Conscience Calling
We are all responsible for our actions45 total reviews
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Mystery poet a good day to you. I hope all is well with you. I just love love loved this poem. Everything from the flow of it, to the rhymes and the depth of the message was beautifully composed. Great work!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Hello Mystery poet a good day to you. I hope all is well with you. I just love love loved this poem. Everything from the flow of it, to the rhymes and the depth of the message was beautifully composed. Great work!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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You my friend, are so very sweet! I appreciate those kind words more than you could possibly know right now. I thank you so very much!!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Unfortunately it seems to be the state of today's society that people do not take responsibility for their own actions and they even blame Governments and families for their wrong doing and not themselves. This is a poignant write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Unfortunately it seems to be the state of today's society that people do not take responsibility for their own actions and they even blame Governments and families for their wrong doing and not themselves. This is a poignant write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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You my dear friend are so very kind. I truly appreciate your lovely review and thoughtful words. I thank you so very much Dolly, as it means a lot to me.
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You are most welcome x x x
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nicely written. Good work.
Wonderful sentiment.
I wish that the last line was true, but I fear it isn't.
But I'm guessing that it hinges on whether the pray-er is praying, or speechifying, or repeating something memorized. I'm afraid some don't know the difference. Or: God bless Mommy and Daddy and Aunt Sue, and give me a red bicycle. Amen
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Very nicely written. Good work.
Wonderful sentiment.
I wish that the last line was true, but I fear it isn't.
But I'm guessing that it hinges on whether the pray-er is praying, or speechifying, or repeating something memorized. I'm afraid some don't know the difference. Or: God bless Mommy and Daddy and Aunt Sue, and give me a red bicycle. Amen
Best wishes.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Thank you Wayne. I agree with you 100% about the last line, if you are babbling and not wanting to change the attitude, then it won't do much good. And actually you and others who always take the the time to give feedback is why I added, yet don't tell what them what they what they want to hear...
That is priceless to me. Thank you again my friend for the awesome review and kind words about this poem.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I concur with all that's written herein and yet life is full of opposite which is a bane and a blessing for without the sad there'd be no glad, no light without the dark, maybe not physically but psychologically.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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I concur with all that's written herein and yet life is full of opposite which is a bane and a blessing for without the sad there'd be no glad, no light without the dark, maybe not physically but psychologically.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Hey Tom, lol, I am not saying it is easy to follow, and actually unlikely that we follow these every minute of everyday. Just giving a little food for thought. I know of one person (and it would be most inappropriate to mention any names, who lives in the house with me) who is a nice guy but grumbles about everything from the stuff on the news to people who have no work ethics, things aren't right in the world, blah blah blah! Some have the answer for everything and truly need to get over themselves. So while trying to keep with my positive attitude while going through a little bit of a rough time of my own, I wrote this to get it off my chest, with hopes it would help. Actually some of my greatest blessings came from the mistakes I have made. I think I will add one more stanza to my poem. Thanks for the therapy session my friend, as I really needed that. Honestly!! : )
Comment from Goodadvicechan
We may not know the truth but there is always something above us knows what we did. Therefore we all should do deeds with a conscience. If we do that we will live a life without regrets.
I like this poem. Thanks for sharing.
Good luck to your cintest
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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We may not know the truth but there is always something above us knows what we did. Therefore we all should do deeds with a conscience. If we do that we will live a life without regrets.
I like this poem. Thanks for sharing.
Good luck to your cintest
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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You my dear friend are so very kind. I truly appreciate your lovely review and thoughtful words. I thank you so very much as it means a lot to me.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Keep looking for good and you will find good.
This is advice I try to live by, even though it is sometimes very hard to find good in a person. But it's there - perhaps buried in the debris you mention.
This is an uplifting poem you have penned, and I wish you the best in this contest.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Keep looking for good and you will find good.
This is advice I try to live by, even though it is sometimes very hard to find good in a person. But it's there - perhaps buried in the debris you mention.
This is an uplifting poem you have penned, and I wish you the best in this contest.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Pam, I agree with you about how hard it can be, and was hoping it didn't sound like that I was pointing the finger at others, as I was talking about myself as well. But a few minutes ago, I went and added a few lines to show that I am guilty as well we these thoughts. Even though, like you I do try to keep my cup full at all times, but it spills out sometimes. Lol, actually I was directing a little at my husband too, as I wrote, "I know we are human, we all get uptight, but some need to grumble from morning to night." I truly appreciate your lovely review and thoughtful words. I thank you so very much as it means a lot to me.
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You're so very welcome!
Comment from Fleedleflump
It's absolutely crucial to remember that other people will have a completely different experience of life to yours. Things you consider fundamental truths will seem nonsensical to then and - crucially - the same will be true in the other direction.
I very much enjoyed your poem.
Mike
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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It's absolutely crucial to remember that other people will have a completely different experience of life to yours. Things you consider fundamental truths will seem nonsensical to then and - crucially - the same will be true in the other direction.
I very much enjoyed your poem.
Mike
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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You my dear friend are so very kind. I truly appreciate your thoughtful words, Mike. I was hoping it didn't seem like I was pointing my finger at others without looking at myself. I went in and changed some so it didn't appear that way. LOL, actually I also added a line, that was directed at my husband that went like this, "we all are human, we all get uptight, but some need to grumble from morning to night". I know I am so bad!!! I thank you so very much as it means a lot to me. : )
Comment from Wendy G
Well written and thought-provoking poem, which speaks about not judging others, as we have not walked in their shoes. I suggest that you don't have capitals for "love" and "guidance", nor for "pray", as they are not naming nouns, and hence not necessary. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Well written and thought-provoking poem, which speaks about not judging others, as we have not walked in their shoes. I suggest that you don't have capitals for "love" and "guidance", nor for "pray", as they are not naming nouns, and hence not necessary. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Thanks Wendy for your kind review and comments.Your's and other's feedback is actually exactly what I was speaking of when I said, yet don't tell someone what they want to hear. You took the time to be honest with me and that is priceless to me. I did actually edited the word pray as you suggestted. However when I am speaking of something that is God's, to me it is as important as His name because it belongs to Him. I'm just kind of funny that way. But still appreciate your suggestions none the less. Thank you very much for that my friend.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Well, you make good points and you rhyme all of them too yet you sound a bit preachy if I can be honest with you. The flow is pretty smooth and I agree with most of what you tell us. I might suggest tightening it up a little because some of the points are said in different ways. I also might suggest leaving the religiosity out of it at the end. Mentioning God near the finish changes the whole tenor of the poem.
Thanks for hearing me out.
Jesse
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Well, you make good points and you rhyme all of them too yet you sound a bit preachy if I can be honest with you. The flow is pretty smooth and I agree with most of what you tell us. I might suggest tightening it up a little because some of the points are said in different ways. I also might suggest leaving the religiosity out of it at the end. Mentioning God near the finish changes the whole tenor of the poem.
Thanks for hearing me out.
Jesse
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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Oh Jesse, what am I going to do with you? I love that I have a few people that I love to disagree with and it is fun to debate with you. However, because most of your review was so lovely, I will just say that I did edit to make it not seem so preachy and admit that much of this was not pointing the finger, as I am human and have the same problems.
And for a little fun, and this is meant towards my husband. LOL, I wrote,
"we are all human, we all get uptight, but some need to grumble from morning to night." He is a good guy most of the time! hehe! But I can't budge on the parts where I give praise to my God, as it is through the Holy Spirit that a real conscience comes from. So I guess we will have to take this up another time, as I cannot disclose my identity. It has been fun though, and I thank you for the kind words my friend!!! : )
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Okay. Let's agree to disagree.
Until we meet again,
Jesse
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Lol, my friend!
Comment from lyenochka
Great poem with a strong message to "Judge not lest ye be judged." Your summarize it well in the final couplet, as in the act of praying in relationship to our God Who modeled, humility, we will learn humility. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Great poem with a strong message to "Judge not lest ye be judged." Your summarize it well in the final couplet, as in the act of praying in relationship to our God Who modeled, humility, we will learn humility. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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I thank you so very much for the very lovely review. Lol, a lot of this was directed at my husband when he watches the news, as I myself boycotted it. There's nothing I can do about it but pray, yet we are all human and sometimes especially when it comes to some of our leaders, it's hard to stay positive. But thank you again my friend!
