Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Excellent description of our lives and how we must go forward. Good haiku form and a message that is relevant to the reader.

 Comment Written 05-May-2012

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reply by the author on 07-May-2012

Thank you sooo much for your comments and great review.
I am sorry i took time to get back. Been offline for days.
Regards

Comment from Ragnar

Excellent

I'm very glad for your lengthy Author's notes.
Without them, I would have missed the very fine message (poem)
that you have penned here.

There is hope in your words...in life, is there anything finer?

Congratulations on your work...good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 05-May-2012

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reply by the author on 07-May-2012

Thank you sooo much for your comments and great review.
I am sorry i took time to get back. Been offline for days.
Regards

Comment from skye

Excellent

What drives me today?
It's the fueling yesterday,
Will make tomorrow.

This is a wonderful 5-7-5, with the analogy of driving, fueling, and positive attitude about reaching the destination. Very well done.

 Comment Written 04-May-2012

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reply by the author on 07-May-2012

Thank you sooo much for your comments and great review.
I am sorry i took time to get back. Been offline for days.
Regards

Comment from patsypats

Excellent

So well said in such a unique way. You have pulled it together with your select choice of words and with such a powerful outcome. Great job:))

 Comment Written 04-May-2012

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reply by the author on 04-May-2012

Thanks!
I really appreciate your comment and great review.
I am glad it makes sense to you.
My regards

Comment from simonbagh

Excellent

Yes what we have got from yesterday serves our today and what we take today is to serve tomorrow, very meaningful little a piece, well done, Simon.

 Comment Written 04-May-2012

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reply by the author on 04-May-2012

Thanks!
I really appreciate your comment and great review.
I am glad it makes sense to you.
My regards

Comment from linsbm

Excellent

You got a wonderful message here. Our inspiration drive us more to succeed for a better tomorrow. Nicely written poem that every one will find beneficial. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 04-May-2012

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reply by the author on 04-May-2012

Thanks!
I really appreciate your comment and great review.
I am glad it makes sense to you.
My regards

Comment from gazzagodbod

Excellent

the destination of your dreams fabulous little poem well written and presented really enjoyed it thank you my friend gazza

 Comment Written 04-May-2012

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reply by the author on 04-May-2012

Thanks!
I really appreciate your comment and great review.
I am glad it makes sense to you.
My regards

Comment from penship

Excellent

Lovely photo and I appreciate the thought. I get the idea but I think that transition from the 2nd to third line could be smoother--maybe It's the fuel of yesterday/that makes tomorrow?

Thanks for the delightful poem

 Comment Written 04-May-2012

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reply by the author on 04-May-2012

Thank you so much for the review.
I will honestly brainstorm this and see how i can adjust the transition without missing the point or maybe you have more ideas- the one you gave; the syllable count is cute but the intent is to express the determination for tomorrow. It is not necessarily the fuel that makes tomorrow, its your 'will' bcos you have fueled up (considerin you could get fuel and use it anyway) or should i put this at the beginning of my author's note?
Looking forward to more from you.
Thanks a great deal.

reply by penship on 05-May-2012

so something like "fueling yesterday" as an opening line--I see that is a very different sense, since it uses a continuous action verb which is good--amazing how tiny short poems can be so much work! best of luck

Comment from tinams

Excellent

Your words and message are clear and evoke a sense of hope. Your format follows the 5/7/5 structure. I liked the yesterday and tomorrow feel :) Tina

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012

Hi Tina. I cant thank you enough for your
great review and comment.
I am glad it makes sense to you.
My Regards

Comment from whispersofthesoul

Excellent

hiya,
this is a very strong contest entry, these are my favourite 5-7-5, you can say so much in so few words, they are the photo of poetry, talking of photos the one you have chosen is great
yesterday is gone
today is real
tomorrow doesnt exist

well done and good luck xx

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2012

Hi Whisper, I cant thank you enough for your great review and comment.
I am glad it makes sense to you.
My Regards

reply by whispersofthesoul on 29-Apr-2012

your welcome xx