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Comment from Pam (respa)
-A few people commented on dividing
the lines. For a poem, they are very long,
and the reader loses the creative idea.
-Also, you use the word 'change' 3 times;
you want a poem to show something, like
reds turn to orange.
-The key questions to ask are
"What happens during these seasons?
What makes them special?
-There are two sites you might find
helpful: rhymezone.com It has a lot
of good features besides rhyme.
-The second one is relatedwords.com
-Good luck with your writing.
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-A few people commented on dividing
the lines. For a poem, they are very long,
and the reader loses the creative idea.
-Also, you use the word 'change' 3 times;
you want a poem to show something, like
reds turn to orange.
-The key questions to ask are
"What happens during these seasons?
What makes them special?
-There are two sites you might find
helpful: rhymezone.com It has a lot
of good features besides rhyme.
-The second one is relatedwords.com
-Good luck with your writing.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
Comment from jwsteele
Seasons are getting ready to change, Summer is soon going to change to fall, and then fall is eventually going to change to winter.
Winter is the best. The cold, the snow, the silence. Of course not everyone likes it. But there are alternatives.
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Seasons are getting ready to change, Summer is soon going to change to fall, and then fall is eventually going to change to winter.
Winter is the best. The cold, the snow, the silence. Of course not everyone likes it. But there are alternatives.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
I like this meaningful short poem. Life's changes come in all shapes and sizes. Change can be happy and exciting as well as messy and complicated. Changes in the season mirror changes in life. Thanks for sharing.
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I like this meaningful short poem. Life's changes come in all shapes and sizes. Change can be happy and exciting as well as messy and complicated. Changes in the season mirror changes in life. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
' Changes ', is short, succinct and deftly descriptive. With a minimum of words. This talented poet has told it as he sees it. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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' Changes ', is short, succinct and deftly descriptive. With a minimum of words. This talented poet has told it as he sees it. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
Comment from jenintorre
The content of this poem is good but it really needs much improvement. I suggest that you study the layout of other poems on this site and also add an illustration. All the best . Jen.
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The content of this poem is good but it really needs much improvement. I suggest that you study the layout of other poems on this site and also add an illustration. All the best . Jen.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
Comment from jake cosmos aller
so true - i am not sure I would have broken up the poem that way i would have broken it up like this:
Seasons
are getting ready to change,
Summer is soon
going to change to fall,
and then fall
is eventually
going to
change to winter.
but to each their own if it works for you that is all that matters,
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so true - i am not sure I would have broken up the poem that way i would have broken it up like this:
Seasons
are getting ready to change,
Summer is soon
going to change to fall,
and then fall
is eventually
going to
change to winter.
but to each their own if it works for you that is all that matters,
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I am sorry but this chapter of Brian's songs really stinks. There is no image to accompany this short poem and that shows disinterest in providing a good post. I understand and approve of the title and the changing of the seasons is usually a sure bet! But honestly, you need to put more into your poems.
I appreciate that may have done your very best. Yet you should've tried harder if you want more than a few reviews of four stars.
Jesse
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I am sorry but this chapter of Brian's songs really stinks. There is no image to accompany this short poem and that shows disinterest in providing a good post. I understand and approve of the title and the changing of the seasons is usually a sure bet! But honestly, you need to put more into your poems.
I appreciate that may have done your very best. Yet you should've tried harder if you want more than a few reviews of four stars.
Jesse
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
Comment from moongirlwriter
This is all so very true. . .the seasons continually change. I think your poem is well written and flows nicely but I also think it might be stronger if you use a couple of other words besides change. Use change once. . .then find another word that means the same as change for the other two "changes".
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This is all so very true. . .the seasons continually change. I think your poem is well written and flows nicely but I also think it might be stronger if you use a couple of other words besides change. Use change once. . .then find another word that means the same as change for the other two "changes".
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
Comment from Cass Carlton
Dear Friend, have you looked at your post? If you haven't please do. 'Cos there is nothing there to comment on. When there is something visible, please PM me so I can change the low rating. cheers Cass Carlton
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Dear Friend, have you looked at your post? If you haven't please do. 'Cos there is nothing there to comment on. When there is something visible, please PM me so I can change the low rating. cheers Cass Carlton
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Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
Comment from Versch
Dear Brian,
Welcome to Fanstory! Your post cannot be seen. I have to highlight it to be able to see the writings. It is a lovely poem.
I know it is a lot to learn on this site when you are new. I have joined a couple of months ago. You can click edit on your post and you can change the color of your writings, you can even make the font bigger, then click save on the bottom. Best wishes!
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Dear Brian,
Welcome to Fanstory! Your post cannot be seen. I have to highlight it to be able to see the writings. It is a lovely poem.
I know it is a lot to learn on this site when you are new. I have joined a couple of months ago. You can click edit on your post and you can change the color of your writings, you can even make the font bigger, then click save on the bottom. Best wishes!
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021