The sight of you
A three line poem, 5-7-745 total reviews
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent three line poem kapot Great artwork and presentation to compliment your work. The eyes are definitely the window to the soul.
well done
blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Excellent three line poem kapot Great artwork and presentation to compliment your work. The eyes are definitely the window to the soul.
well done
blessings
Janet
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from royowen
well done Kahpot, a good entry in this three line poetry contest my friend, as they say, " the eye does not lie" but it can surly get me into trouble on occasions, well done, good luck in the contest, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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well done Kahpot, a good entry in this three line poetry contest my friend, as they say, " the eye does not lie" but it can surly get me into trouble on occasions, well done, good luck in the contest, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you-and yes it is surprising how much we can get into trouble without saying anything****kahpot
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That is so true
Comment from Hitcher
I think your body will be wanting a little more after your eyes have gorged on her poetry in motion, desire is about to explode and take you both to new heights I reckon. Very impressive 3 lined poem friend, good luck!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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I think your body will be wanting a little more after your eyes have gorged on her poetry in motion, desire is about to explode and take you both to new heights I reckon. Very impressive 3 lined poem friend, good luck!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much, "Poetry in motion" isn't it a wonder when it happens****kahpot
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You are not wrong there friend : ))
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Fantastic piece with stunning pic to go along with it. Creative, says much in the few words/syllables allotted. Takes a talent to be able to create in a confined parameter such as that. I love this. This would be a great poster! Good luck.
Wendy
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Fantastic piece with stunning pic to go along with it. Creative, says much in the few words/syllables allotted. Takes a talent to be able to create in a confined parameter such as that. I love this. This would be a great poster! Good luck.
Wendy
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Kahapot;
=> And blessings to you my friend.
=>This is such a lusciously written romantic piece of poetry and so interesting in three lines.
=>Your compassionately developed that sensuality, of a particular romantic situation, that encompassed everything you are feeling about loving someone in such a short form.
=>I wish you all the luck in the world in this contest and take care and have a good one, Kahpot.
Alx
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Cheers, Kahapot;
=> And blessings to you my friend.
=>This is such a lusciously written romantic piece of poetry and so interesting in three lines.
=>Your compassionately developed that sensuality, of a particular romantic situation, that encompassed everything you are feeling about loving someone in such a short form.
=>I wish you all the luck in the world in this contest and take care and have a good one, Kahpot.
Alx
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much for your very encouraging review****kahpot
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You're very welcome.
Alx
Comment from robyn corum
K,
A neat entry for the 3-line contest. I remember really well how I felt about my husband the first time I saw him. I actually thought, I could marry that guy. *smile* Based just on the way he looked and acted. Your poem sums up the fascination really well.
My only note -- your poem:
my eyes take you in
quenching my body's desire
joined with your every movement
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It seems like you start out with the information about the eyes - seeing this person and developing these opinions. The second line seems to speak to later in the relationship(?) and then the third line seems to return to the information about the eyes. I wonder if it might not be more fluid to combine all the stuff having to do with the eyes:
my eyes take you in
joined with your every movement
quenching my body's desire
Does that make sense at all? *smile*
Either way, you are welcome to use my thoughts or toss them, as you see fit.
Have a marvelous day and good luck in the voting!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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K,
A neat entry for the 3-line contest. I remember really well how I felt about my husband the first time I saw him. I actually thought, I could marry that guy. *smile* Based just on the way he looked and acted. Your poem sums up the fascination really well.
My only note -- your poem:
my eyes take you in
quenching my body's desire
joined with your every movement
***
It seems like you start out with the information about the eyes - seeing this person and developing these opinions. The second line seems to speak to later in the relationship(?) and then the third line seems to return to the information about the eyes. I wonder if it might not be more fluid to combine all the stuff having to do with the eyes:
my eyes take you in
joined with your every movement
quenching my body's desire
Does that make sense at all? *smile*
Either way, you are welcome to use my thoughts or toss them, as you see fit.
Have a marvelous day and good luck in the voting!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much, your suggestions, this would make the ( crescendo at the end) so to speak and this would be a far better format I like it very much, " Am I allowed to change after people have reviewed as is?" many thanks****kahpot
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Yep. Tom says you can edit at anytime.
Comment from Hayley Zemontas
Great little 3 line poem with a lot of truth and depth in its message. I believe that you can tell a lot about people from their eyes. Their faces can hide when their sad but their eyes tell a different story. 'Quenching my body's desire' a very powerful line, showing just how strongly we are drawn to the light and emotion that we see in individuals eyes. Good job
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Great little 3 line poem with a lot of truth and depth in its message. I believe that you can tell a lot about people from their eyes. Their faces can hide when their sad but their eyes tell a different story. 'Quenching my body's desire' a very powerful line, showing just how strongly we are drawn to the light and emotion that we see in individuals eyes. Good job
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there,
You've penned quite the statement within the three lines of your poem. I like the artwork you chose to go with the piece and I am in agreement with your Author's notes - eyes tell you everything you need to know.
Good luck to you in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Hi there,
You've penned quite the statement within the three lines of your poem. I like the artwork you chose to go with the piece and I am in agreement with your Author's notes - eyes tell you everything you need to know.
Good luck to you in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your 3 line poem, kahpot. Your syllable count is correct per line. The picture choice is perfect. You have taken an idea, the eyes are the windows to the soul, & gave it a fresh outlook. Good job & thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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You did a great job with your 3 line poem, kahpot. Your syllable count is correct per line. The picture choice is perfect. You have taken an idea, the eyes are the windows to the soul, & gave it a fresh outlook. Good job & thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Kathleen S.
Your poem says it all. Desire can be a dangerous thing. Very well written and precise in words and great in showing human nature. Good choice of picture to go with your poem as well.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Your poem says it all. Desire can be a dangerous thing. Very well written and precise in words and great in showing human nature. Good choice of picture to go with your poem as well.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
