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NaPoWriMo 2017

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Comment from Nikki-Nicole
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'Grace' is a VERY NICE poem.
It rhymes.
Outstanding artwork: The image shown is a perfect match for this poem.
--We should thank God for providing because there are so many who don't have.
Thanks for sharing your Nove Otto.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    Hi Nicole:

    Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I'm thrilled that you enjoyed this selection. I appreciate your comments.

    Kim
Comment from XGoneX
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hello,
I'm not good in following poetry formats or even syllable count. You did a good job. The poem flows well and has a nice rhyming scheme. As a read these words, it kind of reminded me that we should be grateful for the things we have in our life.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    Hi Targaryen:

    You've done a fantastic job at interpreting this poem. I'm glad that you enjoyed the rhyme scheme and content. Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate your comments.

    Kim
Comment from damommy
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Baking bread is a wonderful fragrance. When I was little, I used to love driving by the bakery and smell the bread.

It's been a while since I've baked any myself.

It's a good nove otto poem. I like the take you gave it.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    Hi Yvonne:

    It was an awesome topic! Thank you for choosing the Nove Otto style. I really like it! As soon as I saw the topic that painting popped in my mind from my childhood. I'm not sure if it was the carb cravings (trying not to eat bread too often is harder than it sounds lol) or the fact that there is nothing like the smell of fresh baked bread. Thanks for the great comments.

    Kim
reply by damommy on 23-Apr-2017
    Thank you. I'm glad you liked the form. Next week will be my last Saturday to host the challenge. Whew!
    It's been fun, but I've been a nervous wreck. But everyone has been so gracious.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    You are passing the baton to me in May. I've been trying to decide which styles we should try lol It isn't easy narrowing things down to what the group might enjoy. You are doing an awesome job! :) I can't wait to see what else you've picked for us!
reply by damommy on 23-Apr-2017
    You're very kind. I thought Pantygynt had it in May. I misunderstood. You'll do great. My only problem was getting home in time to post it on Saturday.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    I think he has July
Comment from Sasha
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This is marvelous and deserving of a 6, but I still don't have one. I love this style and am happy to say, I actually understood the rhyme scheme before you explained it. That is saying a lot considering in am still poetically illiterate. Lovely poem and as always, fascinating notes. I agree, there is nothing like the smell of fresh baked bread. I live above a tortilla factory and wake every morning to the smell of fresh baked tortillas. It is a wonderful aroma to wake to. Take my word for it.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    Hi!

    Do you have any idea how much I would weigh if I lived above a tortilla factory? lol Bread, chips, and chocolate lol Three things I'm trying not to eat (too much of, that is lol) Thank you for all of the wonderful comments. I'm so happy that you enjoyed this poem. I really do like this style of poem, too. The rhyme scheme is awesome.

    Kim
Comment from Janilou
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A very interesting poem, that is now making me wish I had a piece of fresh-baked bread in front of me! LOL

And though it's not the meal of kings
the satisfaction that it brings
is priceless when the stomach's ached.

The only line that caused me any hitch was the last one. I wondered if you really needed the apostrophe in "stomach's" because it seemed to me to read better as a plural
is priceless when the stomachs ached

Just my opinion -- food for thought. ;-)

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 Comment Written 22-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    Hi Janilou:

    I'm game for an experiment, so I'll take out the apostrophe and see if there are any other comments. Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate the comments.

    Kim
Comment from Poetic Friend
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I am so grateful that I have six star remaining for this poetic gem.

We can learn a lot from this poem. We often take for granted what we may have readily available--- food. There are people who are starving and have no clue where will their next meal come from.

I will hold your poem very dear as I say grace.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    Hi Poetic Friend:

    I am so honored that you've graced my poem with an exceptional rating. Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I truly appreciate the sixth star and your warm words.

    Kim
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Kim,
You always have the perfect picture for your awesome words. This is great. I enjoyed reading your poem.

You give readers a lot to think about, too. A simple meal is fit for anyone when it is prepared with love. Good job on the style of the nove otto.

Question:
line 4 I count 9 syllables--blame it on vegetables. Could you delete the word 'a' ? I enjoyed your notes. Thanks for those, too.

Thanks for sharing another of your awesome poems. Jan

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 Comment Written 22-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    Hi Jan:

    I remembered this famous photograph from when I was young and went to search it out for this poem. When I read the topic, it instantly popped in my head. I'm not sure if that makes this poem topic driven or ekphrastic lol (or if it is just the carb cravings talking.) Thank you so much for that catch on line 4! That would be my fault on pronunciation: veg-ta-bles. Do you know how long I worked with them? lol I used to manage a produce department. I edited out the a as you suggested.

    I hope you checked out the history of the photo, I thought you might like that. Thank you for this thoughtful review.

    Kim
reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 23-Apr-2017
    Kim,
    I always look into you links for the info on your great selections of pictures. I have been reviewing so many poems & all. I have to ask--did you read my X-Ray form Space. It may have slipped by while you were off line OR my mind may have slipped off the track. Jan
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    Hey Jan:

    My laptop crashed and I'm having to use my husband's desktop computer. Friday I was gone from 7:30 am til 11pm and we left right after breakfast this morning and didn't get home until late this afternoon. I just managed to start some reviews so I could post this poem. I'm telling you all this because I managed to clear my inbox out... I think it was before I went to bed on Thursday night. Now I'm back to being 60 reviews behind lol Was I really only away from the house for a day and a half? lol I don't think I've read the X-Ray poem yet, but I'll go find it :)

    Kim
reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 23-Apr-2017
    haha I was offline for about a half day; and, I had more notices than ever. I have just now replied/reviewed to them. I do not want to ignore anyone. Jan
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017
    I think I've only managed to clear my message box twice this entire month lol I keep thinking... if I go to sleep I'll never catch up lol as I'm nodding off at the computer! Crazy me!