Beach Front Property
Not all that it is cracked up to be...50 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Ohhh, Mystery Writer. This is simultaneously stark and brilliant. I could see every second of this vignette in my mind as I read your words. SUPER excellent job. You ought to do so well in the contest with this masterpiece. xo
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Ohhh, Mystery Writer. This is simultaneously stark and brilliant. I could see every second of this vignette in my mind as I read your words. SUPER excellent job. You ought to do so well in the contest with this masterpiece. xo
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
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My pleasure!! Thanks for your awesome piece! xo
Comment from June Sargent
A sad commentary on what has become a plague in the cities. Forgotten souls who exist day to day - lines between fantasy and reality blurring more and more. This is a wonderful story in poetic form - albeit a sad one. The title lures you in and packs a surprising punch with the subject matter. Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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A sad commentary on what has become a plague in the cities. Forgotten souls who exist day to day - lines between fantasy and reality blurring more and more. This is a wonderful story in poetic form - albeit a sad one. The title lures you in and packs a surprising punch with the subject matter. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Sometimes the people who look like they have it all really have nothing. Have you ever seen the 20/20's or whatever show it is that watches pan handlers? Some of them do it for a living and are living in like $300,000 houses. They don't work a day in their life. It's insane.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Sometimes the people who look like they have it all really have nothing. Have you ever seen the 20/20's or whatever show it is that watches pan handlers? Some of them do it for a living and are living in like $300,000 houses. They don't work a day in their life. It's insane.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Ms. Snyder
I appreciate this being a story. A sad one that I did follow through the stanzas. Usually, a breaking line would be somewhat repetitive or possibly rhyme with another one in the poem. I was having a hard time with the syllable structure and meter in this poem. However, because the story was so poignant I will go ahead and give you the five stars and I would say that you have some lines that need a little work. There are extra words that could be removed to make it flow a little easier. If you would like some further discussion on this contest entry and advice I would be happy to offer in a message. Only if you are open to some pointers. Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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I appreciate this being a story. A sad one that I did follow through the stanzas. Usually, a breaking line would be somewhat repetitive or possibly rhyme with another one in the poem. I was having a hard time with the syllable structure and meter in this poem. However, because the story was so poignant I will go ahead and give you the five stars and I would say that you have some lines that need a little work. There are extra words that could be removed to make it flow a little easier. If you would like some further discussion on this contest entry and advice I would be happy to offer in a message. Only if you are open to some pointers. Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Sanku
This o ne seems to be about a person who wants to hide away from reality .mary's life is filled with voices and pretend..She curses reality .Though she is happy with her collected things she recalls her life is trash...
she is unhinged slightly because of her life?
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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This o ne seems to be about a person who wants to hide away from reality .mary's life is filled with voices and pretend..She curses reality .Though she is happy with her collected things she recalls her life is trash...
she is unhinged slightly because of her life?
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Heather Knight
I apologize if I'm terribly thick, but I understand Mary is a homeless person that lives by the beach?
Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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I apologize if I'm terribly thick, but I understand Mary is a homeless person that lives by the beach?
Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Stephanie Launiu
You've captured one of society's sad realities - the homeless and mentally challenged. I live in Hawaii and beaches are full of tents with homeless families and individuals living in them. The ocean and a homeless individual are stark comparisons. You have told a compelling story. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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You've captured one of society's sad realities - the homeless and mentally challenged. I live in Hawaii and beaches are full of tents with homeless families and individuals living in them. The ocean and a homeless individual are stark comparisons. You have told a compelling story. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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True, True, True Stephanie... Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from meeshu
a very well written piece in rhythmic verse. a sad story, that happens far too often. your writng really gives one the feel of Mary slipping in and out of coherency..
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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a very well written piece in rhythmic verse. a sad story, that happens far too often. your writng really gives one the feel of Mary slipping in and out of coherency..
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Earl Corp
Very unique poem dealing with mental health issues. The takeaway is any of us could be Mary. One question: is proabably supposed to be probably? Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Very unique poem dealing with mental health issues. The takeaway is any of us could be Mary. One question: is proabably supposed to be probably? Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from nomi338
The sad plight of the mentally and emotional unstable who live among us, need, really need to be in an environment where they can be cared for by trained , compassionate professionals and not just dropped off on some street corner or alley, ignored and forgotten, forced to fend for themselves, when they are clearly unable to do so. It is a national disgrace.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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The sad plight of the mentally and emotional unstable who live among us, need, really need to be in an environment where they can be cared for by trained , compassionate professionals and not just dropped off on some street corner or alley, ignored and forgotten, forced to fend for themselves, when they are clearly unable to do so. It is a national disgrace.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
