What a Night!
Boys Racing Cars in High School.34 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
I think you are very lucky to have survived that. You could've been killed instantly coming over one of those hills if you had come across a big pothole in the road in it would've thrown you totally out of control and you might've wind up in the side of the road in a fiery crash. It's a good thing. God was all watching over you because I don't think you would've survived it otherwise. Patricia.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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I think you are very lucky to have survived that. You could've been killed instantly coming over one of those hills if you had come across a big pothole in the road in it would've thrown you totally out of control and you might've wind up in the side of the road in a fiery crash. It's a good thing. God was all watching over you because I don't think you would've survived it otherwise. Patricia.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Yes, Patricia. You are so right. I was young and dumb, and very LUCKY! Thank you so much for the great review!
Comment from Harambe iz ur Daddy
This is a kickass story and I'd have given it a six if I didn't have to make so many proofreading edits! Loved this piece though. Ok here's some stuff to fix:
suddenly a county sheriff went passed us <= past us
Kenny wanted to stop, and get something to eat <= this extra comma isn't necessary, though it's not a major problem either
Don't let them pass, and let's see what they do. <= ending quotation marks needed
Kenny, and I coasted down <= this comma is an error, and should be removed
I shut the car off, pushed in the clutch, and the car was rolling down a hill. <= mixed verb tenses. Try: I shut the car off and pushed in the clutch as the car rolled down a hill.
for about a mile and pulled over on the shoulder and shut the car off. <= run-on sentence. Try: for about a mile, pulled over on the shoulder, and etc
The next day, my dad, and my uncle <= remove the comma after "dad"
They stated the drive shaft was found lying <= simplify: they found the drive shaft lying
They knew we were lying, and we had been going much faster than that because of where the drive shaft was found <= simplify: they knew we were lying because of where the drive shaft was found
I would take your last paragraph and put it at the beginning, and leave "it was fun while it lasted" on its own line.
Thanks for sharing this fun story,
🦍
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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This is a kickass story and I'd have given it a six if I didn't have to make so many proofreading edits! Loved this piece though. Ok here's some stuff to fix:
suddenly a county sheriff went passed us <= past us
Kenny wanted to stop, and get something to eat <= this extra comma isn't necessary, though it's not a major problem either
Don't let them pass, and let's see what they do. <= ending quotation marks needed
Kenny, and I coasted down <= this comma is an error, and should be removed
I shut the car off, pushed in the clutch, and the car was rolling down a hill. <= mixed verb tenses. Try: I shut the car off and pushed in the clutch as the car rolled down a hill.
for about a mile and pulled over on the shoulder and shut the car off. <= run-on sentence. Try: for about a mile, pulled over on the shoulder, and etc
The next day, my dad, and my uncle <= remove the comma after "dad"
They stated the drive shaft was found lying <= simplify: they found the drive shaft lying
They knew we were lying, and we had been going much faster than that because of where the drive shaft was found <= simplify: they knew we were lying because of where the drive shaft was found
I would take your last paragraph and put it at the beginning, and leave "it was fun while it lasted" on its own line.
Thanks for sharing this fun story,
🦍
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Thank you so much !!!!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Having raised four boys, I'm amazed that they ever grow up to be men. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading.
And one weekend I headed south in my Buick to my friend Kenny's house (friend,)
So, I hit the accelerator to the floor and shifted from second to third gear quickly, and the tires started screeching (adverb needs to be as close to verb as possible so, shifted quickly)
The next day we rode motorcycles most of the day, (The following day)
The next day, my dad, and my uncle went to tow the Buick back home. (The following day)
I lost many friends that were killed in high school going way to fast in their cars. (way too fast)
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Having raised four boys, I'm amazed that they ever grow up to be men. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading.
And one weekend I headed south in my Buick to my friend Kenny's house (friend,)
So, I hit the accelerator to the floor and shifted from second to third gear quickly, and the tires started screeching (adverb needs to be as close to verb as possible so, shifted quickly)
The next day we rode motorcycles most of the day, (The following day)
The next day, my dad, and my uncle went to tow the Buick back home. (The following day)
I lost many friends that were killed in high school going way to fast in their cars. (way too fast)
Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Yes, I am lucky I am even here today Barbara. And you are right about that. Thanks for the great review and editing too.
Comment from Begin Again
And boys don't get all the credit for liking to drive fast! I had the opportunity to take a car (57 Chevy) down the drag strip on several different occasions and I must admit the thrill was a high you don't forget. But doing it on backroads and streets, it takes more guts than I had. The only time I drove well beyond the speed limit was when my husband fell ill on a trip and we were about 157 miles from home. He needed a hospital but refused ...and said not till I got him home. I found the fastest cars on the tollway and followed them, hitting speeds with his Dodge Ram that it probably never should have seen. Got him to Rockford and an ambulance met us at the drs. office and raced him away. (He did survive, but barely).
Smiles, Carol
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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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And boys don't get all the credit for liking to drive fast! I had the opportunity to take a car (57 Chevy) down the drag strip on several different occasions and I must admit the thrill was a high you don't forget. But doing it on backroads and streets, it takes more guts than I had. The only time I drove well beyond the speed limit was when my husband fell ill on a trip and we were about 157 miles from home. He needed a hospital but refused ...and said not till I got him home. I found the fastest cars on the tollway and followed them, hitting speeds with his Dodge Ram that it probably never should have seen. Got him to Rockford and an ambulance met us at the drs. office and raced him away. (He did survive, but barely).
Smiles, Carol
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Comment Written 31-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025
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Oh wow Carol. It sounds like you had to drive fast in that case. Thanks for the great review. I truly appreciate you!
