Betrayal
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Comment from Pam (respa)
-An excellent chapter, Sandra.
-A very good beginning that picks up
from the ending of the previous chapter.
-Tania has a few sparks flying, which
is good to see, considering everything.
-Then, it gets worked out, and they
reminisce about how they met,
and how it impacted Grant.
-Then, there is news about the
hurricane, and all thoughts
are concern about Latifah.
-The final section is very good,
and I am wondering how you knew
about these wasps?! Were you an
agent in a previous life?!
-This would be a great scene
in a movie; I would love to see
them all flying around.
-I am not sure how they will get
in where the Harding's are, but it
will be very interesting to find out.
-Hopefully, everything will be well
for everyone on the island, and
Latifah will not go into premature labor.
-Well done, my friend!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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-An excellent chapter, Sandra.
-A very good beginning that picks up
from the ending of the previous chapter.
-Tania has a few sparks flying, which
is good to see, considering everything.
-Then, it gets worked out, and they
reminisce about how they met,
and how it impacted Grant.
-Then, there is news about the
hurricane, and all thoughts
are concern about Latifah.
-The final section is very good,
and I am wondering how you knew
about these wasps?! Were you an
agent in a previous life?!
-This would be a great scene
in a movie; I would love to see
them all flying around.
-I am not sure how they will get
in where the Harding's are, but it
will be very interesting to find out.
-Hopefully, everything will be well
for everyone on the island, and
Latifah will not go into premature labor.
-Well done, my friend!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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What an amazing review, Pam, thank you so much. I didn't realise how much I'd packed into this part. lol. I do get carried away sometimes. I've never been anywhere there's been a hurricane going on, but we did go to Jamaica a week after they'd had one. It was our honeymoon, so we were lucky. It must be scary. I just hope I can put it across okay. I'll soon know. lol.
I watched a spy drama on the television and they had a small drone and so I thought I could have a much smaller one, I think I'll try and sell my idea to MI6, or some such place! lol.
Thank you so much for the six stars, my friend, and this lovely review. I'm glad you liked this part. There are not many more chapters to go now. Warm hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandra xx
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Sandra. It is amazing to learn what you did! That happens to me sometimes.
Unfortunately, I have been in too many hurricanes and many were when I was young and living in a trailer. If you want any details, I will gladly provide them. What a time to have one while on your honeymoon; glad you missed it, though.
I think you are on to something with the wasp; you never know where things will take you. I look forward to seeing how you have them get it in the house! bbbbzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz!!!!!
Comment from Pantygynt
An exciting chapter with a assistance flying in and wasp like drones - very James Bond. Lol.
I don't know if there is a problem at my end or yours, but the paragraph below has different, much closer line spacing than the rest of the post. It looks as though the majority of the post is double spaced and this paragraph has no line spacing.
Rushing into the lounge, they saw Latifah sitting on the sofa, and Peter standing behind; both with strained faces and eyes glued to the television. Grant and Tania joined them. CNN news was flashing warnings as satellite pictures of a hurricane heading towards America was shown on the television's large screen. What was glaringly obvious to them all ... their tiny island was right in its path.
*****
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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An exciting chapter with a assistance flying in and wasp like drones - very James Bond. Lol.
I don't know if there is a problem at my end or yours, but the paragraph below has different, much closer line spacing than the rest of the post. It looks as though the majority of the post is double spaced and this paragraph has no line spacing.
Rushing into the lounge, they saw Latifah sitting on the sofa, and Peter standing behind; both with strained faces and eyes glued to the television. Grant and Tania joined them. CNN news was flashing warnings as satellite pictures of a hurricane heading towards America was shown on the television's large screen. What was glaringly obvious to them all ... their tiny island was right in its path.
*****
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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I don't know what happened there, but I've sorted it out now. No one else mentioned it, so thank you for that!! As for the wasp-spy, well, I had to keep up with the times, didn't I? Lol.
Thank you so much for this lovely review, my friend, and the six stars. It's going to get a bit hairier soon. Never having been in a hurricane, I'm hoping if I've written anything wrong, someone will point it out.
Right-O' time for me to be reading yours! When's it coming? xx :))
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It's there - just.
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On my way!
Comment from blondie560
Wow, Sandra! Lots of good stuff in this chapter. The hurricane is definitely a twist not expected. My friend was pregnant during Hurricane Andrew in 1992 in south Florida. They were telling women who were within two weeks of their delivery to go to the hospital. My friend was six weeks out. She had her daughter three weeks after the hurricane. You don't mess around with a hurricane.
Now, you have to explain what bacon butties are! Anew term I learned, tucking in. We would say chow down LOL! The mechanical wasp drone is genius- the proverbial I wish I was a fly on the wall. Thank you for a nice break in my Sunday. Have a lovely week! Take care, Sally
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Wow, Sandra! Lots of good stuff in this chapter. The hurricane is definitely a twist not expected. My friend was pregnant during Hurricane Andrew in 1992 in south Florida. They were telling women who were within two weeks of their delivery to go to the hospital. My friend was six weeks out. She had her daughter three weeks after the hurricane. You don't mess around with a hurricane.
Now, you have to explain what bacon butties are! Anew term I learned, tucking in. We would say chow down LOL! The mechanical wasp drone is genius- the proverbial I wish I was a fly on the wall. Thank you for a nice break in my Sunday. Have a lovely week! Take care, Sally
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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You've not heard of bacon butties??? Oh, you have been missing out, Sally! I had one for lunch. It's simple really, two slices of thick fresh bread, buttered and layered with a few slices of crispy grilled bacon. A 'buttie', is a sandwich! Lol. We are both learning a new language!
Thank you so very much for this lovely review, my friend, you made me laugh, a few times. Latifah only has a few weeks, so Tania will be watching over her. I'm glad you like my wasp-spy, I watched a spy drama on the television, and they had a small drone sneaking around. Mine is a lot smaller. I might see if the army wants to buy my invention. Lol. Thank you for the golden six, dear friend. I do enjoy your reviews and look forward to reading them. Warm hugs, and love. Sandra xx
Comment from damommy
Mechanical wasp spies? What will they think of next! On top of everything else, there's a hurricane a-comin'. Eager to see this Rapier fellow and what he's up to.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Mechanical wasp spies? What will they think of next! On top of everything else, there's a hurricane a-comin'. Eager to see this Rapier fellow and what he's up to.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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I saw something like that on one of the spy drama's on the television, so I thought if they can have them, so can my team. Lol. I'll put them back before they see they are missing! Thank you, my dear SATP, for another lovely review. I love the dog and orangutan! Brilliant! Love you lots. Sandra xxx
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I thought you invented that idea. Very clever. I have been re-watching the Rockford Files and he had an 'olive' with a microphone in it. Love and hugs coming your way.
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My goodness, they are old!! I had a crush on him! lol. xxx
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It was a toss up between James Garner and Tom Selleck. I also liked Edward Woodward in the old version of "The Equalizer."
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Oh, I did, too. Is Edward still alive? I like all three of those men. They made real men in those days, didn't they? Lol.
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Yes, they did. None these days can hold a candle to any of those. I saw Edward in something not long ago, but I don't know if he's died since. I'll check it out.
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He died in 2009. Did you see him in Breaker Morant? Last year, I treated myself to the whole set of Equalizer DVDs.
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I don't remember Breaker Morant, Graham's going to take a look on Amazon Prime to see if it's on there. I watched every one of his Equalizer series. They were great. I'll pop over and watch them all again with you! xx
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Oh, good! We can compare notes. 8-)
Comment from Begin Again
Awesome, girlfriend! I stopped writing just so I could read your story, and of course, it was well worth it. At least I don't have a baby on the way and a hurricane!!! The mixture of tension and romance has this old lady's heart jumping all over the place. And the addition of the tiny wasps.... a nice touch. Great job! Smiles and hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Awesome, girlfriend! I stopped writing just so I could read your story, and of course, it was well worth it. At least I don't have a baby on the way and a hurricane!!! The mixture of tension and romance has this old lady's heart jumping all over the place. And the addition of the tiny wasps.... a nice touch. Great job! Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Carol, for such a lovely review. I can't picture you as 'an old lady' somehow! I think things are going to hot up in the Bahamas, so keep watching. Sending you a humongous hug, for the golden star, my young friend. Hugs and love. Sandra xxx
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I couldn't think of myself as old either until I lost Mike. Life got real and I realized my time here was getting shorter by the minute. That's why writing again and Matthew's achievement are so important to me. I loved the build-up in your story. It's perfect!
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I know what you mean. I think that way a lot, so I'm now determined to get all the books running around in my head out onto this laptop. You are doing so well with all you have on at the moment, and writing as well. Incredible. xxx
Comment from aryr
This was a great continuation chapter, Sandra. I really enjoyed how you managed to split it into three parts-the first with Tania and Grant when they have their first argument only to be distracted by Peter, then you zeroed in on Jeff and Reg meeting at the airport then off to Monica's. It was a great idea to use the tiny robotic wasp. Then back to Tania and Grant and the terror they face knowing the hurricane is coming at them. I am sure that Peter and Latifah are terrified. Great job, blessings, hugs and smiles.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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This was a great continuation chapter, Sandra. I really enjoyed how you managed to split it into three parts-the first with Tania and Grant when they have their first argument only to be distracted by Peter, then you zeroed in on Jeff and Reg meeting at the airport then off to Monica's. It was a great idea to use the tiny robotic wasp. Then back to Tania and Grant and the terror they face knowing the hurricane is coming at them. I am sure that Peter and Latifah are terrified. Great job, blessings, hugs and smiles.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, dear Alie, for another lovely review. I'm so pleased you like how I'm writing this. It does keep the tempo going. But I think only another 4-5 parts will bring it to an end. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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You are so welcome Sandra, awww and I was enjoying it. Oh well, each good thing does come to an end. Blessings, hugs, smiles.
Comment from Ben Colder
In for a blow from the storm it seems. You are placing these two together nicely. I never thought for a moment these two would ever come into a romantic scene when first reading this story. Again you have done well. Wedding bells in the distance. Lucky man.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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In for a blow from the storm it seems. You are placing these two together nicely. I never thought for a moment these two would ever come into a romantic scene when first reading this story. Again you have done well. Wedding bells in the distance. Lucky man.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Yes, love is in the air, but so is a huge hurricane! Thank you so much for your really lovely review, Chuck, and the golden sixth star. I really appreciate you. Warm hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandy. xx
Comment from Sally Law
There's a lot brewing here besides the hurricane. I've
lost count as to how many of these I've been through. I hope they burrow down from the inevitable.
No errors to speak of. A great chapter!
Sending you my best today as always, dear Sandra.
Sal XOs....
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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There's a lot brewing here besides the hurricane. I've
lost count as to how many of these I've been through. I hope they burrow down from the inevitable.
No errors to speak of. A great chapter!
Sending you my best today as always, dear Sandra.
Sal XOs....
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you, dear Sally, for this lovely review and the six stunning stars! A hurricane is one thing I would not like to experience personally but I flew out to Jamaica the week after they'd have a big one. It was fortunate it didn't happen a week later because that was my honeymoon! Thanks, my dear friend. Warm hugs. :)) Sandra xxx
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You are most welcome. I'm away this week working on my Epilogue. A huge undertaking. I will be nappy to finish this in some ways. I always miss my characters. Blessings dear,
Sal xos💕
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
The flow of your writing is good. The story is encompassing many events that will ameliorate the present situation. There is a dangerous scenario building in the Harding house, but the observers are banking on new technology to help them become aware of whatever is being planned. Romance is blooming on two fronts as Grant's team is working well.
Ralf
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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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The flow of your writing is good. The story is encompassing many events that will ameliorate the present situation. There is a dangerous scenario building in the Harding house, but the observers are banking on new technology to help them become aware of whatever is being planned. Romance is blooming on two fronts as Grant's team is working well.
Ralf
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Ralf, for this lovely review. Lots coming up in the next part! I do like a bit of romance to lighten the load. Thanks, my friend. Warm hugs. Sandra xx
Comment from barbara.wilkey
No!! Not a hurricane!! What else could possibly go wrong. I am glad Grant and Tania are getting closer and I sure hope Reg's wasp device gives them the information they need. I LOVE this story.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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No!! Not a hurricane!! What else could possibly go wrong. I am glad Grant and Tania are getting closer and I sure hope Reg's wasp device gives them the information they need. I LOVE this story.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you so very much, Barbara, for the golden star and wonderful review! It's all heading towards an explossive meeting! :)) Thanks my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx
