Don't wish-Do
Trying another form53 total reviews
Comment from The Death
So true! We must have the will to act on things we want. Wishes alone never help. You used this form effectively to present your thoughts. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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So true! We must have the will to act on things we want. Wishes alone never help. You used this form effectively to present your thoughts. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Victor Y
Inspiring, yet powerful poem! It's short in length, yet its brevity contributes evermore to its message. Indeed, actions over thoughts. Actions win the day. Good job! Enjoyed reading!
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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Inspiring, yet powerful poem! It's short in length, yet its brevity contributes evermore to its message. Indeed, actions over thoughts. Actions win the day. Good job! Enjoyed reading!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Yemima Kebede1
Hello again. This is also a great poem as well. I really love the last two lines. I agree that poetry is a lot of fun. Especially when you are writing something that you are truly passionate about. Best of luck to you in the contest!
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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Hello again. This is also a great poem as well. I really love the last two lines. I agree that poetry is a lot of fun. Especially when you are writing something that you are truly passionate about. Best of luck to you in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much for your wonderful review****kahpot
Comment from Air Spirit
I love this one! It is so true and offers simple but profound wisdom... it comes down to the age old adage of 'action speaks louder than words' --- because I have learned the hard way, that there are allot of pretty slick talkers in the world, and since I am a poet / writer, I tend to fall in love easily with words... but it is the actions that spring from what is housed in a heart and mind that show its true intent and desire... thank you for sharing this little gem of vision and wisdom... :)
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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I love this one! It is so true and offers simple but profound wisdom... it comes down to the age old adage of 'action speaks louder than words' --- because I have learned the hard way, that there are allot of pretty slick talkers in the world, and since I am a poet / writer, I tend to fall in love easily with words... but it is the actions that spring from what is housed in a heart and mind that show its true intent and desire... thank you for sharing this little gem of vision and wisdom... :)
Comment Written 01-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much and yes actions are the ones****kahpot
Comment from Craigitar
Good entry for the contest! Wishful thinking can be entertaining, but has little value towards getting stuff done. Your five liner points this out quite nicely. Well done and best of luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018
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Good entry for the contest! Wishful thinking can be entertaining, but has little value towards getting stuff done. Your five liner points this out quite nicely. Well done and best of luck with the contest.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there,
You really are trying out new forms, huh? Have you gone to Poetry Dances of ShadowPoetry to learn about other new ones?
I enjoy this piece very much. It is so true that only actions will lead to results; you could think about doing something forever,
~patty~
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018
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Hi there,
You really are trying out new forms, huh? Have you gone to Poetry Dances of ShadowPoetry to learn about other new ones?
I enjoy this piece very much. It is so true that only actions will lead to results; you could think about doing something forever,
~patty~
Comment Written 01-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much, At the moment I am learning from all you wonderful writers on this site****kahpot
Comment from Hugh McDowell
Excellent work. The poem is a complete story in just five line. From start to finish it reads smooth with excellent pacing. I love the fourth line; Over the action on thoughts. Thinking can't just be mental if you want to accomplish something; action must follow. This is a version of faith without works from the Bible. Very good poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018
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Excellent work. The poem is a complete story in just five line. From start to finish it reads smooth with excellent pacing. I love the fourth line; Over the action on thoughts. Thinking can't just be mental if you want to accomplish something; action must follow. This is a version of faith without works from the Bible. Very good poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much for your excellent and encouraging review****kahpot
Comment from Deirdre Anne Gialamas
Dear Kahpot,
The advice, often read, but soon forgotten, in your lines was well presented
in this pocket-size book. Title is sharp and easily remembered.
Warmest wishes,
Deirdre Anne
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018
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Dear Kahpot,
The advice, often read, but soon forgotten, in your lines was well presented
in this pocket-size book. Title is sharp and easily remembered.
Warmest wishes,
Deirdre Anne
Comment Written 01-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Tootie
Very well-written and such great advice I know I needed to hear right now. Thank you for this. Actions need to be taken to produce results. Seems you are enjoying exploring the many different types of poems that can be written. I'm glad you are having fun. They are great! :) - Cathy
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018
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Very well-written and such great advice I know I needed to hear right now. Thank you for this. Actions need to be taken to produce results. Seems you are enjoying exploring the many different types of poems that can be written. I'm glad you are having fun. They are great! :) - Cathy
Comment Written 01-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much and yes I am having fun while learning at the same time****kahpot
Comment from mermaids
There is wisdom in your words. Your poem reminds me of my mother, she always used the words "wishful thinking". This is a poem that speaks to the reader, you say much in few words, actions speak louder than words.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018
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There is wisdom in your words. Your poem reminds me of my mother, she always used the words "wishful thinking". This is a poem that speaks to the reader, you say much in few words, actions speak louder than words.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much for your very encouraging review****kahpot
