Ode to the Urinal
Response to a challenge from Pantygynt51 total reviews
Comment from RGstar
And you did it well to that urinal...and did it your way!
Poetically sound. Lyrically charming, and imagery expressive.
I enjoyed this rather humorous write, and though so, still the quality in delivery.
Bravo.
Great write.
Have a good day.
RGstar
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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And you did it well to that urinal...and did it your way!
Poetically sound. Lyrically charming, and imagery expressive.
I enjoyed this rather humorous write, and though so, still the quality in delivery.
Bravo.
Great write.
Have a good day.
RGstar
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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Very many thanks for reviewing Ode to the Urinal. Roy. I appreciated your comments. Glad you enjoyed it! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Theresia Riggs
I staggered like a bloated toad,
to the gents' urinal.
To my relief that ends my ode.
It's all zipped up! That's final.
What an absolutely funny, and stunning ending!
I loved your poem.
I have been to all three places. Paris, London, and Germany. I can certainly relate to your poem, or ode to the urinal. Brilliant!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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I staggered like a bloated toad,
to the gents' urinal.
To my relief that ends my ode.
It's all zipped up! That's final.
What an absolutely funny, and stunning ending!
I loved your poem.
I have been to all three places. Paris, London, and Germany. I can certainly relate to your poem, or ode to the urinal. Brilliant!
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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Very many thanks for reviewing Ode to the Urinal. Theresia. I appreciated your comments. Glad you enjoyed it! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Appears you could "write a beautiful ode, even to a urinal".
Some times, that little bugger is the real relief.
Touch of humor thrown into this for good measure.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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Appears you could "write a beautiful ode, even to a urinal".
Some times, that little bugger is the real relief.
Touch of humor thrown into this for good measure.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
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Very many thanks for reviewing Ode to the Urinal. Brett. I appreciated your comments. Glad you enjoyed it! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Heather Knight
Well, I have to admit it's an original topic for a poem. Why bother with love if one can write about urinals? ;)
You've done very well, anyway.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Well, I have to admit it's an original topic for a poem. Why bother with love if one can write about urinals? ;)
You've done very well, anyway.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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You're right. An unusual choice of subject. Just a bit of fun really. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from RoostyNester
I loved your poem. It was humorous and gave a message to the traveler. I loved the style and the wording of your funny poem. Very nice.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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I loved your poem. It was humorous and gave a message to the traveler. I loved the style and the wording of your funny poem. Very nice.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Glad you enjoyed it and appreciated the humour. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from joannakruk
Haha very clever, and a valid appreciation of such an undervalued social necessity. Where would we be without the urinal, the walls of every building would be stained and pungent. Love the use of the Eiffel tower as an expected euphemism of beauty. You've achieved the challenge seamlessly.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Haha very clever, and a valid appreciation of such an undervalued social necessity. Where would we be without the urinal, the walls of every building would be stained and pungent. Love the use of the Eiffel tower as an expected euphemism of beauty. You've achieved the challenge seamlessly.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Glad you enjoyed it and appreciated the humour. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from BeasPeas
This is over-the-top good writing for Pantygynt's challenge, Tony. The
pissoir (etc.) HAS to be a guy idea. It's just so gross! Can't a guy contain himself just a little bit? I guess not. Oh well. I hope we don't get them in the States. I guess alleyways will do.
But getting back to your fabulous poem--I enjoyed every line. This is a sixer for sure. I'm sorry I don't have one for you. Marilyn
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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This is over-the-top good writing for Pantygynt's challenge, Tony. The
pissoir (etc.) HAS to be a guy idea. It's just so gross! Can't a guy contain himself just a little bit? I guess not. Oh well. I hope we don't get them in the States. I guess alleyways will do.
But getting back to your fabulous poem--I enjoyed every line. This is a sixer for sure. I'm sorry I don't have one for you. Marilyn
Comment Written 11-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Glad you enjoyed it and appreciated the humour. There used to be quite a few about in the old days, but I gather that most have gone now. Best wishes, Tony
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Thank God if they're phased out. When I was in Europe I remember seeing them. My thought was--'my God, can't you wait 5 minutes?' You did a super job with the challenge from Pantygynt. Clever and funny--kept me laughing all the way through it. Marilyn
Comment from Lu Saluna
I really don't know how you gents always end up in these pissing matches but I have to say you nailed it quite nicely.
I mean the "edifice of steel" is even lit so you don't miss the target, great photo.
You poem is wonderfully written, great rhyming, humour throughout, entertaining from start to finish. I don't know how the challenge came to be but I would think you passed with flying colours.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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I really don't know how you gents always end up in these pissing matches but I have to say you nailed it quite nicely.
I mean the "edifice of steel" is even lit so you don't miss the target, great photo.
You poem is wonderfully written, great rhyming, humour throughout, entertaining from start to finish. I don't know how the challenge came to be but I would think you passed with flying colours.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Glad you enjoyed it and appreciated the humour. We aim to please. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Thal1959
The mark of a good poet is the ability to make a strange subject sound plausible. The humor is charming without lowering itself to being vulgar. Even the last few verses work, and some may not realize it, but in England and Australia, urinal (Yur-in-ul) is often times not pronounced the way we say it here in America. It is often pronounced Yu/rine/all - which makes it rhyme better with "final." Very clever, and expertly done. Thanks.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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The mark of a good poet is the ability to make a strange subject sound plausible. The humor is charming without lowering itself to being vulgar. Even the last few verses work, and some may not realize it, but in England and Australia, urinal (Yur-in-ul) is often times not pronounced the way we say it here in America. It is often pronounced Yu/rine/all - which makes it rhyme better with "final." Very clever, and expertly done. Thanks.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Glad you enjoyed it and appreciated the humour. Best wishes, Tony
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Your welcome.
Comment from Irish Rain
Is that really a public urinal in Paris? Because if so....New York could surely use those. Except they do the women no good. Excellent 'challenge met!' QUITE unique!!! Blessings...
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Is that really a public urinal in Paris? Because if so....New York could surely use those. Except they do the women no good. Excellent 'challenge met!' QUITE unique!!! Blessings...
Comment Written 11-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2016
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Glad you enjoyed it and appreciated the humour. There used to be quite a few about in the old days, but I gather that most have gone now. Best wishes, Tony