House of dreams
Just a poem 8 /6 /8 /645 total reviews
Comment from DR DIP
Nice write as usual Luna I like the ABCB rhyme scheme
Our Luna swings upon the stars
and dances on the moon.
My dreams tonight lack any fright,
I know she'll be here soon.
love this verse Luna thanks for sharing with us
dip
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Nice write as usual Luna I like the ABCB rhyme scheme
Our Luna swings upon the stars
and dances on the moon.
My dreams tonight lack any fright,
I know she'll be here soon.
love this verse Luna thanks for sharing with us
dip
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
those are better dreams to have than the ones of horror.
I like the light and lively way you did this cute little rhyming poem of gentle dreams
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those are better dreams to have than the ones of horror.
I like the light and lively way you did this cute little rhyming poem of gentle dreams
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
Comment from lyenochka
Bedtime stories must have been really great at your house! I like the idea of the house being the vessel to fly to other worlds. My favorites lines are:
directing dreams of wit and glee
outside the earthly realm.
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Bedtime stories must have been really great at your house! I like the idea of the house being the vessel to fly to other worlds. My favorites lines are:
directing dreams of wit and glee
outside the earthly realm.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
Comment from sue133
I loved the mystical, 'other worldiness' of your poem. Your imagery is fabulous and set me on a journey into the sky and the unknown. I have been told many times that I seem to live in fairyland. I do. And I love it! Susan
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I loved the mystical, 'other worldiness' of your poem. Your imagery is fabulous and set me on a journey into the sky and the unknown. I have been told many times that I seem to live in fairyland. I do. And I love it! Susan
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
Comment from Irish Rain
So pretty...makes me want to play atop that crystal plow too!! I love the picture, it adds to the magical, lovely poem, blessings....
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So pretty...makes me want to play atop that crystal plow too!! I love the picture, it adds to the magical, lovely poem, blessings....
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Luna. How are you, my friend. Missing posts from you of late? I loved this...especially this stanza stood out for me:
"Seen sights no human's seen before
Space flowers colored green ~
A two-headed Conquistador,
his stallion black and lean."
Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Hi, Luna. How are you, my friend. Missing posts from you of late? I loved this...especially this stanza stood out for me:
"Seen sights no human's seen before
Space flowers colored green ~
A two-headed Conquistador,
his stallion black and lean."
Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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yes, my friend Bob. I've been in the hospital with a myriad of issues. I had a lung biopsy (no results yet) not have to gain strength for other thing. I'm sorry I haven't reviewed any of your work recently, but I've been real tired. To this to mess around with anything.
Hopefully I'll get out of here in a couple of weeks.
All my best,
Jeni
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No problem, my friend. Sorry to hear you have been ill etc. Take your time and get well soon. Bless you, Julie. Bob
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Jeni ( am I spelling your site name right)
I see this poem is dedicated to your son Mickey with fun rhyming Nice to know your Muse (Luna) is at the helm
directing dreams of wit and glee
outside the earthly realm.
Smiles
Gert
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Hello Jeni ( am I spelling your site name right)
I see this poem is dedicated to your son Mickey with fun rhyming Nice to know your Muse (Luna) is at the helm
directing dreams of wit and glee
outside the earthly realm.
Smiles
Gert
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Jeni
Your poem reminded me of an old Gordon Lightfoot song, "The Pony Man".
https://youtu.be/jp0Ahb_ldxU
Suggestions...
"of captivating nights for me with Luna at the helm;
directing dreams of wit and glee
outside the earthly realm." ...(I'd make this four lines and keep the poem uniform.
of captivating nights for me
with Luna at the helm;
directing dreams of wit and glee
outside the earthly realm.)
"An two-headed Conquistador" ...(did you mean to type "A two-headed conquistador" /notice I lower-cased the "C")
"until next time we play and roam
atop our crystal plow." ...(Okay, help me out here. A plow? Where did that come from? Okay, Gordon Lightfoot used a pirate ship for the kids to play on. But a crystal plow?
My favorite lines,
"Our Luna swings upon the stars
and dances on the moon." ...(but help me understand this. Where does "Luna" fit in? I thought YOU were Luna. Is that supposed to be your muse?
cheers
Kimbob
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Hi Jeni
Your poem reminded me of an old Gordon Lightfoot song, "The Pony Man".
https://youtu.be/jp0Ahb_ldxU
Suggestions...
"of captivating nights for me with Luna at the helm;
directing dreams of wit and glee
outside the earthly realm." ...(I'd make this four lines and keep the poem uniform.
of captivating nights for me
with Luna at the helm;
directing dreams of wit and glee
outside the earthly realm.)
"An two-headed Conquistador" ...(did you mean to type "A two-headed conquistador" /notice I lower-cased the "C")
"until next time we play and roam
atop our crystal plow." ...(Okay, help me out here. A plow? Where did that come from? Okay, Gordon Lightfoot used a pirate ship for the kids to play on. But a crystal plow?
My favorite lines,
"Our Luna swings upon the stars
and dances on the moon." ...(but help me understand this. Where does "Luna" fit in? I thought YOU were Luna. Is that supposed to be your muse?
cheers
Kimbob
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
Comment from winnona
A very well-written poem. Your words flowed well line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. Your artwork and background color completed the piece well.
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A very well-written poem. Your words flowed well line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. Your artwork and background color completed the piece well.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I liked this fantastic, dream poem in good rhymes about the adventure to the dream house, well flown; I enjoyed the metaphysical influence, simple diction, expressive causal phenomena and word visual imagery.
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I liked this fantastic, dream poem in good rhymes about the adventure to the dream house, well flown; I enjoyed the metaphysical influence, simple diction, expressive causal phenomena and word visual imagery.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017