Comment from Jacob David Collins

Excellent

I can imagine the disappointment when you didn't catch anything. Children always have high expectations. I enjoyed reading this piece and I thought your writing flowed well. Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020

Thanks for your review and kind comments. We had no idea we were unable to catch a fish with the equipment we were given. The downcast eyes? We felt guilty for eating all the crackers which, I think, were given to us because they knew we would do just that.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

These sound like happy memories trying to catch fish and enjoying the water with bare feet. The simple pleasures in life are always remembered fondly, much enjoyed, good rhymes and a joy to read Annie, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020

Thanks so much for your kind review. My Uncle had many inventive ideas to keep my cousins, my brother, and me, busy at the edge of camp so the adults could set up tents etc. with all of us out of their way. We had a very interesting childhood.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your contest entry. You did a great job putting this story into verse. I like the monorhyme of each verse. Your lines flow smoothly with great imagery. I could see the kids trudging off to catch the fish and eating the crackers along the way.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020

Thanks so much for your kind review. My Uncle had many inventive ideas to keep my cousins, my brother, and me, busy at the edge of camp so the adults could set up tents etc. with all of us out of their way. We had a very interesting childhood.

Comment from mauial

Excellent

Very uplifting lighthearted piece of your youth here. Brings back memories of me learning to swim with my older cousins when I was a boy in the stream that was close by my grandparents house.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020

Thanks so much for your kind review. My Uncle had many inventive ideas to keep my cousins, my brother, and me, busy at the edge of camp so the adults could set up tents etc. with all of us out of their way. We had a very interesting childhood.

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Your words keep a childhood memory alive. You write of a simpler time, children attempting to fish in a brook. "The crackers never made it on the hook" is a great line that gives the reader a smile and feel like she is there in your story. Your use of rhyming words is smooth and adds to the strength of your theme.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020

Thanks so much for your kind review. My Uncle had many inventive ideas to keep my cousins, my brother, and me, busy at the edge of camp so the adults could set up tents etc. with all of us out of their way. We had a very interesting childhood.

Comment from elchupakabra

Excellent

Fishing was never really my thing, my dad loves it and always wanted me to go fishing with him but I could never get into waking up that early lol. Great work, thanks for sharing. Later daze.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020

Thanks so much for your kind review. My Uncle had many inventive ideas to keep my cousins, my brother, and me, busy at the edge of camp so the adults could set up tents etc. with all of us out of their way. We had a very interesting childhood.

Comment from Fonda Little

Excellent

My favorite part was, "They sent us fishing, much to our chagrin,
With string, and crackers, and a safety pin.

Our little naked feet soon quickly took
Those treasures off to catch a fish to cook.
The crackers never made it on the hook.
We ate them wading in the freezing brook.", because your words painted such great visuals to immerse the reader inside the story!

The Lord led me to these verses after I read this,

Philippians 4:12-13
New International Version
12 I know what it is to be in need, and I know what it is to have plenty. I have learned the secret of being content in any and every situation, whether well fed or hungry, whether living in plenty or in want. 13 I can do all this through him who gives me strength.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020

Thanks so much for your kind review. My Uncle had many inventive ideas to keep my cousins, my brother, and me, busy at the edge of camp so the adults could set up tents etc. with all of us out of their way. We had a very interesting childhood.

Comment from CandySoda777

Exceptional

Your childhood sounds fun! I realize it must have been hard to write four rhymes in a row -good job! I like the light and childish style of your poem. Overall, very good.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020

Thanks so much for your kind review. My Uncle had many inventive ideas to keep my cousins, my brother, and me, busy at the edge of camp so the adults could set up tents etc. with all of us out of their way. We had a very interesting childhood.

Comment from equestrik

Excellent

Awe-I really like this and love the sweet visual of children at play in natures backyard! I think it sweet that they played and had fun and ate the crackers themselves. :)

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020

Thanks so much for your kind review. My Uncle had many inventive ideas to keep my cousins, my brother, and me, busy at the edge of camp so the adults could set up tents etc. with all of us out of their way. We had a very interesting childhood.

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Nicely done. We don't see too children's poetry. That is how this one reads to me. A nice tale of being young, free and being sent off by parents with no hope of catching a fish.

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020

Thanks so much for your kind review. My Uncle had many inventive ideas to keep my cousins, my brother, and me, busy at the edge of camp so the adults could set up tents etc. with all of us out of their way. We had a very interesting childhood.