Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

I like these five tercets, each in mono-rhyme. The third tercet has a most important message for all of us. These are some of the most important insects on the planet. Just a thought for the final one. Would "How we gladly spend our money" work better than "take our money"? It's just a thought.

And I think it kind of funny
How we gladly spend our money
Buying all your precious honey

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 Comment Written 21-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016

Thank you for your input and review. A much better line. Much appreciation for the suggestion as I will use it. Blessings to you and have a great weekend.

Comment from sage17611

Excellent

Very cute, giving "ode to the bumblebee". I really like the rhyming theme in this poem, very nice flow and a cute story. Good luck with the contest.

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 Comment Written 21-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016

Thank you for your input and review. Blessings to you and have a great weekend.