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Life, Love, and Other Disasters

Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "An angel flew from heaven"
A collection of poems on these themes

64 total reviews 
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
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Hi Steve - this is absolutely delightful. Quite an unusual love poem and a perfect Rondeau Redouble. Good abab rhyme throughout and the repeated lines fit seemlessly in and do not sound at all contrived to meet the requirements of this poetry form. Good luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
    Thanks, Dorothy.

    Yes, it's one of the challenges of this form to make sure the repeated lines don't sound artificial. Glad you enjoyed.

    Steve
Comment from dmt1967
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This is a beautiful poem, my friend. An angel from heaven is indeed a rare site. I love the romantic way your words sound and feel when they hit the air. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
    Thank you very much for the kind words.

    Steve
Comment from Dean Kuch
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A very lovely poem, Steve, well crafted.
I enjoyed the repetitive lines, as well as your "running into a brick wall" type ending. The cadence, meter, rhyme and flow fell flawlessly into place, and spiritual references to God and other divine deities beyond our reach are always a plus to those who enjoy romantic poetry. Shielding one from harm through divine intervention and the like.
Nicely done, well composed.
Good luck.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
    Thanks, Dean. I enjoy tinkering about with this form - I've done a few now and they seem to be getting easier.

    Steve
reply by Dean Kuch on 29-Jan-2016
    You're welcome.
reply by Anonymous Member on 31-Jan-2016
    You're welcome.
Comment from lightink
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I love how the full love story unfolded slowly in this poem!
Also, the funny contrast/ oxymoron of 'angel in the bed with someone".
That's not really the Catholic approach!
Slipped halo, reassuring God... very unconventional in the most pleasant way!
This would deserve a six, unfortunately I am out :(.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
    Thanks, Jyoti - I suspect this was a protestant angel! You know what those Proddies get up to!

    Thanks for the kind words and the virtual six.

    Steve
Comment from danpald
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When love fills the heart
Beauty takes first spot
For the wonder of such a creature
Heaven alone can render

So an angel is found
When love fills the heart
Soon to learn the truth
That angels are human too

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
    Dan, thanks for your poetic response.

    Steve
Comment from Gloria ....
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As always with your poetry Steve you have deftly painted a sweet picture with an elegant and eloquent touch. Your artful masterful of the language is demonstrated throughout this lovely write. And it's oh so romantic, which I am a big sap for, but please keep that secret.

Best wishes to you in the contest. This is a beauty.

Gloria

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
    Gloria is a big soppy romantic - I may well splash that all over the forum! Actually, I just hope the committee members are soppy romantics too!

    A certain nameless reviewer gave me a virtual six for this piece and a great rah-rah review because of the wonderful picture. I shared my reply with Cat, who thought you might like to read it as well......

    Angie, thank you for the awesome and golden review.

    I have to admit I should get a lot of credit for that picture. After all I had to find my way all the way to Google images and then type 'angel' (spelling it correctly too or I might have ended up with some angles instead!) Then I had to save it and upload it - all tricky stuff - and remember I didn't have a lot of time because I had been busy writing a poem as well.

    Oh, yes, that's right - there were some words on the page - not that those really count - I mean, it's only a poem, right, so obviously the picture is the most important thing. Glad you didn't waste any of your time by actually reading and reviewing that - such a waste of time when there are so many other pictures to look at.

    One thing puzzles me though - how on earth do you get by with those mean-spirited characters who refuse to put a picture on their poem? It must make it awfully difficult for you.

    Have a lovely day. I'm off to google up a nice picture for my next poem.

    Steve
reply by Gloria .... on 29-Jan-2016
    And the very first review she gave to me, Steve, was also glowing. You are much better than you think you are, she says. You should contact Paramount Song she says, they will make a recording. (I Googled Paramount and one site at least says it's a scam)

    The review is on my Gilligan's Island post. I thought she was full of crap. The only part of the post that was lyric was the filched part, (in italics to adhere to copyright laws) Put another log on the fire.

    It was fun. Foxie lady only ever gave me good reviews. But when I read her profile comments, I saw some of her character I didn't much like. There is no excuse for cruelty.

    Thanks for sharing. :))
Comment from janalma
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What a sweet, gentle, yet humorous poem. I liked the God-squad being all upset because their angel was missing. And a mere mortal claims her. Any lady would find this a most romantic poem, if written to her. Lovely.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
    Thanks so much for the great review and the six stars. Actually, my angel and I are having a blazing row tonight. feisty little critters, these angels!

    Steve
reply by janalma on 29-Jan-2016
    You've got me grinning again.
Comment from Leineco
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OMG - How adorable is this!! LOL

What a unique way to say you married an angel! You constructed the Rondeau perfectly and told a tale in a most entertaining (?)metaphor. . .whatever LOL

One quick thought - in the final stanza Line 2, might as be better than a? It might just be personal taste, but it scans better for me that way :-)

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
    Thanks for the great review and the suggestion for that small change.

    Steve
Comment from Unspoken94
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Only one who is truly in love with this person would know
that they were a gift from God, an angel no less. This is such
a beautiful love poem, creatively set in Rondeau redouble form.
I too am in the contest, but I am humbled by such a gifted piece
by you. All the best in the contest. -Bill

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
    Thank you for the kind review. I shall have to look up your piece. It is one of my regrets that FS doesn't give us any way to see all the entries in their site contests...

    Steve
Comment from DonandVicki
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A nicely constructed poetic love verse. I think you will do well in the contest. Nice rhyming structure ture and the poem flows very well.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
    Thanks for the kind words.

    Steve