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Life, Love, and Other Disasters

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A collection of poems on these themes

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Comment from Selina Stambi
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Goodness, Steve! You manage to execute (no pun intended) even a grim little piece with panache!

A dark Cockney sort of chuckle ... :)(I could hear Eliza Doolittle's dad belting this out to music after a few pints of ale!)

Happy New Year to you.

Sonali




(')Cos I ain't done with life

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
    He as a beauty wasn't he, Mr Dolittle? Maybe my chap's 'gettin married in the morning' and that's why he's going to send death away.

    Happy new year to you too - considerably colder than our summer which has just arrived with a vengeance!

    Steve
Comment from gypsycaravan
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Wouldn't it be great if we really could scare him off if we weren't ready yet? Clever premise and written well with the bit of dialect. Really excellent choice of artwork for your piece, also.

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
    Thanks for the kind words.

    I guess my real point was not to 'go gentle'...

    Steve
Comment from GWHARGIS
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I remember telling a group of friends who were discussing death and the grim reaper that I was going to run like hell when he came for me. I may just have to repeat your poem. Well crafted and fun to read. Nicely done. Gretchen

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
    Thanks, Gretchen. You can run but you can't hide.... :O)

    Steve
Comment from Dawn Munro
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Can I please have this poem - I wanna tuck it under my pillow in case ol' Miserable decides to SNEAK in. (HAHAHAHA - just kidding - we can't ask for much better than to 'go' in sleep, I guess...)

Steve, this is a jewel - fabulous idea, and the 'dialect' is great - I'm grinning so hard (again) my face is getting sore!

(Out of sixes early yesterday, or - as usual with your poetry - this would be rated properly.)

EXCEPTIONAL - short, and very, very sweet! **************************!!

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
    Thanks, Dawn - glad you enjoyed this. Basically saying 'do not go gentle'.

    Steve
Comment from Louise Michelle
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Hi Steve, What fun this is! We often read about death and dying, but never in such an upbeat, whimsical way. I thoroughly enjoyed this poem and thank you for writing it. I'll have to remember this when I'm on my death bed, lol. Hugs, Lou

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
    Thanks, Lou - gotta laugh about the serious stuff!

    Steve
Comment from mshirachot
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Love the 'kiwi' lingo, Steve. Good for you, mate. Send 'im packin'. This is incredibly funny and great rhyme scheme. The grim reaper pic goes well also
Thanks for sharing,
Blessings!
Marsha

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
    Thanks, Marsha - glad you enjoyed.

    Of course, 'I am a non-believer' remember, so I don't really think of Death as a personification....

    Steve
Comment from ann marie mazz
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hello steve

happy new year

well now
have you been talking to my father
he always says he is here to stay and will live

the presentation is excellent
the theme speaks for itself
the words and voice compliment each other
the reader can tell you had fun with this entry
never did you stray from the title

thank you for sharing
this was a pleasure to read
ann marie

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
    Thanks, Ann Marie - so glad you enjoyed this.

    Steve
Comment from Doc Holiday
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You tell 'em! Its time someone stood up to the Reaper and put a good strong foot up his butt! Well-written poem with a message of live for the day cause you never know when old skull-face will be showing up. Loved it!

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
    Thanks, Doc.

    With a name like that you might have defied the old bugger a few times yourself!

    Steve
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
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Hello there~!
Ha! This is one awesome poem! I enjoyed it. it's very lively and all.
I'm afraid that you can't actually tell this when the time comes.. Hmm... but, maybe your prayer will reach God, and you may have a long life!
anyway, thanks for sharing this fun little poem.

JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)

(^_^)-<~~KAUSAR~~>-(^_^)

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
    Thanks, Kausar. No praying here - I'm a non-believer, remember! Perhaps the message is more to not give in too easily....

    Steve
reply by Kausar_Javeria on 06-Jan-2015
    Ah! Sorry... the screen name is similar to someone else's so...
    Okay then, do your best~! (^_^)
Comment from acerisestory
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It would be fabulous if we had the power to keep death from our door, Steve. I really like your well written poem and love the language you've used, along with the artwork.

Great use of alliteration with chop/chap and so and so. Your flow of words is really fine. Love this stanza:

'"I dunno why you came 'ere
With yer bloomin' ten-foot knife,
So pack yer bags and scoot off back,
Cos I ain't done with life!"'

Well done, my friend! Happy New Year! Alana



 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
    Thanks, Alana.

    Glad you enjoyed my little piece - let's hope I'm actually this strong when old skull-face really does show up!

    Steve
reply by acerisestory on 06-Jan-2015
    Exactly! I was a hospice volunteer for a patient living at home for two years. When I started, they told me she'd be gone within a month. She fought hard to stay alive . . . . so, there you have it! Take care. Alana