Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "But best is the ice-cream "A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This has a nice mono-rhyme. I like the feeling of comfort in both the ice cream and the soft white sheets. They seem related. The imagery throughout the poem is vivid. I can almost smell the sea breeze and hear the call of the gulls. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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This has a nice mono-rhyme. I like the feeling of comfort in both the ice cream and the soft white sheets. They seem related. The imagery throughout the poem is vivid. I can almost smell the sea breeze and hear the call of the gulls. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
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thank you
Comment from Raphael Montonaro
Very nice sincere poem. Deepwater, you wrote another good one. Evoked many memories of being a younger man. Great job! Keep writing!
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Very nice sincere poem. Deepwater, you wrote another good one. Evoked many memories of being a younger man. Great job! Keep writing!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
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thank you
Comment from mjac777
Nicely metered aa/aa poem on best childhood memories.
I really enjoyed reading this - the rhyme and rhythm helped.
Wonderful childhood memories -
And the last line:
"Soft white sheets on my bed as I drift off to see the wonders, so free."
Perfect. I felt like I was there.
Well done.
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Nicely metered aa/aa poem on best childhood memories.
I really enjoyed reading this - the rhyme and rhythm helped.
Wonderful childhood memories -
And the last line:
"Soft white sheets on my bed as I drift off to see the wonders, so free."
Perfect. I felt like I was there.
Well done.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
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thank you
Comment from Charlene0513
To deepwater,
An expressive poem taking in the adventures as a child while experiencing the wonders of God's creation as he slumbers off to sleep thinking of the next time filed with fun and enjoyment.
Charlene
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To deepwater,
An expressive poem taking in the adventures as a child while experiencing the wonders of God's creation as he slumbers off to sleep thinking of the next time filed with fun and enjoyment.
Charlene
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
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thank you Charlene for this review
Comment from Eternal Muse
That picture is so endearing. Is that you? I feel nostalgic just looking at that black and white photo, thinking of those by-gone days.
If I dare but see through the eyes of a child, what would it be?
Long hot summers on a beach with warm winds blowing off the sea.
Life amazing when viewed by a child, through his rose-colored classes.
A very refreshing poem
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That picture is so endearing. Is that you? I feel nostalgic just looking at that black and white photo, thinking of those by-gone days.
If I dare but see through the eyes of a child, what would it be?
Long hot summers on a beach with warm winds blowing off the sea.
Life amazing when viewed by a child, through his rose-colored classes.
A very refreshing poem
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
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thank you yeltel
Comment from Andrewajgblue
A poem about the memories of childhood, especially the days on the beach with the family, you captured the mood really well, with great expression , I enjoyed the soft white sheets at the end when you collapse exhausted into bed, a great poem
Andrew
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A poem about the memories of childhood, especially the days on the beach with the family, you captured the mood really well, with great expression , I enjoyed the soft white sheets at the end when you collapse exhausted into bed, a great poem
Andrew
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thank you
Comment from hari anand
Beautifully written, captures those little moments of joy on the beach through the eyes of a child. Rhymes flow so naturally, picture to compliments It well. Regards hargunanand
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Beautifully written, captures those little moments of joy on the beach through the eyes of a child. Rhymes flow so naturally, picture to compliments It well. Regards hargunanand
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
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thank you Tera
Comment from Martin Chan
"But best is the ice-cream" is a brilliantly composed mono rhyme poem with nicely chosen words that could cause a reader's mind to see the whole picture
of the intended meaning precisely and concisely. I enjoy reading it.
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"But best is the ice-cream" is a brilliantly composed mono rhyme poem with nicely chosen words that could cause a reader's mind to see the whole picture
of the intended meaning precisely and concisely. I enjoy reading it.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
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thank you Martin for your review and the six
Gary
Comment from zanya
Nostalgic and filled with precious childhood moments 'best is the ice-cream' the simpler and most enjoyable childhood activities that seem to have disappeared from the radar !
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Nostalgic and filled with precious childhood moments 'best is the ice-cream' the simpler and most enjoyable childhood activities that seem to have disappeared from the radar !
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
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thank you for this zanya
Comment from Tina McKala
very cute poem about the good old days and ice cream :) funny how we remember the small things even after years. this was great to show the innocence, teh careless ambiance of youth and childhood. very good poem with a wonderful flow.
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very cute poem about the good old days and ice cream :) funny how we remember the small things even after years. this was great to show the innocence, teh careless ambiance of youth and childhood. very good poem with a wonderful flow.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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thank you Tina
