The Return
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Comment from Ben Colder
Crazy story, but interesting. God only knows how this will end up. Like all your stories, it will be good. Thanks for sharing. Good one, Sandy. I see nothing wrong.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Crazy story, but interesting. God only knows how this will end up. Like all your stories, it will be good. Thanks for sharing. Good one, Sandy. I see nothing wrong.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Chuck, it will be changing soon. Warm hugs, my friend. Sandy. xxx
Comment from damommy
Uh-oh. There's more to this than meets the eye. Of course, there is. Duh! He seems to think she's Meg, someone from him time, wherever he is. Somehow, I don't feel this is a good thing for Margot, but I hope I'm wrong.
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Uh-oh. There's more to this than meets the eye. Of course, there is. Duh! He seems to think she's Meg, someone from him time, wherever he is. Somehow, I don't feel this is a good thing for Margot, but I hope I'm wrong.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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LOL!! Of course there is! You are so funny, dear SATP. Thank you so very much for this lovely review and for that extra special golden star! You've made my day. We'll chat more in the week?? Love you always. Sandra xxx
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Yes, lets. Looking forward to it.
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I'll let you know when I'm definitely in so we can have a long chat. xxxx
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Great!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Who doesn't like a good ghost story? I think we all enjoy a romantic one, right? The ghost seems to have Margot mixed up with his Meg. Hmmm, that could be a problem. Bessie won't be any help because she is apparently a ghost as well. LOL Good job, Sandra. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Who doesn't like a good ghost story? I think we all enjoy a romantic one, right? The ghost seems to have Margot mixed up with his Meg. Hmmm, that could be a problem. Bessie won't be any help because she is apparently a ghost as well. LOL Good job, Sandra. Nancy:)
Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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I love ghosts! I had them in my This Time -That Time trilogy, they are easy to work with!! Lol. Thank you so very, very much for giving me another of your precious sixes, Nancy! I'm over the moon that you are liking this story. You'll learn a bit more about Bessie as the story progresses. Thank you, my dear, sweet friend. Love you lots, Sandra. xxx
Comment from Pantygynt
This continues a good beginning with a great second helping. If it had had pages I would have been turning them.
I was a little confused at the beginning by the opening sentence:
'Wasting no time, Margot asked Mr Reid if they could go straight to her flat so he could give her a quick valuation.' I thought perhaps this needed a little explanation. I might have written:
'Wasting no time, Margot asked Mr Reid if they could go straight to her flat so he could give her a valuation for its quick sale.'
But it is a minor point probably only necessary because of the week's gap in the serialisation.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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This continues a good beginning with a great second helping. If it had had pages I would have been turning them.
I was a little confused at the beginning by the opening sentence:
'Wasting no time, Margot asked Mr Reid if they could go straight to her flat so he could give her a quick valuation.' I thought perhaps this needed a little explanation. I might have written:
'Wasting no time, Margot asked Mr Reid if they could go straight to her flat so he could give her a valuation for its quick sale.'
But it is a minor point probably only necessary because of the week's gap in the serialisation.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Thank you! This is how it reads now:
Wasting no time, Margot asked Mr Reid if they could go straight to her flat so he could give her a quick valuation for a speedy sale....
I'm glad you pointed that out. And, what a lovely compliment, to say you would be turning the pages. That's what I'm like with yours.
Thank you so much for the sixth star, Jim, and the nice review. I really appreciated it. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Begin Again
And just when one feels they are exactly where they belong, it all goes topsy turvy. The twinkling eyes of Bessie and her responses make me feel she's a ghost, but not at all ready to reveal herself. He, on the other hand, sets me a bit on edge. He comes and lures her into his web, and then announces he might be leaving...but for how long and why? Aww the reader enjoys the suspense and the chills.
Smiles and hugs, Sandra. Another terrific story unfolding. Congratulations on the response. Awesome!!!
Love ya, Carol
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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And just when one feels they are exactly where they belong, it all goes topsy turvy. The twinkling eyes of Bessie and her responses make me feel she's a ghost, but not at all ready to reveal herself. He, on the other hand, sets me a bit on edge. He comes and lures her into his web, and then announces he might be leaving...but for how long and why? Aww the reader enjoys the suspense and the chills.
Smiles and hugs, Sandra. Another terrific story unfolding. Congratulations on the response. Awesome!!!
Love ya, Carol
Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Aww, thank you, Carol, coming from another superb author, this is the greatest compliment I could have. The sixth star is the icing on top. Margot has a few things to learn yet before.... Sorry, I don't know what happened there, it has to be those darned ghosts!!! Lol. Thanks so much, dear friend. Love you loads! Sandra xxxx
Comment from Jasmine Girl
It's strange that the Holton House comes with a housekeeper. Can she afford to pay her? It looks like she can't forget all the intimate moment of her former boyfriend who left her in the cold.
You did a great job expressing her sensual imagination.
Exceptionally done.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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It's strange that the Holton House comes with a housekeeper. Can she afford to pay her? It looks like she can't forget all the intimate moment of her former boyfriend who left her in the cold.
You did a great job expressing her sensual imagination.
Exceptionally done.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Aw, thank you so much, Jasmine, for giving me the golden sixth star! You have made my day. I think Margot will be having a chat with Bessie about staying on. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part. Thank you, my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Sandra,
Another good continuation as the ghostly fella thickens the plot. Good stuff
full of mint rosemary and lavender, - should there be a comma after mint here?
'Ah, of course, Mr Reis would have let you know.' - Mr Reid.
three sets of Egyption cotton sheets. - Egyptian.
would have to wait until and aerial could be fitted - an aerial.
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Hi Sandra,
Another good continuation as the ghostly fella thickens the plot. Good stuff
full of mint rosemary and lavender, - should there be a comma after mint here?
'Ah, of course, Mr Reis would have let you know.' - Mr Reid.
three sets of Egyption cotton sheets. - Egyptian.
would have to wait until and aerial could be fitted - an aerial.
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Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, Gareth, I'm so pleased you're back! I've made all those corrections of my stupid errors! I'd been through it so many times, too. Thanks for your lovely review, my friend. I'm glad you like the plot. Warm hugs. :)) Sandra xx
Hey, if you get an message from me on Facebook, don't open it, I was hacked!! :(
Comment from BethShelby
This is intriguing and eerie. I wonder if she will soon regret buying his place and if she will fear she has been lured into something that she can't handle. I also wonder about the maid. Is she even real or is she a ghost as well. I'll be waiting for more of this story.
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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This is intriguing and eerie. I wonder if she will soon regret buying his place and if she will fear she has been lured into something that she can't handle. I also wonder about the maid. Is she even real or is she a ghost as well. I'll be waiting for more of this story.
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Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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She knows she belongs there, but doesn't know why. (If I'd been her, I'd have run a mile! lol) Is Bessie a ghost? Or something else? We will find out soon. :))
Thank you so much for reading chapter two, Beth, I'm glad you are enjoying it. Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Ulla
I absolutely love this story, Sandra. It's really fascinating. So she's bought the house where she feels she belongs, and now he's back as well, albeit he may be away for a while.
I just wonder whether Bessie is a ghost as well, or a mere remembrance from a time that once was. I'll have to wait and see. A big hug. Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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I absolutely love this story, Sandra. It's really fascinating. So she's bought the house where she feels she belongs, and now he's back as well, albeit he may be away for a while.
I just wonder whether Bessie is a ghost as well, or a mere remembrance from a time that once was. I'll have to wait and see. A big hug. Ulla xxx
Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Of course you're right, you will have to wait and see!!! Lol. Thank you so much, Ulla, for this really lovely review, and the golden star! I'm so relieved you are enjoying the story. Thanks so much, my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xxxx
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I love it! xxx
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You have me hooked on this story. I absolutely love it.
He raised a hand in greeting and after a few more minutes he finished the call. ('more' is an extra word and not needed)
'Actually, that will fit in fine with me. ('with me' isn't needed)
And as if to prove it, she bent down and picked up the metal bowl, that had apparently fallen to ('down' is extra and not needed)
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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You have me hooked on this story. I absolutely love it.
He raised a hand in greeting and after a few more minutes he finished the call. ('more' is an extra word and not needed)
'Actually, that will fit in fine with me. ('with me' isn't needed)
And as if to prove it, she bent down and picked up the metal bowl, that had apparently fallen to ('down' is extra and not needed)
Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, Barbara, and the golden 6th star! And a big thank you for picking up those nits. I'll go and sort them out! I'm glad you are enjoying this one. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
