Haiku (I Woke to a World)
Haiku53 total reviews
Comment from estory
You have great balance here, nice soft touches to the language, the natural images of sea and mist and sky, a real mysterious mood; the only thing it begs for is an epiphany moment, something that wake up to. A revelation of the experience. That liquid sky needs to be tied to something of the inner emotions. Then you'll be on the next level. estory
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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You have great balance here, nice soft touches to the language, the natural images of sea and mist and sky, a real mysterious mood; the only thing it begs for is an epiphany moment, something that wake up to. A revelation of the experience. That liquid sky needs to be tied to something of the inner emotions. Then you'll be on the next level. estory
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Hello there! I really appreciate this review. I also think my verse could be improved, but I have racked my brain to improve the satori, but no luck, and now with 49 reviews, I am a bit hesitant to change it... I will definitely remember your words when I write again. Much appreciated!
Melissa
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this Haiku poem contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. You described a beautiful scene from Mother Nature with this lovely Haiku. I enjoyed reading and good luck.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Thank you for sharing this Haiku poem contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. You described a beautiful scene from Mother Nature with this lovely Haiku. I enjoyed reading and good luck.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Hi Barbara. Writing a Haiku always puts me in a short and concise frame of mind... how much can I say with the fewest words... I consider it a puzzle of sorts. I appreciate you taking the time to review!
Melissa
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Hi Barbara. Writing a Haiku always puts me in a short and concise frame of mind... how much can I say with the fewest words... I consider it a puzzle of sorts. I appreciate you taking the time to review!
Melissa
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Hi Barbara. Writing a Haiku always puts me in a short and concise frame of mind... how much can I say with the fewest words... I consider it a puzzle of sorts. I appreciate you taking the time to review!
Melissa
Comment from Sally Law
Yes, I awoke to a misty world today too. Beautifully penned and illustrated in haiku format, dear. My blessings to you and for the contest. Merry Christmas!
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Yes, I awoke to a misty world today too. Beautifully penned and illustrated in haiku format, dear. My blessings to you and for the contest. Merry Christmas!
Sal XOs
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Hi Sally. Thanks for your wonderful words and review!! I appreciate the well wishes!
Melissa
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Hi Sally. Thanks for your wonderful words and review!! I appreciate the well wishes!
Melissa
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Hi Sally. Thanks for your wonderful words and review!! I appreciate the well wishes!
Melissa
Comment from Mark D. R.
Hi Melissa!
This is a terrific 5-7-5 poem for this contest entry. It is packed with most descriptive words and feelings. Liquid sky is exquisite phrasing. Sea of mist is nicely paired with your artwork.
Mark
P.S. You would be extremely lucky if this scene was outside your home (-;
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Hi Melissa!
This is a terrific 5-7-5 poem for this contest entry. It is packed with most descriptive words and feelings. Liquid sky is exquisite phrasing. Sea of mist is nicely paired with your artwork.
Mark
P.S. You would be extremely lucky if this scene was outside your home (-;
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Hi Mark.I am so glad you liked this one, Mark. Since you are very adept at writing this form, I take this praise in its highest form. Thanks so much!!
Melissa
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Hi Mark.I am so glad you liked this one, Mark. Since you are very adept at writing this form, I take this praise in its highest form. Thanks so much!!
Melissa
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Hi Mark.I am so glad you liked this one, Mark. Since you are very adept at writing this form, I take this praise in its highest form. Thanks so much!!
Melissa
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Touché !
Comment from Frances Jean
A wonderful Haiku, skillfully written obeying the requirements of the form. The picture you have chosen to accompany your little poem is beautiful, colourful and peaceful. It reminds me of the houseboat trip we did on the River Murray recently. (I wrote about it in my poem Might Murray) All the very best Franky
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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A wonderful Haiku, skillfully written obeying the requirements of the form. The picture you have chosen to accompany your little poem is beautiful, colourful and peaceful. It reminds me of the houseboat trip we did on the River Murray recently. (I wrote about it in my poem Might Murray) All the very best Franky
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Hello Franky. Thank you for your lovely review. I like to write about nature and use descriptions of the colors and seasons. Much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from dragonpoet
Melissa,
Nice use of metaphor and personification in this haiku to describe a murky sunrise.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Happy Holidays.
Joan
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Melissa,
Nice use of metaphor and personification in this haiku to describe a murky sunrise.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Happy Holidays.
Joan
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Thanks so much Joan. I certainly appreciate your time to review this. Hugs!
Melissa
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You are most kindly welcome, Melissa
Joan
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and
presentation, Melissa.
-You wrote a good haiku
with effective nature and
seasonal imagery.
-You paint a vivid word
picture of the mist and the sky
as you greeted the morning.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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-Nice artwork and
presentation, Melissa.
-You wrote a good haiku
with effective nature and
seasonal imagery.
-You paint a vivid word
picture of the mist and the sky
as you greeted the morning.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Hi Pam. Thanks for your lovely comments on this haiku. I guess I will need to change seasons now and progress on to winter LOL. Bunches of hugs, my friend.
Melissa
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You are very welcome, Melissa, and I appreciate your reply.🌺🌷
Comment from Boogienights
This is very beautifully descriptive short poem that celebrates the earth and sky. What better way to use words then to talk about the beauty the surrounds us. I wish you best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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This is very beautifully descriptive short poem that celebrates the earth and sky. What better way to use words then to talk about the beauty the surrounds us. I wish you best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Hi Sharon. Thank you so very much for the lovely review!!
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These misty mornings are commonplace in England during both the winter and the summer and never are they as beautiful as this. Very atmospheric Melissa, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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These misty mornings are commonplace in England during both the winter and the summer and never are they as beautiful as this. Very atmospheric Melissa, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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I think I am jealous of the region you live in and of the beauty of Lichfield. We do not have towns or villages with such picturesque scenery here in central Virginia. Thank you.
Melissa
Comment from Patty Palmer
Your words may be few, but they are very descriptive. I swear I can see what you're talking about just from those words. You did a great job!! Good luck with the contest.
Patty
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Your words may be few, but they are very descriptive. I swear I can see what you're talking about just from those words. You did a great job!! Good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Hi Patty. Thanks so much! I really appreciate your views on this Haiku!!
Melissa
