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One moment at a time

A rhyming poem

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Comment from patcelaw
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Nicely written and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I am also glad that your brother is doing OK and I pray that he will totally recover and very short and be better than he was before. Thank you for sharing about your brother. Patricia.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024

Comment from QC Poet
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Prayers for a full recovery for your brothers open heart surgery.and to your family at his time of need. It is definitely difficult to concentrate on writing when you have a loved person going through surgery so I say great prayers for his full recovery Blessings to you and your family

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024

Comment from mermaids
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I am sure many can relate to your words. Good news that your brother is recovery and doing well. Excellent use of rhyming words that captures feelings and emotions about waiting while a loved one is in surgery.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024

reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
    Thank you for reviewing not only the content but the poetic style as well. So many readers only wish my brother well without commenting on the poem itself. I appreciate you!
    Your review is one of the best so far!
    Have a wonderful week.
    Jesse
Comment from Pamusart
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Hi, Jesse

I'm glad your brother's OK. How is he doing now? Recovering well?

I'm sure you were very emotional when you wrote this. I think you did a good job of portraying those emotions and your fears your hopes.

Did it feel like you were in a fable? Or is it just because you were dreaming that he could be OK?

I enjoyed reading your poem

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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I like the way your mind drifted into this stream of consciousness that helped you get through the tensions of the present. It effectively enabled you to see things as an onlooker and not feel emotionally caught up in the drama. That said, this also reinforced your love for your brother, proving that these experiences of potential loss bind us further together. I hope he continues to recover well. Take care, Jesse. Debbie

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024

reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
    Thanks, Debbie, for this positively uplifting review. You got the gist of the spirit of how it felt to wait for the outcome of his surgery.
    Yes, this brought us closer.
    Thanks for your good wishes.
    Have a good day.
    Jesse
Comment from karenina
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I'm so pleased he made it through and is recovering!

Your poem reminds me of exactly how my thoughts "ticked" by
just a few weeks ago when my closest cousin had triple bypass surgery at Mass General hospital...

He's discharged now and doing so well!

Best wishes to your brother, Jesse!

Karenina

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024

reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
    Thanks for your good wishes to my brother and me.
    I'm surprised you didn't comment on the poetic style of the poem.
    No worries, so many other folks did and they thought it was exceptional.
    Take care,
    Jesse
reply by karenina on 02-Aug-2024
    Sorry to disappoint you, Jesse. I'll PM you.
Comment from SimianSavant
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Glad to hear the surgery was a success. FYI, you have an extra letter at the beginning of this piece that appears to be a typo.

Thanks for the read,

SS

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024

reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
    I checked it and there is no extra letter at the beginning of the poem.
    Thanks for the kind review.
    Jesse
reply by SimianSavant on 30-Jul-2024
    At the top:
Comment from Bill Schott
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This poem, One Moment at a Time, represents the time of your brother's heart surgery. That is quite the fixed moment in time for this momentous period. Glad it went well.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024

Comment from Mintybee
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This short rhyming poem accomplishes a lot. It tells a story and also explains how you feel about what's going on. The two stanzas show two different kinds of anxious waiting, which makes this work really connects the two halves of the poem. The pacing is good. I'm glad the surgery was a success.
Mintybee

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024

reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
    Thank you, Mintybee, for a detailed and encouraging review.
    You commented on the poetics of the poem as well as the content and I appreciate it very much.
    It shows you get the gist of the piece.
    Thank you for putting the form before the content.
    My brother is recovering nicely.
    Take care,
    Jesse

Comment from dragonpoet
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Hi Jesse,
I like how the space between the lines gives you time to think and maybe pray for a good outcome. I hope your brother comes through with flying colors and heals faster than expected.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great day.
Joan

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024