The sight of you
A three line poem, 5-7-745 total reviews
Comment from Lady Jane
Hmmm, what a profoundly written short piece. As I tell everyone, these short writes are so difficult to review with any real conviction, but when you say something so profound in such few words, it's worth recognizing. Well done. The deep metaphorical write is well worth the stars. I wish you all the best in the contest. Well displayed, well written, and perfectly conveyed subject.
janelle
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Hmmm, what a profoundly written short piece. As I tell everyone, these short writes are so difficult to review with any real conviction, but when you say something so profound in such few words, it's worth recognizing. Well done. The deep metaphorical write is well worth the stars. I wish you all the best in the contest. Well displayed, well written, and perfectly conveyed subject.
janelle
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much for this wonderful and encouraging review****kahpot
Comment from Air Spirit
Exceptional! I really love this short 3 line poem... you did an excellent job, and said so much, in such a limited format... your poem was sensual, showed passion and longing for your beloved, and told the story of how eyes say 'everything' without saying anything at all! Excellent entry --- I would give you a six-er if I had any more to give -- because this is deserving of one!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Exceptional! I really love this short 3 line poem... you did an excellent job, and said so much, in such a limited format... your poem was sensual, showed passion and longing for your beloved, and told the story of how eyes say 'everything' without saying anything at all! Excellent entry --- I would give you a six-er if I had any more to give -- because this is deserving of one!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018
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Wow! thank you very much this is truly encouraging, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
The colors of this eye are not colors usually portrayed and it makes a bold statement about the viewer's perception. The word quenching is the real lynchpin in this story which is wonderfully constructed.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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The colors of this eye are not colors usually portrayed and it makes a bold statement about the viewer's perception. The word quenching is the real lynchpin in this story which is wonderfully constructed.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written three-line poem about the eyes of people that tells more than what they want to reveal without noticing the windows of the soul can't hide the truth.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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A very well-written three-line poem about the eyes of people that tells more than what they want to reveal without noticing the windows of the soul can't hide the truth.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much for your understanding review****kahpot
Comment from Brigitte Elko
The eyes are indeed the mirror to the soul You penned this message excellently. The artwork is an awesome compliment. Good luck in the contest, this is a great entry.
Blessings,
Brigitte
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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The eyes are indeed the mirror to the soul You penned this message excellently. The artwork is an awesome compliment. Good luck in the contest, this is a great entry.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much for this very encouraging review****kahpot
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Kahpot, this is an ooh-la-la poem of yearning and romantic desire - very nice. Good 5-7-7 format. Terrific photo choice ... those green, blue, violet eyes are powerful and allure many. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Hello Kahpot, this is an ooh-la-la poem of yearning and romantic desire - very nice. Good 5-7-7 format. Terrific photo choice ... those green, blue, violet eyes are powerful and allure many. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Kahpot, this is a good entry for the 3 Line Poem contest. It certainly does incorporate the message of love ...and lust.
My only comment would be in the last line with the word - every - I would count it as 3 syllables making the end line 8 syllables in total.
Perhaps use - ev'ry - making the word only 2 syllables and the end line in order of syllable count. Just a suggestion. Best of luck in the competition. ~DD
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Kahpot, this is a good entry for the 3 Line Poem contest. It certainly does incorporate the message of love ...and lust.
My only comment would be in the last line with the word - every - I would count it as 3 syllables making the end line 8 syllables in total.
Perhaps use - ev'ry - making the word only 2 syllables and the end line in order of syllable count. Just a suggestion. Best of luck in the competition. ~DD
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much every contains only two syllables eve-ry- ev-ree many thanks****kahpot
Comment from jenintorre
Hi Kahpot
This is a very expressive three line poem. A very concise love poem, so well expressed with wonderfully chosen words and artwork. Best wishes Jen.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Hi Kahpot
This is a very expressive three line poem. A very concise love poem, so well expressed with wonderfully chosen words and artwork. Best wishes Jen.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 3 Line Poem writing prompt.
Your short verse tells a clear story.
Well done and I wish you luck in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 3 Line Poem writing prompt.
Your short verse tells a clear story.
Well done and I wish you luck in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Pamusart
Hi kahpot. This is a good entry for the contest. Just a small nit. hearts should be possessive as heart's.
"my eyes take you in
gluing my hearts foundation "
I hope you have such as which you describe here. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Hi kahpot. This is a good entry for the contest. Just a small nit. hearts should be possessive as heart's.
"my eyes take you in
gluing my hearts foundation "
I hope you have such as which you describe here. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thank you very much, and the correction is done, I so love helpful comments, many thanks****kahpot
