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Erotic Turmoil

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Comment from lancellot
Exceptional
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This is was a solid scene. You kept things light, not to overshadow Lord Brandon's introduction to the party and his exit, but, rather than a commotion outside, You may want to show, how the 'older and drunk' man managed to get through the doors.

Good work.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
    That's a good idea, Lance. I'll work on that. It has so much potential as you say, an 'older, drunk man' coming through the doors.
    Thank you so much for this lovely, very helpful review, my friend. And a humongous thank you for the sixth golden star!! Warm hugs, Sandra xx
    I'm sorry it's taken so long to reply, we've had the Queens Jubilee here, and there's been a lot to do. There will never be another monach who will live to serve for over 70 years!
Comment from BethShelby
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This is another wonderfully written chapter. Margot does deserve to be on stage after carrying that off so well. I would imagine anyone which be extremely nervous under those circumstances. I'm sure the father hasn't given up on his plans to keep Meg from marrying his son.

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 Comment Written 05-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
    No, Lord Brandon hasn't given up, and won't. But, Miles has his own mind. Fun ahead, Beth! Thanks so much for another lovely review, my friend. Warm hugs. Sandra xx
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Exceptional
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Miles is starting to believe his father isn't as honest as he thought. I really like this.

I happen to know everyone coming tonight fully empathise with you. (empathises??? I read it as a plural.)

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
    Thank you, Barbara, for the golden star, lovely comments and for picking up on 'empathises' . I've made the correction. You're right about Miles' thoughts on his father. More facts coming to light next! Thanks again, my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from damommy
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I lost out on the chapters while I was off FS, but I think I know what's going on now. It's too bad Lord Brandon had to burst in like that. Probably his guilty conscience. I'll try to keep up from now on.

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 Comment Written 05-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
    Hi dear sister! How lovely to have you back. You've had a tough time of it, and I've been very worried about you. I'm so, so pleased to see you reviewing again, but take your time. I'll always love my SATP. Love and humongous hugs, Sandra xxxx
reply by damommy on 06-Jun-2022
    Bless your heart. I love you so much. Besides falling into a mental chasm, I'm having some health issues that need to be addressed. I want to chat soon. Bear with me.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
    I'll be there for you when you want to chat. Just let me know, or try to see if I'm on line. Any time. Love and hugs. xxx