Hot Dogs, French Fries, Lemonade!
An ode to a hot dog stand.130 total reviews
Comment from Day Z Chayn
Hi Andre,
I would've liked to meet your mom,
to eat her treats with much aplomb,
all from a single lemon tree-
She was the best mama she could be because
each time you went to Skooby's, the best
was what there was to eat. Often, I'd like to
perhaps guess it was a test to see
if those Hollywood tourists ought resist
pointing at your mama, your siblings, & you
Back in the day, my mama lived in a different time.
Hot dogs, lemonade, and French fries were hard to come by.
Troops overseas got 'Spam' and 'M&M's'.
Prejudice and racism were both a rampant disease,
as virulently uncomfortable as Ebola or S.T.D.'s.
Today, the tide continues with our country's immigrant parade-
Why not embrace and invite them all to Skooby's for some HOT DOGS! FRENCH FRIES! LEMONADE!
(I'm touched is all by this nostalgic place I've never seen or set foot into.
I'm awfully lucky to get a can of Bush's baked beans, & as for the Hebrew National hot dogs I consume, they don't come with a bun or condiments but are eaten straight from the package when not heated up from the hot plate in my room.)
~Shane~
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Hi Andre,
I would've liked to meet your mom,
to eat her treats with much aplomb,
all from a single lemon tree-
She was the best mama she could be because
each time you went to Skooby's, the best
was what there was to eat. Often, I'd like to
perhaps guess it was a test to see
if those Hollywood tourists ought resist
pointing at your mama, your siblings, & you
Back in the day, my mama lived in a different time.
Hot dogs, lemonade, and French fries were hard to come by.
Troops overseas got 'Spam' and 'M&M's'.
Prejudice and racism were both a rampant disease,
as virulently uncomfortable as Ebola or S.T.D.'s.
Today, the tide continues with our country's immigrant parade-
Why not embrace and invite them all to Skooby's for some HOT DOGS! FRENCH FRIES! LEMONADE!
(I'm touched is all by this nostalgic place I've never seen or set foot into.
I'm awfully lucky to get a can of Bush's baked beans, & as for the Hebrew National hot dogs I consume, they don't come with a bun or condiments but are eaten straight from the package when not heated up from the hot plate in my room.)
~Shane~
Comment Written 03-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Oh, thank you, Shane, for your generous, creative review. You should post this poem! It delighted me. I especially loved this section:
Prejudice and racism were both a rampant disease,
as virulently uncomfortable as Ebola or S.T.D.'s.
Today, the tide continues with our country's immigrant parade-
You tell it like it is and bring your poem to a rousing conclusion:
Why not embrace and invite them all to Skooby's for some HOT DOGS! FRENCH FRIES! LEMONADE!
Thank you for sharing your most original, generous, six star review.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
A wonderful poem Andre, layered with memories with aromatic words that almost rise from the page, a very deserving contest win, very well done.
Mitchell
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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A wonderful poem Andre, layered with memories with aromatic words that almost rise from the page, a very deserving contest win, very well done.
Mitchell
Comment Written 03-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Oh, thank you, Mitchell, for your review and congratulations. I appreciate them.
Comment from nancyrabbrose
Good for you!! This is a wonderful poem. (I do not consider it humor, however.)
It is poignant and brilliant. In addition, you perform it very well. Congratulations. The use of colors in the poem is especially good. Yellow, red. Your dear mother who called herself "Yeller Gal". Truly this is the way to relish a memory.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Good for you!! This is a wonderful poem. (I do not consider it humor, however.)
It is poignant and brilliant. In addition, you perform it very well. Congratulations. The use of colors in the poem is especially good. Yellow, red. Your dear mother who called herself "Yeller Gal". Truly this is the way to relish a memory.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Oh, thank you, Nancy, for your generous, six star review. My mother, Yeller Gal, would have been thrilled by poignant poem. Thank you for the congratulations, too.
Comment from Fridayauthor
What a nice memory piece! It was so easy to visualize this place that conjures up all sorts of memories, with me, more fried clams and fries.
Your mom's cooking struck a cord too; especially lemon meringue pie and lemonade.
Very nicely done indeed!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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What a nice memory piece! It was so easy to visualize this place that conjures up all sorts of memories, with me, more fried clams and fries.
Your mom's cooking struck a cord too; especially lemon meringue pie and lemonade.
Very nicely done indeed!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Oh, thank you, Fridayauthor, for your review. I am glad my nostalgic poem struck a chord with you.
Comment from Lulube
yes congrats for your win!!! A lighthearted, bubbly read that took you from one taste to another with fond memories. good descriptions
fun was had through you to me, the reader
lulube
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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yes congrats for your win!!! A lighthearted, bubbly read that took you from one taste to another with fond memories. good descriptions
fun was had through you to me, the reader
lulube
Comment Written 03-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Thank you, lulube, for your review and congratulations. I am glad you had fun with this delicious read.
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welcome
lulube
Comment from Bard's Bride
Not well versed on types of poetry but this appears to be a "tone poem" ? Anyway, the imagery is spectacular. Great descriptors to take the reader to that time and place. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Not well versed on types of poetry but this appears to be a "tone poem" ? Anyway, the imagery is spectacular. Great descriptors to take the reader to that time and place. Best wishes.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Bard's Bride, for your generous, six star review of my "tone poem." I wanted the written word to emulate the spoken of my performance and to evoke my experience dining at Skooby's. Thanks again.
Comment from kathleenspalding
Sweet post with lots of sensory to put the reader right there in the scene. Love the excellent photographs and the way you used spacing and font to enhance the descriptions.
Only one thing that I'm mentioning just in case - And memories of... As is, these memories are also something you dined on, as the verse is not a complete sentence on its own. (I'm figuring you meant it that way, and it's fine with me.)
All the best.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2017
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Sweet post with lots of sensory to put the reader right there in the scene. Love the excellent photographs and the way you used spacing and font to enhance the descriptions.
Only one thing that I'm mentioning just in case - And memories of... As is, these memories are also something you dined on, as the verse is not a complete sentence on its own. (I'm figuring you meant it that way, and it's fine with me.)
All the best.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2017
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Yes, Kathleen, I dined on memories as well. Food triggers such associations. Food is more than just food. It is the loving hands that prepared it, the occasions it is served, and the people who share it with you. Thank you for your generous review.
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I thought so. You're welcome
Comment from krys123
Marvelous, Sis Cat;
-and I also see that you won the contest for a valid without mentioning an animal or a person. Congratulations as you definitely met the requirements as I don't think I could possibly write without mentioning an animal or a person. And you did it so well as you spark a memory of that lemonade stand that sold hot dogs and fries so well.
-Great imagery of the lemon tree in your backyard and the lemon meringue pies associated with it. It had a little story in the background that helped with reading your poem.
-The great color arrangement of a lemony background and bright and vibrant colors to voice your happiness and joyfulness which represents the time you had there, having lemonade.
- Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one and again congratulations.
Alex
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Marvelous, Sis Cat;
-and I also see that you won the contest for a valid without mentioning an animal or a person. Congratulations as you definitely met the requirements as I don't think I could possibly write without mentioning an animal or a person. And you did it so well as you spark a memory of that lemonade stand that sold hot dogs and fries so well.
-Great imagery of the lemon tree in your backyard and the lemon meringue pies associated with it. It had a little story in the background that helped with reading your poem.
-The great color arrangement of a lemony background and bright and vibrant colors to voice your happiness and joyfulness which represents the time you had there, having lemonade.
- Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one and again congratulations.
Alex
Comment Written 03-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Alex, for your generous, six star review and congratulations. This poem was my first win on FanStory, and I enjoyed performing it at poetry open mics. Yes, I wanted to do something different than an ode to an animal or person. It paid off.
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Fantastic, as it is really good. And again, congratulations.
Alex
Comment from sharonlshelley
nice poem about an unusual topic it very nicely done the picture worked well with you work thanks for sharing your work it was a pleasure to read,sharon
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nice poem about an unusual topic it very nicely done the picture worked well with you work thanks for sharing your work it was a pleasure to read,sharon
Comment Written 03-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Oh, thank you, Sharon, for your review of my award-winning, unusual poem. I am glad you found the read pleasurable.
Comment from Poetofheart2013
wow what a really cute and fun poem love your Imaging its like
I was there eating a hotdog mmm! I really enjoy reading it
Great Job
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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wow what a really cute and fun poem love your Imaging its like
I was there eating a hotdog mmm! I really enjoy reading it
Great Job
Comment Written 03-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Yes, Poetofheart2013, I am glad you felt like you were there eating hotdogs. Thank you for your review.