Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

2nd line - do you mean, 'craving human BLOOD', a I assume the subject is a vampire, though I may be wrong?

Anyway, it's a well-written horror story, and the doctor deserves his fate for over-charging for his services (if you're not a Brit and get them free). ;-)

Good luck and best wishes, Ray

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015

Thanks, Rayman, but I did, in fact, mean teeth. In demonology, demons crave the teeth of human beings. It's bone, for one, and it renders their unlucky hosts unable to bite. See the film by Guillermo del Toro, Don't Be Afraid of the Dark.

http://www.imdb.com/title/tt1270761/

I very much appreciate you taking time out to review this shortie.

Cheers, mate! ;)

reply by Domino 2 on 16-Aug-2015

Sorry about that, and thanks for the heads up. Ray.

I could also use a few new human teeth, as I've lost most of my back ones, and I scratch my gums up every time I bite into human necks. ;-)

reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015

Yummy! Ha-ha... ;)

Comment from country ranch writer

Exceptional

to your own self be true it is the only cure for your madness so you say now it is the doctors fault for everything going bad hummmmm

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015

Well, not exactly the poor dentists fault, or the therapists. It's just that this whack-job either kills himself, or has to keep on killing to appease his demonic appetite. He choose the latter.
Thanks very much for the great feedback, and the sixth star, Country. I sure do appreciate it! ;)

reply by country ranch writer on 16-Aug-2015

s m i l e s

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hello writer,

You're story is well written and tells a story that uses all of the five words you're supposed to use. It's much different than any of the other stories I've read.

MizKat

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015

I don't know if being different is a good thing or a bad one, MizKat. I certainly appreciate you taking a look at my story however. I suppose we'll know soon enough when the voting comes around, right?

Much obliged... ;)

reply by MizKat on 16-Aug-2015

I think being different is good.

reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015

Thanks good, I'm happy to hear you say that. As I said, we'll soon see... ;)

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

Great work. Hungry demons within yourself. Craving for blood on human teeth. Where is this anxiety stems from. Soap and water can't cure corruption. Life bites until the blood flows.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015

Yep, that about sums it all up in one nut's shell, Sandra.
Thanks for the commentary..

Comment from ellie6

Excellent

A creepy little story. I wouldn't like to be that dentist. I am assuming that this man is a vampire. Or is it just a bad case of gum disease ??

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015

A schizo with homicidal tendencies is a better description, Ellie. He's feeding his own teeth to demons for chrissake, so whadda you think, lol?

Thanks for the review.

Comment from Jacob Collins

Excellent

A certainly chilling piece. You got inside the patients head well and you sent a shiver down my spine with that last line: life bites. An excellent competition entry, I couldn't find any faults. Good luck in the contest...Jacob

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015

Thanks, Jacob. For me, finding no faults is a very good thing.
I appreciate your comments.

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

Wow! This put a big smile on my face. An evil smile I think. I think you did a wonderful job with the prompt. Your use of internal though works wonderfully. The twist at the ending is not surprising - since you developed this characters so well - but expected in a good way. Great job.

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 Comment Written 16-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015

Thanks, Michael. I'm happy you took the time to read it.
Your comments are appreciated.