let me know. I can send you a quick tutorial, and you'll be doing it like a pro in no time. I believe in sharing acquired knowledge, and I've already taught several here how to do so. Just let me know in a PM...
Blessings, Bev!
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I will definitely take you up on the offer at some point, Dean. I'm trying to get used to my new 8.1 version of Microsoft and using Word. That's been a trip of its own.
Thanks again, Dean.
:0) Bev
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Yeah, ain't that the truth, lol?
Just let me know...
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Ohkeedohkee.
Comment from Aussie
Morphine is a great pain-blocker and it can (taken in huge amounts) leave you with pink elephants - I know cause I take it for chronic pain. And yes, elderly patients have surprising strength - when nursing, I copped a black eye! You really picked up the pace with the cold draft and pooling blood - cold air always representing bad spirits. I could relate to your story well - I am a spiritual healer and have experienced devil magic. One of your best chapters my friend.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Morphine is a great pain-blocker and it can (taken in huge amounts) leave you with pink elephants - I know cause I take it for chronic pain. And yes, elderly patients have surprising strength - when nursing, I copped a black eye! You really picked up the pace with the cold draft and pooling blood - cold air always representing bad spirits. I could relate to your story well - I am a spiritual healer and have experienced devil magic. One of your best chapters my friend.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, Kay. I really appreciate your confirming the part about the morphine. I based that on my Dad's own experience with the stuff. Its cheap, so they use it a lot. But man it can mess with the patient's mind. Thanks, too, for the compliment on the chapter and your wonderful support and generosity.
Love, Bev
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It is the lower end of heroin - taken the way I do (two tabs of 5mg) I'm not hooked. If my nursing experience can help you - I'm pleased. Love, Kay.
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Thanks for the offer - I may take you up on it sometimes. Hugs, Bev
Comment from misscookie
Oh my goodness I'm glad I'm reading this early in the morning and I can't go back to sleep.
This was a hair raising chapter.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Oh my goodness I'm glad I'm reading this early in the morning and I can't go back to sleep.
This was a hair raising chapter.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thanks for reading, Cookie. I know how sensitive you are and do appreciate that you went ahead anyway. That's very kind of you -- as if the wonderfully generous review. Hugs, Bev
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Happy May first.
You're very welcome.
Until next time.
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Same to you, Cookie. Thank you! xx Bev
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Until next time.
Cookie
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the spirit infiltrates the minds of agnes, the registered nurse and tony. i enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the spirit infiltrates the minds of agnes, the registered nurse and tony. i enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Sweet. Demonic spirits are most crafty. I hope to continue to reveal 'their' methods. I appreciate the review very much. Bev
Comment from CR Delport
This is another great chapter to this interesting story. Good flow to the story and great dialogue from the interesting characters. Seems like Tony is in deep trouble, but hopefully he is resourceful enough to get through it. Great work.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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This is another great chapter to this interesting story. Good flow to the story and great dialogue from the interesting characters. Seems like Tony is in deep trouble, but hopefully he is resourceful enough to get through it. Great work.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thank you so very much, CR. Tony will not be alone in his battle against this crafty demon.
I much appreciate the support and encouragement.
Bev
Comment from Connie C
Your chapter leaves me wanting for more, Bev, and that's been the case throughout all your chapters. You have such a knack for writing about the supernatural, such as you've done here once again. There's some pretty scary stuff going on, like with the pool of blood on Maggie's shoes that suddenly disappears. As always, your command of writing dialogue is excellent, Bev. I like how you always explain who the characters are and what certain words mean in your author's notes. I'm always happy to award you a six for your very fine writing.
Hugs,
Connie
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Your chapter leaves me wanting for more, Bev, and that's been the case throughout all your chapters. You have such a knack for writing about the supernatural, such as you've done here once again. There's some pretty scary stuff going on, like with the pool of blood on Maggie's shoes that suddenly disappears. As always, your command of writing dialogue is excellent, Bev. I like how you always explain who the characters are and what certain words mean in your author's notes. I'm always happy to award you a six for your very fine writing.
Hugs,
Connie
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Connie, thank you so very much for this gracious review. I am honored that you took time out of your busy schedule to read and review with such kindness and generosity. I worked extra hard on this chapter, so I am pleased that it came across well. It's hard these days to write about the supernatural without using musty cliché's or going over the top. I plan to continue to reveal how crafty demonic energies can be with the seductions.
Much appreciated!
Hugs, Bev
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
On no, poor Tony! I hope someone comes to the rescue. Wonderfully written as always, Glad to see another chapter and looking forward to more. Rox
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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On no, poor Tony! I hope someone comes to the rescue. Wonderfully written as always, Glad to see another chapter and looking forward to more. Rox
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Rox, thank you so very much for this great review! I'm so glad you enjoyed the chapter. Yes, more supernatural to come!
Hugs, Bev
Comment from Joy Graham
Another awesome instalment to your story. Things are getting exciting. I love the sounds of "her soul is mine". I'm expecting the supernatural part of this story to grab us from here on in. I'm a big baby when it comes to the scary stuff so I'm a little worried I will get nightmares. I'm going to try to be brave. You have written this story so well that you have me wrapped around your inky pen lol! Looking forward to the next chapter.
Just a few little things I noticed and wondered about:
"she looked into (the) Cassie's eyes..." - no need for "the".
"a brief hope was dashed (end of the line)
By a weird metallic voice that boomed in his brain" - not sure why this sentence was split up with a huge gap between it.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Another awesome instalment to your story. Things are getting exciting. I love the sounds of "her soul is mine". I'm expecting the supernatural part of this story to grab us from here on in. I'm a big baby when it comes to the scary stuff so I'm a little worried I will get nightmares. I'm going to try to be brave. You have written this story so well that you have me wrapped around your inky pen lol! Looking forward to the next chapter.
Just a few little things I noticed and wondered about:
"she looked into (the) Cassie's eyes..." - no need for "the".
"a brief hope was dashed (end of the line)
By a weird metallic voice that boomed in his brain" - not sure why this sentence was split up with a huge gap between it.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Hi, Joy. Thank you so much for this totally wonderful review. I, especially appreciate your suggested edits. I really hate it when my graphics are goofed up, so that was a good catch. Yes, the supernatural elements are heating up!
Hugs, Bev
Comment from Green Lake Girl
This is a wicked-good chapter, Bev. I love the medical personnel and the no nonsense Maggie. A great scene.
I worry for Tony! The demon has him in his clutches and I don't see a way out. (Curious; what does corpo di stampa mean?)
Excellent descriptive details:
"Tony heard the snapping of toenails against the floor and felt a hot breath in his face."
You are very adept at writing suspense, Bev. I hope you're already writing the next chapter! :D
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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This is a wicked-good chapter, Bev. I love the medical personnel and the no nonsense Maggie. A great scene.
I worry for Tony! The demon has him in his clutches and I don't see a way out. (Curious; what does corpo di stampa mean?)
Excellent descriptive details:
"Tony heard the snapping of toenails against the floor and felt a hot breath in his face."
You are very adept at writing suspense, Bev. I hope you're already writing the next chapter! :D
Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Thank you so very much, Marietta. I sure appreciate your insights and support. It means so much to me! Thanks, also, for highlighting areas you enjoyed as that is always enouraging. :0) Bev
