5/7/5 (Leaves in Fright)
Leaves float back to tree, so frightened.121 total reviews
Comment from reconciled
Hello...-smile-...when I was a kid...the night before was "devils night".....when we would...soap windows...egg stuff.....yea....didn't have a whole lot of supervision. alright...love Michael
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Hello...-smile-...when I was a kid...the night before was "devils night".....when we would...soap windows...egg stuff.....yea....didn't have a whole lot of supervision. alright...love Michael
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
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I remember those times. I was usually supervised very closely so I was 19 before I got to soap some car windows. Got caught, of course, and had to get the soap off the next day. That was enough shananigans for me. Linda
Comment from bard owl
Yes! Frightening that leaves would return to the trees. I think anything that is more than a little unusual is frightening to humans. And seeing something like you describe would do it for me! Excellent 5-7-5 entry. Blessings, Linda
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Yes! Frightening that leaves would return to the trees. I think anything that is more than a little unusual is frightening to humans. And seeing something like you describe would do it for me! Excellent 5-7-5 entry. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
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Thank you Linda. I didn't win the contest but was close. Linda
Comment from SimplyaStudent
This is a straightforward piece of work that gives a perfect example of how scary halloween can really be. V ery well done and good luck on the contest. :) SS
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This is a straightforward piece of work that gives a perfect example of how scary halloween can really be. V ery well done and good luck on the contest. :) SS
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
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Didn't win the contest. But, thanks for reading. Linda
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi livelylinda,
The leaves hurling themselves back onto the tree would be something to see, and you're right, it certainly would create fright - and not just in the leaves!
Good 5-7-5, it carries the story well.
Patrick
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Hi livelylinda,
The leaves hurling themselves back onto the tree would be something to see, and you're right, it certainly would create fright - and not just in the leaves!
Good 5-7-5, it carries the story well.
Patrick
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
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Thanks so much for reading and commenting. livelyinda
Comment from Stephen Wolff
5-7-5 without being a haiku and very topical. The idea of dead leaves returning to the trees is diverting! Rising from the dead? Very Halloween or is that something to do with some religion I've heard about. I enjoyed reading it over and thinking about it!
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5-7-5 without being a haiku and very topical. The idea of dead leaves returning to the trees is diverting! Rising from the dead? Very Halloween or is that something to do with some religion I've heard about. I enjoyed reading it over and thinking about it!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
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It is a Halloween poem for a contest which I didn't win. I was looking for a unique twist to fear on Halloween night and thought of all the fallen leaves, jumping back onto the trees to avoid some scary thing out there. Thanks for reading. Linda
Comment from Alan K Pease
Maybe they are afraid of becoming mulch with the man who brings his mower. It is more fun to make piles out of their beauty, a custom of fall before committing them to a bag so very light. Nice 5-7-5 more Haiku than Senryu. Good luck in the contest.
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Maybe they are afraid of becoming mulch with the man who brings his mower. It is more fun to make piles out of their beauty, a custom of fall before committing them to a bag so very light. Nice 5-7-5 more Haiku than Senryu. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
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It isn't Haiku or Senryu. It is just a plain 5/7/5 poem with no other rules, for a contest. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Spitfire
Good one, Linda. A unique idea: dead leaves jumping back on trees, raw with fright. Good assonance with ween, eve, leaves, trees. Good luck in the contest.
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Good one, Linda. A unique idea: dead leaves jumping back on trees, raw with fright. Good assonance with ween, eve, leaves, trees. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
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Didn't win. Thanks for reading. livelylinda
Comment from ragamuffin
This was a great 5-7-5 poem. It's hard to put much into so few syllables but you did and did it well. The piece is fun, creative, and creates an image of dusk on Halloween with the wind blowing through the dry leaves. Nice!
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This was a great 5-7-5 poem. It's hard to put much into so few syllables but you did and did it well. The piece is fun, creative, and creates an image of dusk on Halloween with the wind blowing through the dry leaves. Nice!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
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Thanks for reading. livelylinda
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a great 5-7-5 poem for the contest. You have perfect syllable count. I love the theme of it. Good luck in the contest.
~Teresa~
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This is a great 5-7-5 poem for the contest. You have perfect syllable count. I love the theme of it. Good luck in the contest.
~Teresa~
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
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Didn't win. Thanks for reading. livelylinda
Comment from blaise007
A good image of Halloween that one who has never experienced Halloween can have a feel of it. Brilliant. Piece, well done. You've done the Japanese proud.
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A good image of Halloween that one who has never experienced Halloween can have a feel of it. Brilliant. Piece, well done. You've done the Japanese proud.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
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Thank you. . .I think. . .livelylinda