Beach Front Property
Not all that it is cracked up to be...50 total reviews
Comment from LIJ Red
Shipwrecks come from many directions, and it might have been better if her junk vanished while she was having fun...to let her know it was time for a new start.
But most of us will go down with our plunder...excellent entry for the story poem.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Shipwrecks come from many directions, and it might have been better if her junk vanished while she was having fun...to let her know it was time for a new start.
But most of us will go down with our plunder...excellent entry for the story poem.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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So many homeless are mentally ill and have no ability to get a fresh start... Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
A very moving and powerful poem about the reality of homelessness. It's a shame it has to continue in our "wonderful society." The title you offer "Beach Front Property" is poignant--many pay millions for that title... a well-written and detailed account of just one of the many social ills we need to address.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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A very moving and powerful poem about the reality of homelessness. It's a shame it has to continue in our "wonderful society." The title you offer "Beach Front Property" is poignant--many pay millions for that title... a well-written and detailed account of just one of the many social ills we need to address.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Cindy, I'm in gratitude for your stellar/plus-one review... Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, how tragic! I am moved to tears by this astoundingly beautiful poem. Poor, poor homeless woman. I've written about this too, and because it seems so unfair in a world as wealthy as this one. God bless you for this marvelous poem. I hope you publish!
Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Oh, how tragic! I am moved to tears by this astoundingly beautiful poem. Poor, poor homeless woman. I've written about this too, and because it seems so unfair in a world as wealthy as this one. God bless you for this marvelous poem. I hope you publish!
Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey there... My Mom was paranoid schizophrenic... thanks so much for this sage review... yours, diana
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Ohhh... Now I must read this again -- I was off in assuming!
Comment from dragonpoet
This tells the sad story of a poor crazy old woman. She has all her belongings with
her along the beach. She reverts to child hood than back to reality and panics. We pray that things may change and she finds a place to keep her things with no worry and fear.
Good luck and keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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This tells the sad story of a poor crazy old woman. She has all her belongings with
her along the beach. She reverts to child hood than back to reality and panics. We pray that things may change and she finds a place to keep her things with no worry and fear.
Good luck and keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
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Don't mention it, Di.
Joan
Comment from karenina
I like the duality and juxtaposition of this poem... It is almost cliche' to think of "Beach Front Property" in terms of Malibu mansions and the high life. People and situations like Mary, in your poem, become too often invisible. So much easier to glance away than to try to reach out! So many of our homeless population have mental health issues-and yet they are truly outcasts to our medical system, falling through the cracks like sand through a boardwalk. Good luck with this fine entry into the Story/Prose Poem Contest!--Karenina
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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I like the duality and juxtaposition of this poem... It is almost cliche' to think of "Beach Front Property" in terms of Malibu mansions and the high life. People and situations like Mary, in your poem, become too often invisible. So much easier to glance away than to try to reach out! So many of our homeless population have mental health issues-and yet they are truly outcasts to our medical system, falling through the cracks like sand through a boardwalk. Good luck with this fine entry into the Story/Prose Poem Contest!--Karenina
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
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Hey yourself, you are very welcome!--Karenina
Comment from Wabigoon
What, "go you or I?" Mary's life has been destroyed by...a storm, high tide, hurricane, tsunami, God? These things are not very clear. Interesting title and approach. I wish you had left out the last line. It is absolutely not necessary and, for me, interferes with the observations of Mary and our sympathies for her "trashed" existence.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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What, "go you or I?" Mary's life has been destroyed by...a storm, high tide, hurricane, tsunami, God? These things are not very clear. Interesting title and approach. I wish you had left out the last line. It is absolutely not necessary and, for me, interferes with the observations of Mary and our sympathies for her "trashed" existence.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Gail Denham
Although I didn't quite follow the complete line of the poem, it was and is a powerful statement about the homeless, those that cling to their carts and hoard every soda bottle, every scrap of pizza they dug out of the trash behind Dominos, every picture they might still hold of their once family.
A thoughtful poem. thanks for the reminder of the sad plight of so many.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Although I didn't quite follow the complete line of the poem, it was and is a powerful statement about the homeless, those that cling to their carts and hoard every soda bottle, every scrap of pizza they dug out of the trash behind Dominos, every picture they might still hold of their once family.
A thoughtful poem. thanks for the reminder of the sad plight of so many.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Janet Foor
Truly, not all beach front property is all it's cracked up to be.
There is a powerful message in the well written story/prose poem for the contest.
Yes....but for the grace of God.....it could be you or me.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Truly, not all beach front property is all it's cracked up to be.
There is a powerful message in the well written story/prose poem for the contest.
Yes....but for the grace of God.....it could be you or me.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Gert sherwood
What an amazing Story/Prose Poem
author you have told us about a homeless lady who lives by the beach of how all of her treasure posses are missing, and then with the Grace of God
She discovers her stuff 's still okay.
Gert
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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What an amazing Story/Prose Poem
author you have told us about a homeless lady who lives by the beach of how all of her treasure posses are missing, and then with the Grace of God
She discovers her stuff 's still okay.
Gert
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
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Smiles you are welcome .
Gert
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written story poem about Mary's simple life at the beachfront. Where she goes all her belongings go with her. If anything happens to her belongings it feels like her life is ruined.
typo
proabably[probably] her stuff.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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A very well-written story poem about Mary's simple life at the beachfront. Where she goes all her belongings go with her. If anything happens to her belongings it feels like her life is ruined.
typo
proabably[probably] her stuff.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
