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Beach Front Property

Not all that it is cracked up to be...

50 total reviews 
Comment from LIJ Red
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Shipwrecks come from many directions, and it might have been better if her junk vanished while she was having fun...to let her know it was time for a new start.
But most of us will go down with our plunder...excellent entry for the story poem.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
    So many homeless are mentally ill and have no ability to get a fresh start... Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Exceptional
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A very moving and powerful poem about the reality of homelessness. It's a shame it has to continue in our "wonderful society." The title you offer "Beach Front Property" is poignant--many pay millions for that title... a well-written and detailed account of just one of the many social ills we need to address.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
    Cindy, I'm in gratitude for your stellar/plus-one review... Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Dawn Munro
Exceptional
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Oh, how tragic! I am moved to tears by this astoundingly beautiful poem. Poor, poor homeless woman. I've written about this too, and because it seems so unfair in a world as wealthy as this one. God bless you for this marvelous poem. I hope you publish!

Best of luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
    Hey there... My Mom was paranoid schizophrenic... thanks so much for this sage review... yours, diana
reply by Dawn Munro on 06-Mar-2019
    Ohhh... Now I must read this again -- I was off in assuming!
Comment from dragonpoet
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This tells the sad story of a poor crazy old woman. She has all her belongings with
her along the beach. She reverts to child hood than back to reality and panics. We pray that things may change and she finds a place to keep her things with no worry and fear.

Good luck and keep writing

Joan

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
    Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
reply by dragonpoet on 07-Mar-2019
    Don't mention it, Di.

    Joan
Comment from karenina
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I like the duality and juxtaposition of this poem... It is almost cliche' to think of "Beach Front Property" in terms of Malibu mansions and the high life. People and situations like Mary, in your poem, become too often invisible. So much easier to glance away than to try to reach out! So many of our homeless population have mental health issues-and yet they are truly outcasts to our medical system, falling through the cracks like sand through a boardwalk. Good luck with this fine entry into the Story/Prose Poem Contest!--Karenina

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
    Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
reply by karenina on 07-Mar-2019
    Hey yourself, you are very welcome!--Karenina
Comment from Wabigoon
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What, "go you or I?" Mary's life has been destroyed by...a storm, high tide, hurricane, tsunami, God? These things are not very clear. Interesting title and approach. I wish you had left out the last line. It is absolutely not necessary and, for me, interferes with the observations of Mary and our sympathies for her "trashed" existence.

Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
    Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Gail Denham
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Although I didn't quite follow the complete line of the poem, it was and is a powerful statement about the homeless, those that cling to their carts and hoard every soda bottle, every scrap of pizza they dug out of the trash behind Dominos, every picture they might still hold of their once family.
A thoughtful poem. thanks for the reminder of the sad plight of so many.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
    Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Janet Foor
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Truly, not all beach front property is all it's cracked up to be.

There is a powerful message in the well written story/prose poem for the contest.
Yes....but for the grace of God.....it could be you or me.

Well done.
Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
    Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Gert sherwood
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What an amazing Story/Prose Poem
author you have told us about a homeless lady who lives by the beach of how all of her treasure posses are missing, and then with the Grace of God
She discovers her stuff 's still okay.
Gert

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
    Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
reply by Gert sherwood on 06-Mar-2019
    Smiles you are welcome .
    Gert
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written story poem about Mary's simple life at the beachfront. Where she goes all her belongings go with her. If anything happens to her belongings it feels like her life is ruined.

typo
proabably[probably] her stuff.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
    Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di