All Hallows' Eve
This is a halloween poem.46 total reviews
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Hi Robert.
This is totally delightful. It's meter is flawless and rolls along beautifully. Your rhymes are strong and clever. Does this form have a name? I'd like to know. I don't remember ever seeing it before.
Thanks for the fun read. It made me smile.
Perhaps using "thinnest" thread instead of "slimmest"
Perhaps too much alliteration? You will have three "t" words in a row...the, thinnest thread.
Up to you.
Luv&stuff,
Katiemaedead
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Hi Robert.
This is totally delightful. It's meter is flawless and rolls along beautifully. Your rhymes are strong and clever. Does this form have a name? I'd like to know. I don't remember ever seeing it before.
Thanks for the fun read. It made me smile.
Perhaps using "thinnest" thread instead of "slimmest"
Perhaps too much alliteration? You will have three "t" words in a row...the, thinnest thread.
Up to you.
Luv&stuff,
Katiemaedead
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Hello Katie Mae. Thank you for the marvelous review and rating for my Halloween poem. I?m glad you enjoyed the imagery and meter, as well as the rhyme. The poem is simply a traditional four stanza poem, using the rhyme scheme created by Omar Khayyam nearly a thousand years ago in the Rubaiyat. However, he did not link the stanzas with the repeating third line rhyme moving to the next stanza.
Thinnest would work well there, I'll have to check, as I used alliteration
in other lines. Thanks.
I appreciated the encouraging comments very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
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You are most welcome! :)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Why on earth did you not put this in the contest? It's the creepiest, scariest halloween poem I've read on here! I love it! I'm sure the children will really enjoy this one, they seem to love scary things more these days. You've brought in things that used to have me screaming for my mum and dad to check under the bed and in the top cupboards of my wardrobe. Once, when dad looked under my bed, our next door neighbours dog was under there. I loved that! Well done, Robert, this was such a fun read and brought back a few memories for me. :)) Sandra xx
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Why on earth did you not put this in the contest? It's the creepiest, scariest halloween poem I've read on here! I love it! I'm sure the children will really enjoy this one, they seem to love scary things more these days. You've brought in things that used to have me screaming for my mum and dad to check under the bed and in the top cupboards of my wardrobe. Once, when dad looked under my bed, our next door neighbours dog was under there. I loved that! Well done, Robert, this was such a fun read and brought back a few memories for me. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Hello Sandra.Thank you for the marvelous review and rating for my Halloween poem. I?m glad you enjoyed the scary imagery and the rhymes. I used to think their was something hiding under the bed too.
Why just last week I had Pam check to make sure there was nothing there. :) I like the story that a dog was once there. That would make a good ending for a flash or a poem.
I appreciated the encouraging comments very much, my friend.
Best wishes (and check under the bed tonight).
Robert
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Beautifully metered and rhymed with plenty of evocative Halloween 'charm', this verse is perfect for the season with its oozing, creaking, shrieking creep! Well done! Debbie
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Beautifully metered and rhymed with plenty of evocative Halloween 'charm', this verse is perfect for the season with its oozing, creaking, shrieking creep! Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Hello Debbie.Thank you for the excellent review and rating for my Halloween poem. I?m glad you enjoyed the creepy imagery and the rhymes.
I appreciated the encouraging comments very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Oh wow what awesome halloween poem this is really great gave me the creeps wow! Picture you picked is kind of creepy too goes along with the theme. I see no issues with esthetics, spelling grammar, sentence structure, or rejoiced. I think you got a great piece of Halloween magic. Perfect poem to read to the kids before they go. Trick-or-treating LOL maybe not. Thank you for this fine submission best of luck to you and hope you have an awesome night!
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Oh wow what awesome halloween poem this is really great gave me the creeps wow! Picture you picked is kind of creepy too goes along with the theme. I see no issues with esthetics, spelling grammar, sentence structure, or rejoiced. I think you got a great piece of Halloween magic. Perfect poem to read to the kids before they go. Trick-or-treating LOL maybe not. Thank you for this fine submission best of luck to you and hope you have an awesome night!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Hello Lea.Thank you for the marvelous review and excellent rating for my Halloween poem. I?m glad you enjoyed the scary imagery and rhymes. If this was read to me before I went Trick-or-treating, I probably wouldn't have gone. :)
I appreciated the encouraging comments very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment from Navada
I really enjoyed the lively pace and rhythm of this piece! The rhyming scheme works really well, too, and helps to drive it along. The only little fix required is the spelling of the word "creak" instead of "creek". I can imagine this poem being read aloud to children in a scary voice before or after trick or treating and watching their eyes widen. They would love it!
Thanks for the share!
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I really enjoyed the lively pace and rhythm of this piece! The rhyming scheme works really well, too, and helps to drive it along. The only little fix required is the spelling of the word "creak" instead of "creek". I can imagine this poem being read aloud to children in a scary voice before or after trick or treating and watching their eyes widen. They would love it!
Thanks for the share!
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Hello Navada.Thank you for the excellent review and rating for my Halloween poem. I?m glad you enjoyed the imagery and rhymes.
If someone read this poem when I was a kid, I'd probably have nightmares, if I got to sleep at all. :)
I appreciated the encouraging comments very much.
Creak has been changed.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment from gramalot8
This is a fantastic Halloween poem. Just the right words to keep us guessing and wondering who ... or what ... THEY are! Truly scary are the demons haunting around on Hallows Eve. Thanks for sharing this with us.
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This is a fantastic Halloween poem. Just the right words to keep us guessing and wondering who ... or what ... THEY are! Truly scary are the demons haunting around on Hallows Eve. Thanks for sharing this with us.
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Hello Gramalot.Thank you for the excellent review and rating for my Halloween poem. I?m glad you enjoyed the scary imagery and rhymes.
I appreciated the encouraging comments very much.
Best wishes.
Robert
