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Too Many Birds Are Singing!

almost too fantastical to be true ...

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Comment from Cumbrianlass
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Excellent write, Sharyn. I was utterly captivated all the way through. You handle the subject of ADHD perfectly (although I have my own theories on it) and the entire scene setting in the classroom is brilliant.

I got quite gooey when you introduced me to Jack. What a yummy guy.

Er, I'd like a follow up, please. There could be so much more to come in this story. Like, do they get together? How does the wee lad do? Does he ever meet Miss Tomato thong again?

Fantastic work.

Bravo.

Av

 Comment Written 26-May-2013


reply by the author on 26-May-2013
    Bless you Av - word limit was 2000 for this one ... what's next? hmm ... Revenge of the Exploding Tomato? :)S
Comment from Kiki12
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Yep, didn't spend any till I read it. I can't even say much, as this speaks for itself -- it's a perfect write, and tugs at all the right strings. My son has dyslexia and adhd, luckily we didn't experience anything closely remote to this, but many of my students have. Well done, entertaining, enlightening, fantastical, heart-warming- what a package...
xo
Kiki

 Comment Written 26-May-2013


reply by the author on 26-May-2013
    oh YEAH!!! you saved me one!! I was hoping you'd like this one kiki! My son has ADHD too, so it's always been a battle - luckily I'm a speech therapist, so know a little about Specific Learning problems! Blessings for your wonderful sixer dear!! so much appreciated - but more than that, I'm delighted that you liked it!!! :)S
Comment from sunnilicious
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That's a great photograph. Such an emotional pose.

Tommy is a handful. And Miss Victoria Montgomery sure is not teacher material with that mouth. Well... Nutritional supplements like granola bars is a wonderful way to bond. I heard ADD is a growing diagnosis. Good awareness.

This short story is creative and without a doubt very original. Excellent work.

Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-May-2013


reply by the author on 26-May-2013
    Bless you for your wonderful sixer on this one sunni!!! I'm delighted that you enjoyed this one!
    :)Sharyn
reply by sunnilicious on 27-May-2013
    You're welcome.

    Have a great night :)
Comment from Jendowoz
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I loved this piece, Sharyn. You are an amazingly multi-talented person! This is a wonderful story and familiar to me. I tutored a 15 year old boy with a dysfunctional home life and couldn't add 1 + 2. I tutored him for 2 years and learnt that he responded to patterns in number and got him up to beginning algebra when a high school teacher took over.

Your story is wonderful. Sometimes it just takes one caring person to break through barriers. I love your descriptive phrases "vein pulses under her temple like a small epileptic snake". Fantastic!

regards, Jen

 Comment Written 26-May-2013


reply by the author on 26-May-2013
    oh bless you a million times for your lovely six on this one Jen! Perhaps you were the "Jack" in your student's life! I so appreciate praise from another fine prose writer!
    :)Sharyn
Comment from Cornelius2000
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Oh Sharyn, what a lovely story. Of course it sounds like the first half of a short story, or the first chapter of a novel. Makes us want to know all about the wedding, and Tommy's adult life as a psychologist, helping little kids learn to read and cope. I'll have to confess I wanted to stand up and yell "YES," when Ms. Jones thwacked Mrs. Mongomery with that book. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 26-May-2013


reply by the author on 26-May-2013
    Well of COURSE dear! Thank you so much - I had fun with this one, as you can probably tell.
    :)S
Comment from Gungalo
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Too many birds are singing. Quite a clever teacher this Jack was, eh? Played games and such a Tommy learned without knowing it. Amazing story you.

 Comment Written 26-May-2013


reply by the author on 26-May-2013
    thx Gungalo - sometimes miracles are necessary, yes?
reply by Gungalo on 26-May-2013
    Yes they are.
Comment from GregoryCody
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Wow wow wow. BEAUTIFULLY written. Such phenomenal metaphors. By that I mean well done And pretty. Tomatoes, dinner plates, like marshmallows should taste, just to name a few. I loved it. I actually have ADD! This was so relatable. I actually acted this way my entire life! Prove them Wrong! My dad included. And... I can't read either! Makes this review simply a good guess honestly. Kidding of course. But seriously, i was treated that way, so sad. teachers have a very important role, very impacting on a young mind. I love this story. This was ME as a child. Mean teachers as well. I really really liked this. You just decided to write this? Inspiration? I'm serious, not just because I know you, this was GREAT, it just touched so close to home, and was beautifully written.

 Comment Written 26-May-2013


reply by the author on 26-May-2013
    oh lovely!!! I'd hoped you'd enjoy this one Greg - I haven't written anything quite like this one before. My husband and son both have ADD, so it's been an educational few years, believe me - on top of crappy teachers to boot, but, thank heaven, we finally discovered a strange, quirky old ex-lawyer teacher (who just happens to be a fabulous writer!) who didn't pigeon-hole my son and was really able to help him. So there's my inspiration - and my son is now 16 and I'm STILL dealing with crappy teachers! GRRR!
reply by GregoryCody on 26-May-2013
    Grr indeed! They can be very dangerous. 16 is very impressionable still. Very much so. He needs to have all the confidence in the world. I'm telling you, all my life and at 16-18 especially, the way my dad beat me down (by ignoring me and shrugging me off as if my opinions were "stupid") affects me greatly to This day! Teachers absolutely have that ability too-authority figures. Well if you ever have any needs on an outside point of view on it, I'm here! There is actually a fine line between BiPolar and ADHD they are finding. I might only have one. That would be nice!
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
    yes, the more research & study they do, I think they'll find all these things are just a point along a continuum and all pretty well acceptable as "normal" behavior! we're so anxious to pigeon-hole people and label them!
Comment from Liberty Justice
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Such a delightful and amusing stories. So funny how the woman topples to the ground. Tells of true events that often happen is schools. You paint the main character with such spunk and rebellion. He's a child scorned with impatience
and intolerance.

Liberty Justice

 Comment Written 26-May-2013


reply by the author on 26-May-2013
    They do indeed - thx so much LJ! :)))Sharyn
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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Oh wow absolutely wonderful. this is quite a piece for the contest and really a fun read. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it and keep these coming.

 Comment Written 26-May-2013


reply by the author on 26-May-2013
    Thx Barb - aren't you the sponsor of this great contest? :)))
reply by Barb Hensongispsaca on 26-May-2013
    I am indeed. I wanted to see what people thought of the topic. and yours is wonderful.
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
    I loved it as an 'original' competition thought Barb - so many of them are just plain BORING. This was absolutey was not. Thank you and big time BRAVO for sponsoring it! :)))
reply by Barb Hensongispsaca on 27-May-2013
    Absolutely will. I love your writing. It is so full of energy and life
Comment from ElegantButler
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There are, unfortunately, many teachers out there who can't handle anything other than a cookie-cutter classroom. The ones who rise above that to listen to every student and to work with a student's differences rather than berate or belittle them are flecks of gold in the river of the educational system.

 Comment Written 26-May-2013


reply by the author on 26-May-2013
    You are absolutely correct there EB - they're often the kids who think outside the box!
    :)Sharyn