Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Hand In Hand"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Perp Ihebom
Well, this is a good attempt at writing a short poem, but i believe it can be made better. For one, birds 's wings are in pairs so i think that wing should have an s. Again there seems to be a missing link between the two main thoughts in the poem. cheers
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Well, this is a good attempt at writing a short poem, but i believe it can be made better. For one, birds 's wings are in pairs so i think that wing should have an s. Again there seems to be a missing link between the two main thoughts in the poem. cheers
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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thanks
Comment from Jean Lutz
Nostalgia and faith interwoven. It is only in my aging years I've learned to listen to the quieter things and enjoy the order of creation. The picture could be me in the late 1950s and my years of traveling while in the Air Force. Yet sometimes taking a Trailways bus home to Tennessee and walking along a country road to home.
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Nostalgia and faith interwoven. It is only in my aging years I've learned to listen to the quieter things and enjoy the order of creation. The picture could be me in the late 1950s and my years of traveling while in the Air Force. Yet sometimes taking a Trailways bus home to Tennessee and walking along a country road to home.
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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thanks Jean
Comment from jwlee211
great image in this short poem. I like your line about blossom and the birds hail. Great work. Strong message for a short poem.
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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great image in this short poem. I like your line about blossom and the birds hail. Great work. Strong message for a short poem.
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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thank you jwlee
Comment from Arkine
Spring does have a tendency to get people out and looking for love. ~L~ Is it just the warm weather? The call of the birds? Who knows for sure, but lucky are those that find it. Nicely done! :)
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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Spring does have a tendency to get people out and looking for love. ~L~ Is it just the warm weather? The call of the birds? Who knows for sure, but lucky are those that find it. Nicely done! :)
Comment Written 22-May-2010
reply by the author on 22-May-2010
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thank you for reading
Comment from connied
This reminds me of high noon and keeping appointments!!
grin,
The faith of love blooms high this day
As Birds on wing do hail
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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This reminds me of high noon and keeping appointments!!
grin,
The faith of love blooms high this day
As Birds on wing do hail
Comment Written 21-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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thank you
Comment from Deejharrington
The best of luck in the contest. I liked your entry because it seemed to tell so much more than the words you wrote. Of a time long ago, it reminds of pictures of my mother during the war. Like the woman is waiting for her love to return. Good job.
dj
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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The best of luck in the contest. I liked your entry because it seemed to tell so much more than the words you wrote. Of a time long ago, it reminds of pictures of my mother during the war. Like the woman is waiting for her love to return. Good job.
dj
Comment Written 21-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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thank you Dj
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you're welcome
deb
Comment from Mary's angel
I like this and I like the picture. Faith of love is a great description for a deep and intense love. And the lady walking with a briefcase is going for her true love. Well done and godlike.
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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I like this and I like the picture. Faith of love is a great description for a deep and intense love. And the lady walking with a briefcase is going for her true love. Well done and godlike.
Comment Written 21-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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thank you
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Very ncie..You are welcome. And thank you.
please excuse the mispelled words. forgot to use spell check,
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welcome
Comment from lola29
What a wonderful message for springtime. It's glorious to be able to celebrate at the beach under an azure sky with birds singing on high.
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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What a wonderful message for springtime. It's glorious to be able to celebrate at the beach under an azure sky with birds singing on high.
Comment Written 21-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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thank you
Comment from Julie G
Lovely, universally appealing poem. I must say the woman in the picture looks exactly like my Mother would have looked in 1946. She is nearly 91 now. I had to look again and again. Everything about this photo says it is my Mother. Can't be, I am sure, but loved seeing it anyway. Good luck in the contest. Not easy to convey such a provocative and joyous feeling in so short a poem. For me the "birds on wing--hailing" were our airmen flying home from the war. I was ten in 1946.
Julie G
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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Lovely, universally appealing poem. I must say the woman in the picture looks exactly like my Mother would have looked in 1946. She is nearly 91 now. I had to look again and again. Everything about this photo says it is my Mother. Can't be, I am sure, but loved seeing it anyway. Good luck in the contest. Not easy to convey such a provocative and joyous feeling in so short a poem. For me the "birds on wing--hailing" were our airmen flying home from the war. I was ten in 1946.
Julie G
Comment Written 21-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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thank you Julie for reading
Comment from daniela.albu
This is one of the best short poems I have ever read. Of course, the retro photo with a personal touch adds even more meaning and substance to it.
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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This is one of the best short poems I have ever read. Of course, the retro photo with a personal touch adds even more meaning and substance to it.
Comment Written 21-May-2010
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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thank you
