Short Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Coming Home"A book of a mixture of stories
47 total reviews
Comment from IndianaIrish
A wonderfully written story of something that's been a part of human nature since forever, Carol. I only hope if I'm ever faced with a similar situation, I'd do what's right. Best of luck in the contest.
Karyn :>)
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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A wonderfully written story of something that's been a part of human nature since forever, Carol. I only hope if I'm ever faced with a similar situation, I'd do what's right. Best of luck in the contest.
Karyn :>)
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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Karyn,
Thank you for all the encouragement. I really appreciate it. I haven't been able to spend much time lately on the site, and I always appreciate hearing from you. I apologize for taking so long to get back to you. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Angelite
this was beautifully written with good strong characterization and vivid description making for easy imagery.
Sad story, and as you say in your author notes, it's a true view of how low people have become in caring for others.
Best of luck
Angel
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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this was beautifully written with good strong characterization and vivid description making for easy imagery.
Sad story, and as you say in your author notes, it's a true view of how low people have become in caring for others.
Best of luck
Angel
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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Angelite,
Thank you for all the encouragement. I really appreciate it. I haven't been able to spend much time lately on the site, and I always appreciate hearing from you. I apologize for taking so long to get back to you. Smiles, Carol
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Carol,
I too saw this event on TV and couldn't believe what I was seeing. How can so many be so insensitive? I know more homeless people die that we don't know about and that thought is so sad. You wrote this well and followed the story in detail. I like the ending...this poor soul won't want for anything again. Well done...blessings, chew
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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Hi Carol,
I too saw this event on TV and couldn't believe what I was seeing. How can so many be so insensitive? I know more homeless people die that we don't know about and that thought is so sad. You wrote this well and followed the story in detail. I like the ending...this poor soul won't want for anything again. Well done...blessings, chew
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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Chey,
Thank you for all the encouragement. I really appreciate it. I haven't been able to spend much time lately on the site, and I always appreciate hearing from you. I apologize for taking so long to get back to you. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Realist101
Oh this shortage of sixes...Carol, this is so good...perfectly done...I saw an ELDERLY lady lying on the sidewalk in Chicago years ago, as we were trying to find the train station...and 7 people were JUST STANDING THERE!! My husband would not stop, he said we would get mugged or worse. I have remembered that all these years...it was awful...and your story conveys the misery of people "forgotten" beautifully!! Hugs, Susan
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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Oh this shortage of sixes...Carol, this is so good...perfectly done...I saw an ELDERLY lady lying on the sidewalk in Chicago years ago, as we were trying to find the train station...and 7 people were JUST STANDING THERE!! My husband would not stop, he said we would get mugged or worse. I have remembered that all these years...it was awful...and your story conveys the misery of people "forgotten" beautifully!! Hugs, Susan
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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Susan,
Thanks so much for caring. I appreciate your thoughts as always. Carol
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a very smooth flow of words, making for a very easy read. Not wanting to get involve has been a way of surviving and people wonder why the world is in such a pitiful state. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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This is very well written with a very smooth flow of words, making for a very easy read. Not wanting to get involve has been a way of surviving and people wonder why the world is in such a pitiful state. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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Charlie,
My deepest apologies for taking so long to respond...guess lifes busy throwing me fast balls and curve pitches at the moment. Thanks for taking the time to read and enjoy. I sincerely appreciate it. Smiles, Carol
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You're welcome, Carol. The trouble with life's pitching is you are usually at the plate without a bat. Charlie
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Amen!
Comment from patmedium
BANG ON, Carol... they WILL be asked why... by their Higher Selves! We come here to learn humanity... if we don't learn, we come back again until we do learn. This was well written. Pat.
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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BANG ON, Carol... they WILL be asked why... by their Higher Selves! We come here to learn humanity... if we don't learn, we come back again until we do learn. This was well written. Pat.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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Pat,
My deepest apologies for taking so long to respond...guess lifes busy throwing me fast balls and curve pitches at the moment. Thanks for taking the time to read and enjoy. I sincerely appreciate it. Smiles, Carol
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just wish mne a happy birthday, dear, and shut up! LOL. Pat. xxx
Comment from misscookie
What a beauitful sad story. I truly love the way youtold this story it wasn't to much off the mark I cry when it was on the new and your story made me cry again.
good write.
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What a beauitful sad story. I truly love the way youtold this story it wasn't to much off the mark I cry when it was on the new and your story made me cry again.
good write.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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Cookie,
Hope all is well with you...Take care..Carol
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I'm going through with the help ofGod I'll be all right.
I pray yu and yours are well. take care.
Comment from BJean
You've really brought to life that very sad scene. Everyone has a cell phone!
So calloused to just turn the face and walk on by. Very good and well done post Carol. Love, Jean
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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You've really brought to life that very sad scene. Everyone has a cell phone!
So calloused to just turn the face and walk on by. Very good and well done post Carol. Love, Jean
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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Jean,
My deepest apologies for taking so long to respond...guess lifes busy throwing me fast balls and curve pitches at the moment. Thanks for taking the time to read and enjoy. I sincerely appreciate it. Smiles, Carol
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi Begin Again,
Wow, what a story! Unfortunately this happens a lot and as you say in your author notes, they will have to answer to God.
Your story is an excellent read, a tearful one at that and it held my interest throughout. It has a good flow and I have only one nit.
Two woman (women) edged by, clinging to the building to avoid my body.
Other than this easy fix it is a very good story. Thank you for sharing.
Becky
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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Hi Begin Again,
Wow, what a story! Unfortunately this happens a lot and as you say in your author notes, they will have to answer to God.
Your story is an excellent read, a tearful one at that and it held my interest throughout. It has a good flow and I have only one nit.
Two woman (women) edged by, clinging to the building to avoid my body.
Other than this easy fix it is a very good story. Thank you for sharing.
Becky
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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mtngalofnc,
My deepest apologies for taking so long to respond...guess lifes busy throwing me fast balls and curve pitches at the moment. Thanks for taking the time to read and enjoy. I sincerely appreciate it. Smiles, Carol
Comment from adewpearl
I also followed this story in the news - horrible shades of Kitty Genovese all over again. A good explanation? There is NO possible good explanation - there isn't even a possible so-so explanation. You tell this tragic story in a most poignant way, Carol, with excellent dialogue and poignant mood. Brooke
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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I also followed this story in the news - horrible shades of Kitty Genovese all over again. A good explanation? There is NO possible good explanation - there isn't even a possible so-so explanation. You tell this tragic story in a most poignant way, Carol, with excellent dialogue and poignant mood. Brooke
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Brooke,
You are so right...I hope these people are never faced with a time they need help and others turn away. They could have at least called for help if they didn't want to get involved...That's what life is supppose to be...getting involved, living and learning with others...Thank you so much for the kind review. Smiles, Carol
