An Invitation
inspired by a writing prompt68 total reviews
Comment from ulster3
Hello Poet.
This is exceptional with the quatrains and mixture of rhyme and slant rhyme. Great flow and highly original. Creative is the word. Though I'm in no hurry to cross over yet, I do believe that families will be reunited and we'll have animals. I believe it will be all we have here, but without the troubles. No need to hurry though. lol.
Fondly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Hello Poet.
This is exceptional with the quatrains and mixture of rhyme and slant rhyme. Great flow and highly original. Creative is the word. Though I'm in no hurry to cross over yet, I do believe that families will be reunited and we'll have animals. I believe it will be all we have here, but without the troubles. No need to hurry though. lol.
Fondly, Rebecca
Comment Written 01-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Rebecca, truly, thank you from the bottom of my heart. I never expected this poem to get such great reviews. thank you so very much for your support of my work. I appreciate you..jls
Comment from rmdelta
Jimi,
wow, what great poem, my friend. Excellent descriptives provide us vivid imagery of your story within the poem. Terrific work.
Reggie
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Jimi,
wow, what great poem, my friend. Excellent descriptives provide us vivid imagery of your story within the poem. Terrific work.
Reggie
Comment Written 01-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Reggie, I, once again am very humbled and grateful over sch an exceptional rating. I am thrilled you like my poem that much..wow..I am going to get a big head..jimi
Comment from Hitcher
Two outstanding poems in a row Jimi, the visuals in this one were amazing, OH to be able to ask such questions to the ONE. I think He'd be happy with you friend, to speak from ones heart and soul could only but reach out and touch Him, Enjoy your say friend, I'll come and visit! I'd have to go see... That's if I made it to the light... :)
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Two outstanding poems in a row Jimi, the visuals in this one were amazing, OH to be able to ask such questions to the ONE. I think He'd be happy with you friend, to speak from ones heart and soul could only but reach out and touch Him, Enjoy your say friend, I'll come and visit! I'd have to go see... That's if I made it to the light... :)
Comment Written 01-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Hitcher, my wonderful friend, what am I to do with you. You are such a loyal supporter of my attempts at writing. I adore and appreciate you so very much..again thank you so very very much//jim
Comment from Aussie
Wow! You sure put your head to work to include everything that you enjoy on planet earth; and so you are not ready to leave just yet. No one has returned to tell us what heaven is like, the Bible says it is paved with streets of gold and the gates are made of pearls and precious stones. We have two choices within one body; one enjoys planet earth and the other travels the astral plane and has coffee with God. Excellent poem. I can give you six stars!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Wow! You sure put your head to work to include everything that you enjoy on planet earth; and so you are not ready to leave just yet. No one has returned to tell us what heaven is like, the Bible says it is paved with streets of gold and the gates are made of pearls and precious stones. We have two choices within one body; one enjoys planet earth and the other travels the astral plane and has coffee with God. Excellent poem. I can give you six stars!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Aussie!!! Wow girl,, what don't you hop over here and have coffee with me??? As always I appreciate you very much. Getting a six from you, an artist and poet of the highest calibre, makes my head swell. again thank you so very very much...jimi
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Hop being the operative word? I would love to meet and have coffee with you and Brooke! Alas, too far she cried. Love You.
Comment from Awatef
This is an interesting to read poem. I enjoyed reading it. There are no flaws according to my best judgment of your great work. Keep up the great writing.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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This is an interesting to read poem. I enjoyed reading it. There are no flaws according to my best judgment of your great work. Keep up the great writing.
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Awatef, thank you so very much for stopping Your review and words of encouragement are appreciated..again thank you..jls
Comment from Dave M
Jimi,
We can all wonder about Heaven, and one story I'd recommend to you is Mark Twain's "Captain Stormfield's Visit to Heaven."
I enjoyed this poem and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Jimi,
We can all wonder about Heaven, and one story I'd recommend to you is Mark Twain's "Captain Stormfield's Visit to Heaven."
I enjoyed this poem and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Dave, once again thank you so very very much..jimi
Comment from c_lucas
You present quite and argument in your well written poem. Unfortunately, I don't think God's us an option when He calls. This is very well written.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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You present quite and argument in your well written poem. Unfortunately, I don't think God's us an option when He calls. This is very well written.
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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c_lucas, once again thank you for your wonderful reviews and loyal support. Maybe He will listen to my argument, heh??? jimi
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You're welcome, Jimi. We can always present an argrument. Charlie
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello jlsavell,
Ah, what a pleasure it was to read and review you perfect couplet poem
I say, our Earth is a Paradis.
Smiles my Fanstory friend.
Gert
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Hello jlsavell,
Ah, what a pleasure it was to read and review you perfect couplet poem
I say, our Earth is a Paradis.
Smiles my Fanstory friend.
Gert
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Gert Sherwood, once again thank you. I ma overwhelmed by the exceptional reviews this piece has received.. again thank you so very very much..jlsavell
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You are so welcome jlsavel
Gert
Comment from Addy García
Many congratulations on your poem is very good and makes us think of the gift and to live in a paradise with mountains, waterfalls, and wonders that only nature could create. It is a positive reflection, it is extraordinary what we share, is one of the best poems I've read on the site.
regards
GARCIA ADDY
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Many congratulations on your poem is very good and makes us think of the gift and to live in a paradise with mountains, waterfalls, and wonders that only nature could create. It is a positive reflection, it is extraordinary what we share, is one of the best poems I've read on the site.
regards
GARCIA ADDY
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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Addy Garcia, goodness, thank you so very much. I am humbled by such a heartfelt review and compliment. again thank you so very much...jlsavell
Comment from S.Yocom
You used very pretty scenery in this unmetered poem, Jimi. You're right that earth has much beauty. Be careful with your rhyming. There are several pairs that don't really rhyme, such as Heaven/decision, wind/descend, and carousels/sail. But I like the picturesque scenes and enjoyed reading your poem.
Sally
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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You used very pretty scenery in this unmetered poem, Jimi. You're right that earth has much beauty. Be careful with your rhyming. There are several pairs that don't really rhyme, such as Heaven/decision, wind/descend, and carousels/sail. But I like the picturesque scenes and enjoyed reading your poem.
Sally
Comment Written 31-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2010
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S.Yocum, thank you once again. I take your critique to heart. As I told you..I just cannot get meter down. However, I do thank you even more so for not deducting for such...that was very kind of you..again thank you so much..jls