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Comment from lyenochka
Oh my! Another great entry to this contest! My mind is swimming now because every one I read was fabulous! And how thoughtful to use Terry's dad's poem to focus on. And you gave us such a healthy view of life and death in your poem. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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Oh my! Another great entry to this contest! My mind is swimming now because every one I read was fabulous! And how thoughtful to use Terry's dad's poem to focus on. And you gave us such a healthy view of life and death in your poem. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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Thank you Helen! I appreciate such a kind review for this very long poem. It was so long that I feared putting some to sleep with it. Lol. When I signed up I missed the part about each stanza being ten lines. But I have to thank you for part of it. You didn't inspire me because your just too young for that. You've been in your golden years even less years than me. But while writing this one, I kept using the heart beat that you have told me about for the meter on these kind. So w every line, I read it as bump ba bump.And if I had one out of meter (even w the syllable count right, I sure knew it.So thanks for that too! And of course your kind words!
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Comment from Jessica Wheeler
Amazing- you nailed this! It was fun to read, and your rhymes were terrific. My favorite line (hard to choose)- "or bout a store they once called Sears"
I laughed (obnoxiously) out loud. Well done, I'm such a fan of yours!
<3
Jessica
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Amazing- you nailed this! It was fun to read, and your rhymes were terrific. My favorite line (hard to choose)- "or bout a store they once called Sears"
I laughed (obnoxiously) out loud. Well done, I'm such a fan of yours!
<3
Jessica
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Oh Jessica, I truly just adore you. You are so Sweet and I love your sense of humor. We might have that in common as so many of my poetry is humor with a twist at the end. So you look so beautiful and young, I am sure that you probably didn?t get the remark about rabbit ears, as that was the only way we could watch tv back in the fifties when I was born.
I thank you so very much for such a kind review and comments. And truly appreciated your gracious six stars. It was especially an honor to write alongside of Gil Broxson?s original. Yet I think ten lines per stanza was a lot, but it was a fun prompt! Thanks again for your kind comments, my very dear friend!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I expect the golden years have been so named because these are the days we should be relaxing and enjoying retirement and all the good things in life and the aches and pains and health trials do not get a mention. We are lucky if we live beyond 65 and all those extra years of life are a bonus and we should appreciate this time. Fine commentary here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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I expect the golden years have been so named because these are the days we should be relaxing and enjoying retirement and all the good things in life and the aches and pains and health trials do not get a mention. We are lucky if we live beyond 65 and all those extra years of life are a bonus and we should appreciate this time. Fine commentary here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Hi there Dolly. I thank you so very much for such a kind review and comments. I loved writng it, but I felt it was a little too long. It was especially an honor to write alongside of Gil Broxson?s original. Yet I think ten lines per stanza was a lot, but it was a fun prompt! Thanks again for your kind comments, my very dear friend!
My only living aunt just passed away about a month ago.
She died at 99, the day before her birthday. I so wished she could have seen the big one.
Comment from Janet Foor
It looks like you had fun writing this one Debi. It's a new form to me but you did it justice with "Golden - All through the years". Fun references throughout this delightful Glosa.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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It looks like you had fun writing this one Debi. It's a new form to me but you did it justice with "Golden - All through the years". Fun references throughout this delightful Glosa.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Hello dear Janet, I thank you so very much for such a kind review and comments. I loved writng it, but I felt it was a little too long. It was especially an honor to write alongside of Gil Broxson?s original. Yet I think ten lines per stanza was a lot, but it was a fun prompt! Thanks again for your kind comments, my very dear friend!
My only living aunt just passed away about a month ago.
She died at 99, the day before her birthday. I so wished she could have seen the big one.
Comment from karenina
Hello, Debi! Wow. Leave it to you, my friend, to write this with such a twinkle in your eye!
Ah, these golden years are often not quite what they're cracked up to be! I'm "hanging on" to my sixties and can so relate!
God only knows what's ahead...but here's hoping we're still kicking and writing to our hearts' content!
Terry's dad? A poet! You have all the inside info! I hope you put a big smile on Terry's face. You sure did on mine!
Best of Luck!
Karenina
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Hello, Debi! Wow. Leave it to you, my friend, to write this with such a twinkle in your eye!
Ah, these golden years are often not quite what they're cracked up to be! I'm "hanging on" to my sixties and can so relate!
God only knows what's ahead...but here's hoping we're still kicking and writing to our hearts' content!
Terry's dad? A poet! You have all the inside info! I hope you put a big smile on Terry's face. You sure did on mine!
Best of Luck!
Karenina
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Hello Ms K, First I want to let you know that I have read your exotically gorgeous poem and have not reviewed it because I ran out of sixes really early this month so I am waiting for the weekend to review it. ok?
I love that my two favorite poems are doing so well.
I thank you so very much for such a kind review and comments. I loved writng it, but I felt it was a little too long. It was especially an honor to write alongside of Gil Broxson?s original. Yet I think ten lines per stanza was a lot, but it was a fun prompt! Thanks again for your kind comments, my very dear friend!
My only living aunt just passed away about a month ago.
She died at 99, the day before her birthday. I so wished she could have seen the big one. Well actually she had the big one..lol
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No worries, Debi. I'm always happy to read your "take" on what I write... and worry not a bit about the number of stars. (They just do not give us enough~six is "spent" by Wednesday, for me!)
I think for most of us ten-line stanzas were a challenge...
It's good to s-t-r-e-t-c-h our comfort zone a bit though!
My grandmother lived to be 98...
(The last 30 plus of which was under the fog of Alzheimer's)
I know she was ready to move on, and I was thankful her long trial was over!
It's been an interesting challenge, this Glosa!
Hey~ it got me out of my writer's slump!
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Yay! It is good to see you writing more. Friends don't let friends stay in slumps! 😘
Comment from Sally Law
What a delightful poem in this unique form. I didn't know Terry's dad was a poet! How lovely of you to use his wir and humor for your poem. I see myself in the group shot. Wink. Wink!! I'm the one with the big earrings and big mouth! I'm in my sixties too, and could relate to that stanza the best. Gatherings and grandchildren are always on the top of my list. I love special dinners and eating on the fine dinnerware with flowers and candles.
I so enjoyed this, dear Debi. You made it look so easy! The aging too. ;))
Sending you my best today as always and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Love and blessings,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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What a delightful poem in this unique form. I didn't know Terry's dad was a poet! How lovely of you to use his wir and humor for your poem. I see myself in the group shot. Wink. Wink!! I'm the one with the big earrings and big mouth! I'm in my sixties too, and could relate to that stanza the best. Gatherings and grandchildren are always on the top of my list. I love special dinners and eating on the fine dinnerware with flowers and candles.
I so enjoyed this, dear Debi. You made it look so easy! The aging too. ;))
Sending you my best today as always and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Love and blessings,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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My Sweet Gorgeous Sally Marie, I thank you so very much for such a kind review and comments. I loved writng it, but I felt it was a little too long. It was especially an honor to write alongside of Gil Broxson?s original. Yet I think ten lines per stanza was a lot, but it was a fun prompt! Thanks again for your kind comments, my very dear friend!
My only living aunt just passed away about a month ago.
She died at 99, right before her birthday. I so wished she could have seen the big one. Well actually she had the big one?lol?
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You are most welcome. I throughlly enjoyed this one. You created a fun one and blessed me. Love ya! Sal xoxo's
Comment from w.j.debi
This looks like an interesting form and you've done a great job telling a fun tale while executing it.
When we're young we dream of living forever, but hang around a few people in their 90's and they don't make it sound like such fun.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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This looks like an interesting form and you've done a great job telling a fun tale while executing it.
When we're young we dream of living forever, but hang around a few people in their 90's and they don't make it sound like such fun.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Hi there Debi, I just voted for your sonnet?s. Beautiful Job!!
I thank you so very much for such a kind review and comments. I loved writng it, but I felt it was a little too long. It was especially an honor to write alongside of Gil Broxson?s original. Yet I think ten lines per stanza was a lot, but it was a fun prompt! Thanks again for your kind comments, my very dear friend!
My only living aunt just passed away about a month ago.
She died at 99, the day before her birthday. I so wished she could have seen the big one.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem entry for the Glosa contest about the Golden years. It's funny.
The rhymes and meter are not forced and they flow well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Good luck!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Excellent poem entry for the Glosa contest about the Golden years. It's funny.
The rhymes and meter are not forced and they flow well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Good luck!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Hi there MariVale, I thank you so very much for such a kind review and comments. I loved writng it, but I felt it was a little too long. It was especially an honor to write alongside of Gil Broxson?s original. Yet I think ten lines per stanza was a lot, but it was a fun prompt! Thanks again for your kind comments, my very dear friend!
My only living aunt just passed away about a month ago.
She died at 99, the day before her birthday. I so wished she could have seen the big one. Actually she had the big one? lol..
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Oh wow this is refreshing and a subject not always written about as it makes old age come sooner. I'm approaching 60 myself and I feel the years on my body already. I like your writing style and expression
There's a couple lines in there that are really quite amazing for instance: "Time of peace, too late for tears"
I did notice a couple minor flow issues and if I might make a suggestion Perhaps read the poem out loud to yourself or have someone read it to you and listen for the rhythm the cadence the flow.....perhaps a small change on arrangements or dropping a word. An example being. "So gather friends for a few beers" to "Gather friends for some beers"
You may find little tweaks like that will improve the flow. All in all very nice and well written poem I enjoyed very much. Thank you for your submission and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Oh wow this is refreshing and a subject not always written about as it makes old age come sooner. I'm approaching 60 myself and I feel the years on my body already. I like your writing style and expression
There's a couple lines in there that are really quite amazing for instance: "Time of peace, too late for tears"
I did notice a couple minor flow issues and if I might make a suggestion Perhaps read the poem out loud to yourself or have someone read it to you and listen for the rhythm the cadence the flow.....perhaps a small change on arrangements or dropping a word. An example being. "So gather friends for a few beers" to "Gather friends for some beers"
You may find little tweaks like that will improve the flow. All in all very nice and well written poem I enjoyed very much. Thank you for your submission and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Hi there sweet Lea, I so appreciate your feedback and will go look at your suggestions. I know that I did not like how the statement a few beers, but in order to sttay with meter, the other options don?t work. I will look one more time tho. I always appreciate feeldback so thank you for that.
I thank you so very much for such a kind review and comments. I loved writng it, but I felt it was a little too long. It was especially an honor to write alongside of Gil Broxson?s original. Yet I think ten lines per stanza was a lot, but it was a fun prompt! Thanks again for your kind comments, my very dear friend!
My only living aunt just passed away about a month ago.
She died at 99, the day before her birthday. I so wished she could have seen the big one.
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Thank you daddy so thoughtful of you to say and I look forward to reading more of your amazing work have a good afternoon!
Comment from Wendy G
A fun romp through what are supposed to be "the golden years". The words for each stanza would ber fairly accurate, I think! Well written.
Wendy
Typo: "lots" (no apostrophe needed for plurals, only for most possessives, and also for replacing missing letters in abbreviations)
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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A fun romp through what are supposed to be "the golden years". The words for each stanza would ber fairly accurate, I think! Well written.
Wendy
Typo: "lots" (no apostrophe needed for plurals, only for most possessives, and also for replacing missing letters in abbreviations)
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Thanks so much Wendy. I did have the corrections done as I do know the rules for punctuation . However I am using a new helper program for my eyes and I think I may need a helper for my helper. Lol! I always appreciate good feedback and your wonderful review and kind comments! Thanks again my dear friend!