God's poetry
keeping the awesome gifts of GOD30 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
AMEN~
Hello, my dear friend Vance. I love how you love God's poetry! Favorite line:
It lets me relax and enjoy life for awhile I see softness written in the clouds
Nice imagery tone and tenor. I would have liked to see line breaks instead of a prose-like paragraph...and perhaps a simile too...but the imagery and tone works well, as does the prose-like narrative voicing.
One spag:
Oh, how I love GOD(')S poetry, I take it everywhere with me
It makes me sing and always smile
HERE TOO:
*They always call me to Take pause
lower case on t in take
I like the internal rhyme of loud and cloud;
and the assonance of of I plus internal rhyme of seek and speak in this line:
butterflies to seek a place of hide and seek, where only words from heaven speak.
It seems every sentences has internal rhymes...bravo. I especially like river and deliver.
Love the energy, tone and fervent flavor behind this poem.
You're graced!~
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
AMEN~
Hello, my dear friend Vance. I love how you love God's poetry! Favorite line:
It lets me relax and enjoy life for awhile I see softness written in the clouds
Nice imagery tone and tenor. I would have liked to see line breaks instead of a prose-like paragraph...and perhaps a simile too...but the imagery and tone works well, as does the prose-like narrative voicing.
One spag:
Oh, how I love GOD(')S poetry, I take it everywhere with me
It makes me sing and always smile
HERE TOO:
*They always call me to Take pause
lower case on t in take
I like the internal rhyme of loud and cloud;
and the assonance of of I plus internal rhyme of seek and speak in this line:
butterflies to seek a place of hide and seek, where only words from heaven speak.
It seems every sentences has internal rhymes...bravo. I especially like river and deliver.
Love the energy, tone and fervent flavor behind this poem.
You're graced!~
Love,
rd
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Oh dear rd, you are my grace, my angel and my mirror, so precious and so very deeply loved and appreciated! Thanks always, Vance
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The feeling (and mirror) is mutual, dear Angel-Vance! Love and smiles,
rd
Comment from Badger_29
Gear gray, I wanted this six stars because of its content it low rhyme and meter. However, if I was to improve on this it would be to add spaces as follows:
GOD'S POETRY
Oh, how I love GODS poetry, I take it everywhere with me
It makes me sing and always smile
It lets me relax and enjoy life for awhile.
I see softness written in the clouds
Until its passions yell out loud to chase the birds and butterflies to seek a place of hide and seek, where only words from heaven speak.
They always call me to Take pause and realize that they have a cause- that's meant to lead me to new awakenings
that will guide my mind to new and wonderful things.
That any good poet should understand and hope they will be shared well, by that poet's hand.
So now I work to meet that goal for it is now locked within my heart and soul.
Of course, I hope my skills will serve to deliver all the words and thoughts that run like a river-
in my heart and in my mind, leaving not one drop of love behind.
Amen.
Vance Seagle
Furthermore this is my prayer that this review find you safe sane horror and that you take this as an opportunity for improvement not any criticism on your wonderful abilities which I continue to applaud.
In His name,
Brother Badger AKA Darren
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
Gear gray, I wanted this six stars because of its content it low rhyme and meter. However, if I was to improve on this it would be to add spaces as follows:
GOD'S POETRY
Oh, how I love GODS poetry, I take it everywhere with me
It makes me sing and always smile
It lets me relax and enjoy life for awhile.
I see softness written in the clouds
Until its passions yell out loud to chase the birds and butterflies to seek a place of hide and seek, where only words from heaven speak.
They always call me to Take pause and realize that they have a cause- that's meant to lead me to new awakenings
that will guide my mind to new and wonderful things.
That any good poet should understand and hope they will be shared well, by that poet's hand.
So now I work to meet that goal for it is now locked within my heart and soul.
Of course, I hope my skills will serve to deliver all the words and thoughts that run like a river-
in my heart and in my mind, leaving not one drop of love behind.
Amen.
Vance Seagle
Furthermore this is my prayer that this review find you safe sane horror and that you take this as an opportunity for improvement not any criticism on your wonderful abilities which I continue to applaud.
In His name,
Brother Badger AKA Darren
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much Darren for your deeply meaningful and much appreciated review! Sure hope you will stay tuned always! VAnce
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What a great thing to say, it touches many levels for me. I conclude that you are wise
Comment from Irish Rain
What a lovely tribute to the poetry of God Mr. Vance.
He writes quite delightfully, doesn't He?
Nature makes a wonderful tablet!
Loved this,
Blessings...
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
What a lovely tribute to the poetry of God Mr. Vance.
He writes quite delightfully, doesn't He?
Nature makes a wonderful tablet!
Loved this,
Blessings...
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thanks so much Irish Rain, for raining such lovely response and stars on my poetry, which is so very sincerely appreciated! Vance
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You're most welcome, God bless!
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Thanks so very much Irish Rain for your wonderful review and stars! so greatly appreciated!
HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment from tfawcus
Good to hear from you, Vance, and that you are giving yourself time to smell the roses, enjoying God's creation. Poetry, like all things good, comes from a higher source than ourselves.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
Good to hear from you, Vance, and that you are giving yourself time to smell the roses, enjoying God's creation. Poetry, like all things good, comes from a higher source than ourselves.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thanks so much Tony, for your generous stars and lovely review, so very much appreciated! Vance
Comment from Teri7
Vance, This is a very nice and well written poem about Gods poetry. You used very good descriptive words that made me think of being outside and looking at all of God's creations and his beautiful clouds. Thank you for sharing! Blessings,Teri
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
Vance, This is a very nice and well written poem about Gods poetry. You used very good descriptive words that made me think of being outside and looking at all of God's creations and his beautiful clouds. Thank you for sharing! Blessings,Teri
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thanks so much Teri7 for your lovely review and generous stars, so very sincerely appreciated! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Taking time out to smell the flowers and see the butterflies and appreciate the birds, we all should do it and we then know what we can thank God for and then we share what we see with the world in our poetry, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
Taking time out to smell the flowers and see the butterflies and appreciate the birds, we all should do it and we then know what we can thank God for and then we share what we see with the world in our poetry, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thanks so much Dolly Dear, for your wonderful review and stars which I deeply appreciated! Vance
Comment from papa55mike
Let the Holy Spirit flow those words onto paper or screen. It not only keeps your mind fresh but shares your gift with many others. Those gifts are from God. I just finished a story, stop by for a read if you got time. Great job!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
Let the Holy Spirit flow those words onto paper or screen. It not only keeps your mind fresh but shares your gift with many others. Those gifts are from God. I just finished a story, stop by for a read if you got time. Great job!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thanks so very much, sincerelyMike, for your lovely review and stars, truly appreciated!! Vance
Comment from royowen
It's so good to hear from you again dear Vance, and I can see that you are still rejoicing in what the Lord's hand has produced for our enjoyment, and lasting monument to His glory, not the least is yourself great friend. A beautifully written song of praise to the almighty, well done my friend, good scribing and imbibing in His presence, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
It's so good to hear from you again dear Vance, and I can see that you are still rejoicing in what the Lord's hand has produced for our enjoyment, and lasting monument to His glory, not the least is yourself great friend. A beautifully written song of praise to the almighty, well done my friend, good scribing and imbibing in His presence, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Bless you always, dear brother ROY', and please always stay close! Vance
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Bless you
Comment from dovemarie
Dear Vance, YOur poetry truly does come from God, though I have a hard time reading without punctuation, I still get your rhyming. It has a good religious theme, and is quite a prayer. Dove
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
Dear Vance, YOur poetry truly does come from God, though I have a hard time reading without punctuation, I still get your rhyming. It has a good religious theme, and is quite a prayer. Dove
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thanks so much dear Dove for your wonderful review and stars, so sincerely appreciated! please always stay close! Vance
Comment from lyenochka
Really well said, Vance! Glad that your heart is full of God's poetry and His love that you are motivated and inspired to share all that beauty with others! Blessings!
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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
Really well said, Vance! Glad that your heart is full of God's poetry and His love that you are motivated and inspired to share all that beauty with others! Blessings!
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Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thanks so much dear lyenochka,for your lovely review and stars so very deeply appreciated! Please stay close always! Vance