Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

This poem is so clever. I love the dark humor. I really enjoyed the way you use the snake's final moments to add a twist of irony to the crane's frustration. The snake's laughing and the crane's confusion is wonderfully shared. Great job!

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 Comment Written 13-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024

Hi Michael. Thanks for your thoughts on this one. I saw that photo and just had to write an accompanying poem to go with it. Fun to interpret visuals that way. Thanks again!!

Melissa

Comment from patcelaw

Exceptional

I am giving you a sex on this because you have used very well your punctuation which makes this particular piece read very smoothly when read aloud I have vision problems and so therefore it is hard for me when there's not punctuation for that slight pause that you need after the end of the thought. Great work I wish you the very best with all of your writing and I wish you the very best day. Patricia.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024

Awww, Patricia, thanks so much. I really am glad you liked this piece. I agree that punctuation is essential. Hugs!

Melissa