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Comment from Ulla
Exceptional
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Hi Sandra, I didn't even notice whether it was short or long. Far too soon, I'd come to an end. It was a great chapter. So much was happening and, at the same time, you managed to fill in some back story, as well. Well told and very well written. But now what? A big hug. Ulla xxx

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2021


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
    Thank you so much, Ulla. I didn't realise how long it was until I'd checked it at the end. Sometimes I get carried away!! Lol. I'm so pleased you found it acceptable, I do tend to worry when I post. But now I want to get this book finished. Not much more to do. Thank you for that lovely sixth star, my friend. I really appreciate it. Warm hugs. Sandra xxx
reply by Ulla on 27-Jun-2021
    I so love this book. I do hope there's a few more chapters in there. Ulla xxx
Comment from blondie560
Exceptional
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Oh this was sooo good! I loved all the parts. I'm glad Grant finally woke up! Lol I can't wait to read what happens next. That was a traumatizing story about Rapier, but it doesn't redeem him. I can't wait to find out how Grant's mother became acquainted with him. Have an awesome week Sandra! Hugs, Sally

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2021


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
    It won't be long before we get to Grant's half brother and his mother now. Fun times ahead! Thank you so much for this lovely review, Sally, and a huge hug for the sixth shiny star! You are the best! Warm hugs, dear friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from alexisleech
Exceptional
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What a fabulous chapter - I don't think I can bear the thought of waiting a whole week until I know what happens next. The back story regarding Rapier murdering his father was so realistic, it had me standing in the kitchen beside him as the drama unfolded.
Beautifully written, as usual!

Alexis xxx

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2021


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
    Thank you so very much for this lovely review and that gorgeous sixth star! I was delighted that you thought the kitchen scene with Rapier was realistic, that was great! Thank you, my friend. Warm hugs, and lots of love. Sandra xxx
Comment from Ben Colder
Exceptional
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Wow! So Grant could be in danger? Unfortunately, the ordeal with a battered son and the mother happens much too often, even to this day. Good one, Sandy.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2021


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
    Thank you so much, Chuck, for this really lovely review, and the sixth gold star! That is so nice of you. Every bad person starts off somewhere, I don't believe any new born baby is born wicked, there has to be a reason somewhere. Thanks again, my friend. Warm hugs. Sandy. xxxx
reply by Ben Colder on 27-Jun-2021
    You are so right.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Exceptional
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Once again you have written a wonderful post and left a cliff hanger. The only part I'm wondering about is the wisdom of Grant leaving Anna and the kids alone. Yes, he freed them but if Rapier got to them once, he or somebody else could get to them again. He should have gotten them to a safe place. Just a thought/

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2021


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
    Thank you so much, Barbara, for another of your lovely reviews. Yes, I can see what you are saying and will take a look at that part. Thank you also, for the shiny sixth star!! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
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Sandra,
I really like this chapter. There is some mystery, and a lot of suspense.
Question: should normality be 'normalcy'? That might be knit picking sorry.
I like your flashback scene of Rapier and his dad and mom.
The way you end this chapter makes the reader want to turn the page.
Good luck with all your writing.
Cindy


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 Comment Written 27-Jun-2021


reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
    Thank you so much for reading this really long part, Cindy, and for your lovely review. The 'normality v nomalcy' is really a country thing. We in the UK use 'normality', while you in the US use 'normalcy'. It's strange how many differences we do have. Thank you again, my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx
reply by Cindy Decker 2 on 29-Jun-2021
    Hi, Sandra,
    I was reluctant to point out ?normality? because I thought it maybe a regional thing.
    Anyway, I love your story. You know right where to end a chapter to keep the reader?s interest for the next.
    Have a wonderful week.
    Cindy
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
    Never, ever be reluctant to point out my errors, even if they aren't errors but slight differences in languages. Because of people like you, I have learned so much more and improved my writing skills. I still have masses to learn. So, never be worried about mentioning anything you think I should know. Bless your heart, you are such a lovely friend. xxx
reply by Cindy Decker 2 on 29-Jun-2021
    You too, Sandra 😊!