Tiny Tales of Terror
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53 total reviews
Comment from boxergirl
Ouch, Dean! First of all, I thought my dang computer was messed up when the beeping started and quickly shut it down!!! 8-)
Then I remembered whose post I was reviewing. You devil you. I had to laugh.
And then... your story was way too scary and realistic because I'll never forget my friend who had a c-section telling me that she wasn't totally deadened and she could FEEL the cutting...
Hope I don't have to have surgery anytime soon! 8-)
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Ouch, Dean! First of all, I thought my dang computer was messed up when the beeping started and quickly shut it down!!! 8-)
Then I remembered whose post I was reviewing. You devil you. I had to laugh.
And then... your story was way too scary and realistic because I'll never forget my friend who had a c-section telling me that she wasn't totally deadened and she could FEEL the cutting...
Hope I don't have to have surgery anytime soon! 8-)
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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E-w-w-w-w, that's a horrible thing your friend had happen to her, boxergirl.
I had a similar experience myself when I awoke during surgery. I could hear a flurry of activity -- doctors and nurses talking, machines, and monitors going off -- but I felt no pain, only the tugging and pulling sensation as the doctor opened up a pocket in my chest. As soon as I spoke, everything got as quiet as church during prayer. The next thing I knew, I was waking up in recovery. Not a fun experience.
Anyhow, I've rambled enough. I really appreciate your review. Feedback like yours is invaluable to me as I try and continue the series. Much obliged...~Dean :)
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Dean,
Oh, dear, it seems your protagonist got herself in a fix, LOL.
By way of critique: I think this one needs a bit more storyline. How and/or why she ended up on the table. Why were those doctors going to torture her.
Perhaps you could achieve this by alluding to a very unusual hospital or having the doctors monsters behind their masks. Just my opinion.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Hi Dean,
Oh, dear, it seems your protagonist got herself in a fix, LOL.
By way of critique: I think this one needs a bit more storyline. How and/or why she ended up on the table. Why were those doctors going to torture her.
Perhaps you could achieve this by alluding to a very unusual hospital or having the doctors monsters behind their masks. Just my opinion.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Thanks, Lou, and your comments and suggestions are very much appreciated. Keep in mind that this is micro and flash fiction, which generally translates to one hundred words or less. This story comes in at just under 100 words, at 96. If I didn't covey my message well enough in that frame, then I simply didn't do my job properly.
Thanks very much for the awesome feedback...~Dean
Comment from Acquired Taste
Criminal Minds meets Josef Mengele - a touch of Sweeney Todd with input from The Blacklist. Night Gallery and Hitchcock had nothing like this for pure, elemental terror.
I love these pearls that stop you from breathing with one simple sentence. You have a true gift my dear Master of the Macabre. J
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Criminal Minds meets Josef Mengele - a touch of Sweeney Todd with input from The Blacklist. Night Gallery and Hitchcock had nothing like this for pure, elemental terror.
I love these pearls that stop you from breathing with one simple sentence. You have a true gift my dear Master of the Macabre. J
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Thanks so much, Jean, and I'm really happy to know that you think so at least. That is enough for me, being the mulch-talented author that you are yourself.
Thanks for the complimentary comments, and for the six stars, too! You've made my day as always, my friend. :)
~SPOOKY
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Perhaps it takes a somewhat 'scarred' psyche to truly see all the nuances encompassed in your offerings - for me they scream out and shake my shoulders....
Comment from Eternal Muse
Wow, Dean, this is a horror at its best. Or shall we say, worst? I cannot even imagine the scrubbed monsters cutting on the conscious person. Eek... A fantastic horror installment, Dean, though I would like some clarification on it being a muoti-author book that any premium FS can contribute to?
A ferric picture intensifies the effect.
Blood curdling. Right up your alley (smile).
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Wow, Dean, this is a horror at its best. Or shall we say, worst? I cannot even imagine the scrubbed monsters cutting on the conscious person. Eek... A fantastic horror installment, Dean, though I would like some clarification on it being a muoti-author book that any premium FS can contribute to?
A ferric picture intensifies the effect.
Blood curdling. Right up your alley (smile).
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Any FanStory member can add a chapter to the book, Yelena, by selecting the "add a chapter to this book" tab, and posting their story. It's really that simple. I've only asked that the stories be flash horror fiction, or micro horror fiction, which simply means that the story is under one hundred words.
This particular terror tale would fall under the category of micro horror fiction, as it is just 96 words.
Thanks so much for your fantastic feedback and review. I sincerely appreciate it, as always. :)
~Dean
Comment from petalangela
Terrifying. Your words bring home to me my worst fears. Perhaps the worst fear of anyone or perhaps the worst is the fear of being buried alive.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Terrifying. Your words bring home to me my worst fears. Perhaps the worst fear of anyone or perhaps the worst is the fear of being buried alive.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Thank you very much for your review and comments, petalangela. I actually have awakened during an operation once. I felt the doctors tugging and pulling, but thankfully there was no pain. When I spoke and said, "Uh, hey... guys? Am I supposed to be awake yet?", everything got deathly quiet in the room. The next thing I knew, I was waking up in recovery. It was terrifying, and thank goodness I was able to mumble the words with a tube sticking down my throat, lol! ~Dean
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Oh wow. Not good now I am terrified. I had all my teeth out with injected anaesthetic and it wore off I refused any more jabs and the two were taken out while my mouth was live I am perhaps too dumb to feel pain. My jab also wore off during an eye op. I was asked of I drank heavily because that affects it but I don't drink. I need a heart op but I have REFUSED. To go under again Petal. Ps I love reading you submissions
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That what I was undergoing when it happened to me, heart surgery. They were implanting a defibrillator in my chest. I'm really happy to know you're enjoying these tiny tales of terror. Hopefully, there will be more soon to come.
Take care, penalangela...;) ~Dean
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That what I was undergoing when it happened to me, heart surgery. They were implanting a defibrillator in my chest. I'm really happy to know you're enjoying these tiny tales of terror. Hopefully, there will be more soon to come.
Take care, penalangela...;) ~Dean
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Dean,
Another good entry into the anthology.
This is a classic story well told. The style is quite simple for this one which is just as chilling.
Nice addition
G
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Hi Dean,
Another good entry into the anthology.
This is a classic story well told. The style is quite simple for this one which is just as chilling.
Nice addition
G
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Thanks, G-Man, and I've made this a book which anyone here can contribute to, if they like. I hope one day you will decide to contribute your own tiny tale of terror to the book.
Much appreciated, my friend...~Dean
Comment from Eric1
Wow Dean you certainly are without doubt, the master of horror, it is a brilliant talent that can tell such a story in a hundred words or less, I take my hat off to you sir!
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Wow Dean you certainly are without doubt, the master of horror, it is a brilliant talent that can tell such a story in a hundred words or less, I take my hat off to you sir!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Hey, thanks a bunch for reading this chapter first and foremost, Eric, but also for the very generous six star rating and your thoughtful comments as well. As always, I truly appreciate it, and I'm very glad that you enjoyed the story. ~Dean :)
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I certainly did my friend, hence the sixer!
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an absolutely terrifying post from the author here. This is so bad that I could almost believe that it could happen. This would make a great premise for a movie. Well done yet again.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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This is an absolutely terrifying post from the author here. This is so bad that I could almost believe that it could happen. This would make a great premise for a movie. Well done yet again.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Thanks, Thomes, and I actually have awakened while being operated on. It's when I had the defibrillator implanted in my chest. I spoke, the room went dead silent, and the next thing I knew I was waking up in the recovery room. There was no pain involved, but I was horrified to learn I'd awakened during surgery. I barely remember it... ~Dean
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Wow! That is a terrifying thing to happen.
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It was scary as hell, let me tell you! :)
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I'll bet it was.
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I'll bet it was.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hey, Dean...
Well, that nurse is a real keeper. So full of compassion.
I have thought about people who have been knocked out, but still fee the pain but can't say anything.
It's sort of like being buried alive. I'm sure you remember Vincent Price in 'The Pit and the Pendulum.' Freaky, like before Chuckie or Freddie Kruger came to life.
As always, a great story and artwork.
Hang in there, my friend.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Hey, Dean...
Well, that nurse is a real keeper. So full of compassion.
I have thought about people who have been knocked out, but still fee the pain but can't say anything.
It's sort of like being buried alive. I'm sure you remember Vincent Price in 'The Pit and the Pendulum.' Freaky, like before Chuckie or Freddie Kruger came to life.
As always, a great story and artwork.
Hang in there, my friend.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Oh yeah, I remember that film as well as Vincent Price very well, Jax. I was a big fan of his films growing up.
I very much appreciate your review...~Dean
Comment from royowen
I just love I...ce cream Dean, I've just written my part testimony up til the time I met Jesus, I just read deniz22, uop know who I mean, the next one I read is this delicacy. Still well done my friend, nobody writes these as well as you. Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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I just love I...ce cream Dean, I've just written my part testimony up til the time I met Jesus, I just read deniz22, uop know who I mean, the next one I read is this delicacy. Still well done my friend, nobody writes these as well as you. Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Thanks, Roy, that is very kind of you to say. I do like to think I'm very well tapped in to what scares people. I have been pretty much since the day of my own near death experience. It's really strange how it happened that way.
I'm glad you enjoyed the story, and I certainly appreciate your review. :)
~Dean
