The Letter
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "The Letter - Part Two"...a family saga
46 total reviews
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is an interesting story Patty. That old saying 'You can pick your friends, but not your relatives is sad but true. Most families have the grace and affection to accept the chosen mate whether they like the person or not. This should be VERY interesting when we get to the memorial.Good Job. NAncy
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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This is an interesting story Patty. That old saying 'You can pick your friends, but not your relatives is sad but true. Most families have the grace and affection to accept the chosen mate whether they like the person or not. This should be VERY interesting when we get to the memorial.Good Job. NAncy
Comment Written 07-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Hi Nancy; you are SO right. Things will certainly be interesting at the Memorial and meal afterwards. Thank you for continuing to read along with this story,
~patty~
Comment from pbomar1115
Kathy and Dough are responsible for the arrangement now, but it will not be a smooth undertaking. For instance, Sylvia, Doug's sister, is holding onto ill feelings toward Kathy and thinks her involvement in handling the affairs of the dead mother is wrong. Nevertheless, Dough and Kathy presses on by honoring her mother-in-law and Doug's mother wishes.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Kathy and Dough are responsible for the arrangement now, but it will not be a smooth undertaking. For instance, Sylvia, Doug's sister, is holding onto ill feelings toward Kathy and thinks her involvement in handling the affairs of the dead mother is wrong. Nevertheless, Dough and Kathy presses on by honoring her mother-in-law and Doug's mother wishes.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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thank you so much for reading along with the story. I hope you will continue to follow along to the next part where we attend the memorial service,
~patty~
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Me, too.
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning Patty:
Oh okay, I see that you did realize that in part 1 the amount in the letter was $50,000. That's terrific.
This story is continuing to be as realistic as the real life story would be and this story is unfolding nicely. I love it how Kathy remembered to ask for Security regarding the risk of the family drinking and the behaviors that could happen because of it.
It is definitely an interesting story. I believe many will follow it.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Good morning Patty:
Oh okay, I see that you did realize that in part 1 the amount in the letter was $50,000. That's terrific.
This story is continuing to be as realistic as the real life story would be and this story is unfolding nicely. I love it how Kathy remembered to ask for Security regarding the risk of the family drinking and the behaviors that could happen because of it.
It is definitely an interesting story. I believe many will follow it.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Hi Tier; thank you so much for reading along. I appreciate your comments about it being realistic. It is a fun story to tell!
~patty~
Comment from Linda Hughes
Well, the second installment to the story did not quite leap off the page for me. You could have gone back to edit the price of the check, and then made a slight notification of it. You repeat in dialog what is written in prose, and that is somewhat unimaginative. It lacks luster, and the prose is tedious. Good effort.
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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Well, the second installment to the story did not quite leap off the page for me. You could have gone back to edit the price of the check, and then made a slight notification of it. You repeat in dialog what is written in prose, and that is somewhat unimaginative. It lacks luster, and the prose is tedious. Good effort.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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thank you
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Patty
Strong continuation. You have the proper balance between showing and telling. The flow was excellent. You allow the reader to enter the story and experience the emotions Kathy and Doug are dealing with. Enjoyed.
Out of sixes.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Good morning, Patty
Strong continuation. You have the proper balance between showing and telling. The flow was excellent. You allow the reader to enter the story and experience the emotions Kathy and Doug are dealing with. Enjoyed.
Out of sixes.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 07-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Hi Ray; thank you so much for the positive review. I appreciate you following along,
~patty~
Comment from LaRosa
Ya know, I thought I remembered the money thing being less. Thanks for the note.
As for too long, I wish we could have heard more! The story-line and emotions of all the characters were expressed quite vividly. That pulls the readers in and makes us look forward to more.
Have a great family visit!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Ya know, I thought I remembered the money thing being less. Thanks for the note.
As for too long, I wish we could have heard more! The story-line and emotions of all the characters were expressed quite vividly. That pulls the readers in and makes us look forward to more.
Have a great family visit!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2017
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Hi there; thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed this second part,
~patty~
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I think that was a good spot to make the chapter break, and to me this chapter didn't seem too long 'cause I enjoyed it. You've got really believable family conflict here, Patty, and it's going well.
Enjoy your family visit,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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I think that was a good spot to make the chapter break, and to me this chapter didn't seem too long 'cause I enjoyed it. You've got really believable family conflict here, Patty, and it's going well.
Enjoy your family visit,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Hi valda; I'm so glad you enjoyed this second part. The next part should be up by the end of the week - thank you for reading along and the lovely review,
~patty~
Comment from Cindy Warren
Is this woman really dead? She must have known how they would react when Kathy called. Is this some crazy, manipulative way to get everyone together and stick it to Kathy? It almost seems like something she would do.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Is this woman really dead? She must have known how they would react when Kathy called. Is this some crazy, manipulative way to get everyone together and stick it to Kathy? It almost seems like something she would do.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Hi Cindy; thank you for continuing to follow the story. The next part will reveal a few things that will make it easier to understand the situation. I hope you will come along for the 'wild' ride,
~patty~
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very good. Things seem to be going fairly well so far. His sisters are even apologizing. I wonder why they all hated Kathy so much. I might have missed that.
I'll bet you're excited to see your daughter and her family. Have fun. :)
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Very good. Things seem to be going fairly well so far. His sisters are even apologizing. I wonder why they all hated Kathy so much. I might have missed that.
I'll bet you're excited to see your daughter and her family. Have fun. :)
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Hi Phyllis; I haven't let the reader know what exactly happened between the sisters and Kathy - more will be revealed at the actual event. Thank you so much for reading.
I've decided to take my laptop along on the trip - I'm invested in this story, and I won't be able to rest without writing,
~patty~
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Good...you'd be lost without it. :)
Comment from royowen
I guess this story is based loosely on families you might know. Not all families are particularly functional, and the death of a misunderstood "loved one"or indeed, a close relative, can stir up old resentments, awkward, but necessary communicated, old resentments reactivared. But normally people are usually quite civil, at least at funerals, or memorials...it could be theirs! Well done, Patty, good scribing, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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I guess this story is based loosely on families you might know. Not all families are particularly functional, and the death of a misunderstood "loved one"or indeed, a close relative, can stir up old resentments, awkward, but necessary communicated, old resentments reactivared. But normally people are usually quite civil, at least at funerals, or memorials...it could be theirs! Well done, Patty, good scribing, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Hi Roy;
While most funerals or memorials are somewhat civil - I suspect this one will be full of tension and expressed and unexpressed thoughts.
Thank you for the encouraging and thoughtful review. I hope you will continue along for the ride,
~patty~
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Of course Patty
