Miracle Man
Our Tristan is...41 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
I can so sympathise with this. My much younger brother had a stroke last year due to a hole in his heart and had surgery in late January this year.
I'm so glad that everything went well for your young grandson, Tristan. Such great luck that the right people were there with him at the time. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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I can so sympathise with this. My much younger brother had a stroke last year due to a hole in his heart and had surgery in late January this year.
I'm so glad that everything went well for your young grandson, Tristan. Such great luck that the right people were there with him at the time. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you Ulla for your understanding review. Sorry to hear about your brother's stroke. Hope his is well.
We have learned so much through this experience. About 50% of people are born with a hole in their heart that heals as they get older but there are those (like Tristan and your brother) whose do not heal. And sometimes a long plane ride, like it Tristan's case, cause a blood clot to form. He definitely was in the right place for this to happen and survive.
Blessings
Janet
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I so hope your brother Tristan is doing well, Janet. Reuben, my brother is practically back to normal by now and improving all the time. Ulla xcx
Comment from SimianSavant
Great story! Some suggested technical edits:
Though he was poised for this great game. <= comma, or omit the period entirely. There are actually a bunch of spots where I think removing periods would help, but this spot is the most important of them
His trainers realized his fate <= needs more syllables. Maybe "quickly saw his fate"
The crew stepped up and found a ride. <= a comma would work better
A mother feared what might have been /
but God was there, His love transcends. <= these lines don't rhyme.
For Tristan is MIRACLE MAN. <= this is a little awkward as the accent lands naturally on the A (mir-A-cle). I think you want this text and there is not a perfect way to do it, but if you say "for Tristan is A miracle man" you can speak "miracle" as a triplet but still have the best on the first syllable, where it belongs.
Best to you, your family and Tristan,
SS
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Great story! Some suggested technical edits:
Though he was poised for this great game. <= comma, or omit the period entirely. There are actually a bunch of spots where I think removing periods would help, but this spot is the most important of them
His trainers realized his fate <= needs more syllables. Maybe "quickly saw his fate"
The crew stepped up and found a ride. <= a comma would work better
A mother feared what might have been /
but God was there, His love transcends. <= these lines don't rhyme.
For Tristan is MIRACLE MAN. <= this is a little awkward as the accent lands naturally on the A (mir-A-cle). I think you want this text and there is not a perfect way to do it, but if you say "for Tristan is A miracle man" you can speak "miracle" as a triplet but still have the best on the first syllable, where it belongs.
Best to you, your family and Tristan,
SS
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you SS for your thoughtful and thorough review. I greatly appreciate you kind suggestions for edits and good wishes for Tristan and the family.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from zanya
Wow, this truly is a real life story to inspire not just optimism but Faith in a loving God - so well narrated here in these stanzas - every good wish to this young man, Tristan.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Wow, this truly is a real life story to inspire not just optimism but Faith in a loving God - so well narrated here in these stanzas - every good wish to this young man, Tristan.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you zanya for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
I greatly appreciate you good wishes for Tristan.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from John Ciarmello
What a beautiful story, Janet. So often, these events don't end well. I'm glad for Tristan and his family and teammates. It has to be a relief for all involved that he has made a full recovery and was given a clean bill of health to continue playing. Miracles do happen.
Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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What a beautiful story, Janet. So often, these events don't end well. I'm glad for Tristan and his family and teammates. It has to be a relief for all involved that he has made a full recovery and was given a clean bill of health to continue playing. Miracles do happen.
Best, JohnC
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you John for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I greatly appreciate you kind comments for Tristan and his teammates. It is a relief for all of us to know he has a clean bill of health for the future.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this amazing young man with us. I can only begin to imagine how scared his mom and family were. I'm so happy he recovered. He will remain in my prayers.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you for sharing this amazing young man with us. I can only begin to imagine how scared his mom and family were. I'm so happy he recovered. He will remain in my prayers.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you Barbara for your encouraging review. We all feel truly blessed. Thank you for your prayers - that means so much to all of us.
Blessings to you and yours
Janet
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Thank you Barbara for your encouraging review. We all feel truly blessed. Thank you for your prayers - that means so much to all of us.
Blessings to you and yours
Janet
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Wow, Tristan is a miracle man for sure! He braved the surgery in a foreign land and gave credit where it was due to the trainers who saw a stroke in the process and knew what to do to help him get the right medical team to bring him back to life.
I am impressed with the family's diligence and perseverance to keep on believing in miracles.
Thanks for sharing this inspirational tale.
Jesse
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Wow, Tristan is a miracle man for sure! He braved the surgery in a foreign land and gave credit where it was due to the trainers who saw a stroke in the process and knew what to do to help him get the right medical team to bring him back to life.
I am impressed with the family's diligence and perseverance to keep on believing in miracles.
Thanks for sharing this inspirational tale.
Jesse
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you Jesse for your encouraging review. We are all very grateful for the outcome of this event. This week he was invited to Dallas to share his experience with some athletes there. Very cool.
Blessings
Janet
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Thank you Jesse for your encouraging review. We are all very grateful for the outcome of this event. This week he was invited to Dallas to share his experience with some athletes there. Very cool.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Mintybee
What an amazing story. I'm glad Tristan got a miracle. Yes, God is good. Your rhymed testimony to a miracle was well done. The pace moved quickly and the story was well told.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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What an amazing story. I'm glad Tristan got a miracle. Yes, God is good. Your rhymed testimony to a miracle was well done. The pace moved quickly and the story was well told.
Mintybee
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you Mintybee for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I greatly appreciate you kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This was a very good story in poem form. I had not heard of this news item before and found it very interesting. Thanks for sharing and bringing this story to the forefront.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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This was a very good story in poem form. I had not heard of this news item before and found it very interesting. Thanks for sharing and bringing this story to the forefront.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you Marilyn for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
This is a great story about this young soccer player. I love the flow and rhyme this poem has. This poem is a wonderful way to showcase your grandson. Thanks for sharing a part of your life with us!
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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This is a great story about this young soccer player. I love the flow and rhyme this poem has. This poem is a wonderful way to showcase your grandson. Thanks for sharing a part of your life with us!
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you Jodi for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from royowen
Wow! God is good, Infact He is an amazing God, and I'm so glad your young grandson has lived to tell the story. Distance has never been a problem to God, and here's the proof of that. Beautifully written Janet, an excellent post celebrating Hjm, and your grandson's health. Well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Wow! God is good, Infact He is an amazing God, and I'm so glad your young grandson has lived to tell the story. Distance has never been a problem to God, and here's the proof of that. Beautifully written Janet, an excellent post celebrating Hjm, and your grandson's health. Well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2024
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Thank you Roy for your encouraging review. It was Tristan's older brother Nate, who played soccer in Queensland for two years a while back. (the one you and your family prayed for back then) He now is a soccer coach and his little brother's biggest fan. He went with their Mom to Taiwan to bring Tristan home.
Blessings
Janet
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I remember Nate