The Gardens at Weatherbury
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Comment from robyn corum
Yvette,
Utterly deeeee-light-ful. Yep, yep, yep. I'd give you about ten stars if I could. The description of the actions of these characters was wonderful. I love your crazy imagination and it just tells me alllll over again that I think we will get along FAMOUSLY!
Or kill each other.
But it will certainly NOT be boring, I am sure. hehehe
Only one tiny note for your consideration - and I offer it humbly to your majesty --
--> I think, but it was hard to understand him. But he was turning into a real, muddy mess.
--> two 'buts' really close together?
Loved it. When I clicked on your name, Iwas thinking 'where are the stories???' So, YAY! Thanks!
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Yvette,
Utterly deeeee-light-ful. Yep, yep, yep. I'd give you about ten stars if I could. The description of the actions of these characters was wonderful. I love your crazy imagination and it just tells me alllll over again that I think we will get along FAMOUSLY!
Or kill each other.
But it will certainly NOT be boring, I am sure. hehehe
Only one tiny note for your consideration - and I offer it humbly to your majesty --
--> I think, but it was hard to understand him. But he was turning into a real, muddy mess.
--> two 'buts' really close together?
Loved it. When I clicked on your name, Iwas thinking 'where are the stories???' So, YAY! Thanks!
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Yep, hooray for the summertime! :) ;) And hooray for those stars, my lady -- it really felt good to get the imagination working again in the world of fantasy instead of simply 'making it through' the end of the school year - ugh! :) And thanx for that catch there -- it has been handled (although not with honey spray, I'm afraid - lol!) :)
So far as our meeting, I'm going for the 'circling each other for while' and then 'deciding to team up against the rest of the world' LOL! (wink, wink!) ;) :) Oh, and then? Look out world!! ;) :)
I am really looking forward to getting back to my writing and not just the quick poems... won't pass those up, I just really like to see these characters that live in my head brought to the page so that others can enjoy them too (hopefully!) ;) :) Thanx so much for keeping up with the shed (others may be following soon!) -- hoping to get this one wrapped up before summer's end... but we'll see what lies ahead (ugh)!! ;) Take care and have a wonderful day over there! ;) Yvette
Comment from Debbie Pope
I wish that I had three sets of arms to applaud your characterization in this chapter. Thank goodness Jerry did not die. I'm liking those imps. They are probably my favorite of your characters. It would be interesting, in the future, if their multiple arms and legs could exhibit opposing or conflicting personalities--for instance, upper arms praying and lower arms forming fists. Just an idea. Something in your text made me think you were going to do that and I thought at the time, "Now that's cool."
I love how you ended the conflict with the imps playing in the sprinkled water. Just charming. I'm out of sixes so you will have to take a virtual one for this good chapter.
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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I wish that I had three sets of arms to applaud your characterization in this chapter. Thank goodness Jerry did not die. I'm liking those imps. They are probably my favorite of your characters. It would be interesting, in the future, if their multiple arms and legs could exhibit opposing or conflicting personalities--for instance, upper arms praying and lower arms forming fists. Just an idea. Something in your text made me think you were going to do that and I thought at the time, "Now that's cool."
I love how you ended the conflict with the imps playing in the sprinkled water. Just charming. I'm out of sixes so you will have to take a virtual one for this good chapter.
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Look at you with the 'fantasy-thinking'! ;) :) I am taking some time for the reader to get to know all the character's personalities really well so that when we go out into the gardens, only 'action' and the occasional new character will be the focus... soooo, let's just say you may be on to something there, BBF... we'll see! ;) :) :) Thanx so much for keeping up with the shed -- I am hoping to get this wrapped up before summer's end... but we'll see what lies ahead!! ;) Take care of you down there and keep the imagination working! ;) Yvette
Comment from Bill Pinder
Very glad to see that the gardens at Weatherby have come to life again. I like this line about their upper arms being folded in defiance. I would give you six stars if I had it for the creative and entertaining value. Bet you're enjoying being done with school. Bill
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Very glad to see that the gardens at Weatherby have come to life again. I like this line about their upper arms being folded in defiance. I would give you six stars if I had it for the creative and entertaining value. Bet you're enjoying being done with school. Bill
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Thanx so much for the virtual six, Bill, and OH YEAH - I am extra-glad to be done with school this year! ;) :) Thanx so much for keeping up with the shed, sir -- hoping to get this wrapped up before summer's end... but we'll see what lies ahead!! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from richie b
Yvette,
This is the first chapter I have read, I will look into
the previous chapters.
You have certainly created a colorful and mystical
garden. Your characters own distinctive personalities.
Your garden setting will be host to vivid imagery
as your story unfolds. Your writing skills will shine!
Peace,
Richie
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Yvette,
This is the first chapter I have read, I will look into
the previous chapters.
You have certainly created a colorful and mystical
garden. Your characters own distinctive personalities.
Your garden setting will be host to vivid imagery
as your story unfolds. Your writing skills will shine!
Peace,
Richie
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Thanx so much, Richie, for your review on this one! ;) I do so hope you take a little time and go back to get on board with my little fantasy here... I'm hoping to get this wrapped up before summer's end... but we'll see what lies ahead!! ;) Take care of you out there, sir, and have a wonderful day! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sally Law
Jerry's quite the Drama King. This is a fun frolick at the Weatherbury Estate. Your characterizations are rich and come to life. This reminded me of my boys when they were little. They constantly interrupted, and had to be the center of attention when they were in a group.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xoxo
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Jerry's quite the Drama King. This is a fun frolick at the Weatherbury Estate. Your characterizations are rich and come to life. This reminded me of my boys when they were little. They constantly interrupted, and had to be the center of attention when they were in a group.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xoxo
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Oh, they are most certainly like children, Lady Sal, but Archie's a good 'imp tamer', don't you think? ;) :) Thanx so much for keeping up with the shed -- hoping to get this wrapped up before summer's end... but we'll see what lies ahead!! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Iza Deleanu
What? Clash of Titan because the scarcity of food?
"Oh, glorious and impressive Groundskeeper," he implored so pitifully, "please make the pink abomination give me the remaining berry of power!"
"Nooooo!!" Shot screeched, running toward Jerry and pushing him over. Shot continued his tirade. "It's mine, Groundskeeper! He hit me with his, so he shouldn't get anoth-"
Nice chapter it made me laugh, they act just like humans when it comes to survival. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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What? Clash of Titan because the scarcity of food?
"Oh, glorious and impressive Groundskeeper," he implored so pitifully, "please make the pink abomination give me the remaining berry of power!"
"Nooooo!!" Shot screeched, running toward Jerry and pushing him over. Shot continued his tirade. "It's mine, Groundskeeper! He hit me with his, so he shouldn't get anoth-"
Nice chapter it made me laugh, they act just like humans when it comes to survival. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Thank you, Iza, for your review! ;) :) Have a wonderful day, my lady! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY!!!!!!! Sorry I didn't get to review earlier, Yvette, I saw the picture on the welcome page, and fainted! LOL!!
Now, back to it. What a lovely surprise to see my favourite Groundskeeper again, and what problems he's having to deal with now. Thankfully, he has Sir Archie and sensible Constantine to help him out. Those imps, lol, what fun they are! I laughed when the fighting imps had a bucket of water thrown over them, and more when the other two wanted the same treatment! Your characters are amazing and it was a joy to read what they were getting up to again. Well done, my friend. Now, to go and lie down again.... :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY!!!!!!! Sorry I didn't get to review earlier, Yvette, I saw the picture on the welcome page, and fainted! LOL!!
Now, back to it. What a lovely surprise to see my favourite Groundskeeper again, and what problems he's having to deal with now. Thankfully, he has Sir Archie and sensible Constantine to help him out. Those imps, lol, what fun they are! I laughed when the fighting imps had a bucket of water thrown over them, and more when the other two wanted the same treatment! Your characters are amazing and it was a joy to read what they were getting up to again. Well done, my friend. Now, to go and lie down again.... :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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LOL - you funny lady, you!! ;) :) But, hey, Archie's a good 'imp tamer', don't you think? ;) :) Thanx so much for keeping up with the shed, Sandra - means a lot to me! ;) Hoping to get this wrapped up before summer's end... but we'll see what lies ahead!! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
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You're so welcome, Yvette. I do like this story, (if you hadn't guessed, lol) xxxx
Comment from Andrewm
An interesting piece and original.I kept reading,wondering what the story was about and Jerry, the Imps and the Groundkeeper.I will read more of your work.
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reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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An interesting piece and original.I kept reading,wondering what the story was about and Jerry, the Imps and the Groundkeeper.I will read more of your work.
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Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter about the imps that are doing what they like and need some measurements to keep them in line to learn them a lesson to be more obedient and do what they should do.
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A very well-written chapter about the imps that are doing what they like and need some measurements to keep them in line to learn them a lesson to be more obedient and do what they should do.
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Archie's a good 'imp tamer', don't you think? ;) :) Thanx so much for keeping up with the shed, Sandra -- hoping to get this wrapped up before summer's end... but we'll see what lies ahead!! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Fine, this chapter gives the readers a feel of schooling, training and learning fun experience; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep posting. ALCREATOR
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Fine, this chapter gives the readers a feel of schooling, training and learning fun experience; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep posting. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Thanx so much for stopping in for the review on this one!! Always great to hear from you over here! ;) Yvette
