Show off Witch
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Comment from royowen
Well done with this limerick dear friend. It bops along quite well really, and starts with doing a trick, and then, finishing with one of them knocked of her broom, beautifully written my Friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Well done with this limerick dear friend. It bops along quite well really, and starts with doing a trick, and then, finishing with one of them knocked of her broom, beautifully written my Friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Hi Roy, I thank you for your fun review and comments for my silly Halloween limerick. You are very kind.
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Most welcome
Comment from Nicki.B
I really do love a good Limerick and this gave me a good giggle. I think it's great you brought the halloween vibe through it, it's really come into that season that I love!
Well done and good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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I really do love a good Limerick and this gave me a good giggle. I think it's great you brought the halloween vibe through it, it's really come into that season that I love!
Well done and good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Hi Nicky, I thank you for your fun review and comments for my silly Halloween limerick. You are very kind.
Comment from Michele Harber
This is a cute limerick, and it perfectly matches the adorable image you selected. You had the limerick rhythm perfect until the very last syllable, as the stress falls naturally on "broom" and not "stick," where you need it, but otherwise it reads very smoothly.
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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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This is a cute limerick, and it perfectly matches the adorable image you selected. You had the limerick rhythm perfect until the very last syllable, as the stress falls naturally on "broom" and not "stick," where you need it, but otherwise it reads very smoothly.
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Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2024
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Hi Michelle, I cannot figure out what is happening but I wrote this a while ago and it must not have saved. Anyway, I agree with you completely and if this wasn't blind and for a contest, I would love to know what you might do when it seems you have the perfect rhyme and word that goes for it, bit yeah, the meter is wrong on the last beat. I had to determine that the rest worked right so that I had to compromise as no other word would go there.
So thanks so much. I appreciate your kind words.
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That's happened to me a couple of times, when I've sent replies from my cell phone.
Regarding your poem, I agree you need to keep broom stick, so how about this:
There once was a witch they called Broom Mick
Who showed off each day with a broom trick
One day she slowed down
When going through town
Old Hag knocked her off her broom-stick
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Oh, I love it if only the syllables weren't named at
8 8 5 5 8. Thanks so much, Michelle. I love that idea too.. darn!!! You are such a dear!! Hugs!
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Oops! I didn't realize they specified. At least you know the trick to try if you ever run into a similar situation. 😀
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Michelle, I can't say much or I will give away my identity but thank you so very much. You are a gem!! I will talk to you again after the contest.
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I'm looking forward to it. FYI, I tremendously respect that you're following the blind contest rules.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Great job on this limerick! and it's in theme for the season so even better! Love the cartoon prompt you used. An excellent entry for the Write a Limerick writing prompt. Good luck.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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Great job on this limerick! and it's in theme for the season so even better! Love the cartoon prompt you used. An excellent entry for the Write a Limerick writing prompt. Good luck.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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Hi Marilyn, thanks so very much for the fun review and awesome comments and six stars. They are all so appreciated.
Comment from pome lover
well phooey and shame on old Hag
for Mick had that trick in the bag!
She was just having fun
while making her run,
Old hag was a grouchy scumbag.
Just teasing you. couldn't resist.
You have a cute limerick here, accompanied by a funny picture. very good. and good luck in the contest.
Katharine
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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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well phooey and shame on old Hag
for Mick had that trick in the bag!
She was just having fun
while making her run,
Old hag was a grouchy scumbag.
Just teasing you. couldn't resist.
You have a cute limerick here, accompanied by a funny picture. very good. and good luck in the contest.
Katharine
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Comment Written 25-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Hi Kay, I thank you for your fun review and comments for my silly Halloween limerick. You are very kind.
Your limerick was really cute too. You should have entered it. LOL
