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This Time - That Time 3

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Third book in the time travel trilogy

40 total reviews 
Comment from Treischel
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Gosh, I sure have missed a lot. They now have two children! I smiled at "toing" and "froing" don't often come across that combination.

Yes, Murder is certainly what one would expect from Mildred.

I thoroughly enjoy the easy relationship with James.

What a shock seeing Mildred. A surprise too that one could "rock their boat."

As usual, you have found a way to keep us in suspense. Loved the chaptrer. Saw no ewrrors.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
    I have had reviewers pick up lots of expressions I've been using, saying they hadn't heard them for years. It's funny, I only use the one I do use a lot. Yes, Veronica had her two children in the second book, and Ann does have some psychic powers. I thought it might come in handy if I want to bring them back in a few years time, (if I'm still around!!) James has been a boon to Veronica, so protective and helpful. Thank you so much, my friend, for this lovely review. It's lovely to see your name in my box. Big hugs. :)) Sandra xx
reply by Treischel on 06-Jan-2019
    Thank you Sandra. That's awfully sweet of you to say. I feel like I've come back to a family after a long break, although I am already feeling some old frustrations too..
Comment from Ulla
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Wow, Sandra. This is a story and a half. I don't know, but this third book is even better than the first two and that says a lot. I wish I had 10 stars to give you. The concept is fantastic and it's so well written. I'm as worried for Mildred as Veronica is. Can't wait to be reading on. Big hugs. Ulla xxx

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
    Aww, thank you so much for the 6 stars, Ulla, and the fabulous review. I really appreciate both. That's such a lovely compliment too, I'm so pleased you are enjoying this one, sometimes I find reading trilogies, or sequels, they tend to become a disappointment after the first ones. So, thank you for the fabulous encouragement. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from nancy_e_davis
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Wow, That is frightening. She should realize they had to have been successful or the present would not be. She needs
to know that date and time. If she goes back they could get the Vice Admiral to go to the Hospital so he will be delayed when it is bombed. I don't necessarily want him to die, just delayed. LOL Well done Sandra. Nancy:)

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
    Thank you, Nancy, lol, you are the only one that doesn't want the Vice Admiral to come to a sticky end, but that's the sweet woman you are. :)) All the while she still has James and the children, she knows the time line hasn't been altered, and she wants to keep it that way. She just wants to get back to Mildred now. Thanks, my friend. Big hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from Tootsie55
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This was a good chapter. I wish I had time to go back a bit. How far do I need to go to pick up the thread of this? Only one little suggestion for following...powers(-) that(-) be and the same in other places.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
    Thank you so much, Louise, for reading this part. I'll write a short synopsis so you have the gist of it. Thanks for that suggestion, it's a good idea, I'll insert them in the rest of the chapters as well. :)) I don't know if I said it to you yet, but I wish you both a very happy New Year! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from WryWriter
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I love the way this story is unfolding for the reader! You let this chapter end at the perfect moment. Now I can't wait to find out what happens!

and my heart was fit to burst with the love I felt for them now (that) I was back in my own time.
when I was tucking the children (omit up) in bed
she had no idea what was (omit really) going on.
I'm sure the powers will send me back soon now (that) I have a bit more to work on. If you've got the connection with them (omit that) I believe you to have, start hollering and rock their comfortable boat!"

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
    Thank you so much, WW, for this helpful review. I really appreciate that! I'll go and sort them out after this. I'm so pleased you are still enjoying my story! Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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Exciting chapter. I'm sure Mildred and Veronica will get together next time. I'm more worried about Germany winning WWI. They must find a way to stop that, and I really don't think killing the Vice Admiral would be enough. Someone else will take over. Can't kill 'em all. :)

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
    Thank you a million times for the 6, my dear friend. No, WW1 mustn't be lost. When I started this part, just trying to imagine what the world would look like now was quite something. Germany lost the war, yet they are doing very well now, better than many that eventually defeated them. Weird, isn't it? Thank you, my friend for this lovely review. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from royowen
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Thing are going into a bit of a downer at the moment, because of her visit to an alternative universe, when there were German rulership. Mildred appears, but keeps disappearing, and because the hospital is important to her survival and the present day history in remaining, well done, Sandra, an excellent episode, well done My friend, blessings, well done, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
    Aw, thank you, Roy, for your lovely review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part! Things are going to be changing soon. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by royowen on 06-Jan-2019
    Well done
Comment from tfawcus
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Another fine chapter filled with tension. You have us on the edge of our seats!
Six stars, if I had them.
Just one thing to consider.
"My mind was immersed in confusion."
I thought 'immersed' perhaps too passive for 'confusion'. Perhaps something like 'a whirl of confusion'?

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
    Thank you so much, Tony. That's an excellent suggestion and I will use that word. Don't worry about the six, just keep reading and letting me know your thoughts, that's the important thing. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by tfawcus on 06-Jan-2019
    You missed the six by a matter of minutes. I now find I?ve got them! Loving your story. Mine is in the doldrums a bit at the moment. I tried writing yesterday evening but couldn?t get into the swing of it.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
    I get like that at times. Before this chapter, I hadn't posted for over two weeks. Now I've got this one and another waiting in the wings. It goes like that at times. Don't pressure yourself, it will come. :)
    It was funny, when I came on here this morning, it was today here in England, and still yesterday on FS! (I was up at 4:30, I have a hacking cough that keeps me and Graham awake, so I got up so he could sleep. I'm good like that! LOL)
Comment from Cybertron1986
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Good voice and structure in your writing. It enables the reader to quickly identify and relate to your characters in an engaging way. You have a good command with grammar as well as your approach to development of the story. Well done

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
    Thank you so much, Cybertron 1986, for reading this part of my story, I really appreciate all the nice things you have said about it. :) Big hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from country ranch writer
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Time travel is getting old not knowing when on will disappear or reappear. Poor Mildred is still lost in the past will she be able to move forward ever again to the present?

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 Comment Written 05-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
    That is a good question, only time will tell. :)) Thank you so much for reading my latest part, I really appreciate your opinion. Big hugs. Sandra. :) xx
reply by country ranch writer on 05-Jan-2019
    smiles