Comment from fictionwriter

Excellent

Very touching and wonderful. There are too many kids just like this, no telling how many have ended up this way and maybe felt the regret on the other side. Wonderfully done.


"Michael, the movie(')s about to start." Mom's "let's

tonight-we-don't upset-you(your)-Mom" mode

What? I said I was coming(deletet .)" looks and he left

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2010

Joy,

Thanks again for reading and catching my glitches. My mind was on my Michael today..couldn't shorten the story so I am glad you enjoyed it. Smiles, Carol

Comment from jadapenn

Excellent

Miss book writer, you brought tears to my eyes. Yep, how many Michaels don't listen and go after the friends. This was well written with tons of emotion and good conflict. You developed your characters well. And made jada cry.
Well written. luv jada

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 Comment Written 24-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2010

Jada,

Though my Michael was too young for cars, he certainly entertained his share of mischief..I cried too when I wrote it...that's why I couldn't reduce it to 1000 words for the contest. Thanks...Carol

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

tHIS IS A VERYGOOD STOTY THIS IS SOMETHING WHEN OTHERREADERS READ IT MALKE THEM GO 'MMMMM
i SO GLADE YOU DIDN'T DELETE ONE WORD i BELIEVE gOLD WANTED YOU TO WRITE THIS MAYBE TO SAVE A SOUL.
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 Comment Written 24-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2010

Cookie,

I think you might be right...I felt like my Michael was right here beside me, urging me to type. Thanks...Carol

reply by misscookie on 24-Apr-2010

have a best evening and I'm g;lad you felt that way.