The Old Witch House
A daring young man makes a fatal mistake34 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
A very nice horror story at first. You are correct there is no word count in this contest, so I'm wondering why you did not finish the tale. You have a beginning, a middle and a climax, but no resolution, no end. It is written in first person so either the boy lived or he is telling his story from the grave.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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A very nice horror story at first. You are correct there is no word count in this contest, so I'm wondering why you did not finish the tale. You have a beginning, a middle and a climax, but no resolution, no end. It is written in first person so either the boy lived or he is telling his story from the grave.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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I didn't want to tell the reader how it ended. I was hoping for a jaw dropping moment for the reader. Did he end up as dinner, who knows. thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from Janilou
I was not expecting that terrible twist! Great horror story. Wow. I didn't find anything in need of correction. Very well written and I hope you do well in the contest!
All the best. Poor boy!
Jan
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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I was not expecting that terrible twist! Great horror story. Wow. I didn't find anything in need of correction. Very well written and I hope you do well in the contest!
All the best. Poor boy!
Jan
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Poor boy, indeed. Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
Comment from angelface2
A scary story and you used all the words required for it. I just wish I had not read it so late at night. If I have nightmares it will be all your fault. Hahaha. Miss sally
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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A scary story and you used all the words required for it. I just wish I had not read it so late at night. If I have nightmares it will be all your fault. Hahaha. Miss sally
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Sorry I gave you a fright, but I am secretly very pleased. Thank you for the wonderful review. Gretchen.
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You'll be pleased to know I did not have nightmares. :D Miss Sally
Comment from Zue65
I don't really like a story if there is no redeeming factor at the end, It should be the two friends who deceived him that should be cooked in the fire for their deception and betrayal of a friend. The portrayal of the witch is acceptable for witches are like that. But to simply present the story for the sole purpose of just scaring is incomplete to me, there must be a moral lesson at the end for the readers to gain insight from your story. You are however a natural story teller, so this still deserved a 5 stars rating. God bless.
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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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I don't really like a story if there is no redeeming factor at the end, It should be the two friends who deceived him that should be cooked in the fire for their deception and betrayal of a friend. The portrayal of the witch is acceptable for witches are like that. But to simply present the story for the sole purpose of just scaring is incomplete to me, there must be a moral lesson at the end for the readers to gain insight from your story. You are however a natural story teller, so this still deserved a 5 stars rating. God bless.
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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The moral is don't do something you know is dangerous just because someone dares you to. LOL. thank you for the great review. Gretchen
