Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Fleeting Memories"A book of Poetry & Writing
58 total reviews
Comment from Jersey Dreamer
Hi Deepwater,
This was a very deep and meaningful poem you have written, it was a joy to read.
It shows love and a sense of caring for someone.
Kind regards
Jersey Dreamer
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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Hi Deepwater,
This was a very deep and meaningful poem you have written, it was a joy to read.
It shows love and a sense of caring for someone.
Kind regards
Jersey Dreamer
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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thank you so much for reading Jersey, regards Gary
Comment from Donovan
That idea of Father Time being forgiving is the hope of all of us that have approached the sunset of our lives as we drift into mental and physical dysfunction.
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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That idea of Father Time being forgiving is the hope of all of us that have approached the sunset of our lives as we drift into mental and physical dysfunction.
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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thank you for reading Donovan
Comment from daniela.albu
"The memories of perfection"... this is real poetry. The poem constructs itself on the magic of a living moment, a perfect fragment of time:
"Her kiss's of perfection, reflected of red wine,
All the boundaries removed, as our bodies intertwined,
Father Time was forgiving as we floated out to space".
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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"The memories of perfection"... this is real poetry. The poem constructs itself on the magic of a living moment, a perfect fragment of time:
"Her kiss's of perfection, reflected of red wine,
All the boundaries removed, as our bodies intertwined,
Father Time was forgiving as we floated out to space".
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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thanks again daniela
Comment from Judian James
This is wonderful. You wrote about something that's been said a million times before, but you managed to do it in your own unique voice and it was an excellent, sensual piece of writing. "All the boundaries removed, as our bodies intertwined" I think I'd say, for the meter, "All boundaries were removed..." to get the accent back where it belongs. well done
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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This is wonderful. You wrote about something that's been said a million times before, but you managed to do it in your own unique voice and it was an excellent, sensual piece of writing. "All the boundaries removed, as our bodies intertwined" I think I'd say, for the meter, "All boundaries were removed..." to get the accent back where it belongs. well done
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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thank you for reading judian and for your welcome comment
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My pleasure. I expect you to do the same for me!
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as always thanks for reading
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Lovely - simply lovely - no
other word for it -- the content
so soft and romantic, the words
flowing smoothly down the page.
An enjoyable read, my friend.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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Lovely - simply lovely - no
other word for it -- the content
so soft and romantic, the words
flowing smoothly down the page.
An enjoyable read, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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thank you so much for reading Margaret, Gary
Comment from Thilophian
Dear Deepwater,
It is an excellent poem. It speaks of sexual union and ultimate love of a man and woman. I really loved the lines,
"Father Time was forgiving as we floated out to space".
Keep writing, I am curious to read more and more.
Regards
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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Dear Deepwater,
It is an excellent poem. It speaks of sexual union and ultimate love of a man and woman. I really loved the lines,
"Father Time was forgiving as we floated out to space".
Keep writing, I am curious to read more and more.
Regards
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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thank you Thilophian for your comments and reading this , Gary
Comment from donnadiann
This is truly worth reading and very expressionable. I really like the lines...as I awake this fine morning, a new day of my life...and...we live our lives so guarded to the things you must put right. How very true, each day a new chance, and if you have something to say, say it.
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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This is truly worth reading and very expressionable. I really like the lines...as I awake this fine morning, a new day of my life...and...we live our lives so guarded to the things you must put right. How very true, each day a new chance, and if you have something to say, say it.
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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welcome and thank you for reading donnadiann, Gary
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed the synergistic picture you chose to illustrate your theme and your capturing a moment in time with its recollections. I liked your rhymes and slant rhymes, along with your "angel" metaphor and personification of "Time."
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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I enjoyed the synergistic picture you chose to illustrate your theme and your capturing a moment in time with its recollections. I liked your rhymes and slant rhymes, along with your "angel" metaphor and personification of "Time."
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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thank you for reading this Joan
Comment from leesm
How great are those mornings after a night of love with someone special. Your poem captures nicely those memories and brings back quite fond memories for me. Thanks for sharing.
-Lee
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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How great are those mornings after a night of love with someone special. Your poem captures nicely those memories and brings back quite fond memories for me. Thanks for sharing.
-Lee
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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your most welcome and thank you for reading
Comment from yellowrosebud
I loved this poem of sweet memories of time spend with a loved one.Memories are wonderful to relive a pleasant experience such as this and you expressed it very well.Great Job!
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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I loved this poem of sweet memories of time spend with a loved one.Memories are wonderful to relive a pleasant experience such as this and you expressed it very well.Great Job!
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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thank you yellowrosebud for reading my work
