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Pam Lonsdale
I can imagine people going around a piece of clothing, actually. And this limp, lifeless sweater was a nice twist to your story.
Should "carried it back" be "carrying it back"? I feel like you may have changes tenses here.
Good luck in the contest, Wendy.
xo
Pam
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Comment Written 19-May-2024
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
Thank you so much Pam. Great review - and I am thinking about your suggestion. I wanted consistent past tense. (walked, picked up, carried) so I?m not sure. But thank you for thinking it through.
Wendy
reply by Pam Lonsdale on 19-May-2024
No, I went back and reread it - you're right. Sorry:-)
reply by the author on 19-May-2024
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