Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious
Something to make you smile50 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Helvi2
I had so much fun reading you poem,plus the fact you spelled out Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious, and put it into rhyme
You really made me smiles when you said-
Stupid writers always do the dumbest things on earth,
Undertaking far too much for rhymed and rhythmic verse.
Pardon my stupidity for thinking that I might
Entertain you with a word I probably won't spell right
good luck
Gert
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Hello Helvi2
I had so much fun reading you poem,plus the fact you spelled out Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious, and put it into rhyme
You really made me smiles when you said-
Stupid writers always do the dumbest things on earth,
Undertaking far too much for rhymed and rhythmic verse.
Pardon my stupidity for thinking that I might
Entertain you with a word I probably won't spell right
good luck
Gert
Comment Written 11-Jun-2009
Comment from fictionwriter
I loved it. It so describes what I would feel if I ever tried to write a poem. I love the way it already has set up the fact you're going to be critised. I thought it was hilarious. Well done.
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I loved it. It so describes what I would feel if I ever tried to write a poem. I love the way it already has set up the fact you're going to be critised. I thought it was hilarious. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2009
Comment from delphinus
I like this! You are a right little mary poppins! It rhymes and flows lovely has humour - very funny over the top but lovely must be the longest word in the acrosstic poem competition! Beats mine lol i've only got 6 letters!!! Good work though looks like alot of thought and effort has gone into this
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I like this! You are a right little mary poppins! It rhymes and flows lovely has humour - very funny over the top but lovely must be the longest word in the acrosstic poem competition! Beats mine lol i've only got 6 letters!!! Good work though looks like alot of thought and effort has gone into this
Comment Written 11-Jun-2009
Comment from rama devi
HI Helvi!
This did make me smile!
You sweetly silly soul!
Still, i find some spags to note and rate accordingly, but I know you know I will upgrade when you make edits to the spag! This is very humorous and entertaining! I am sure it will garner abundant laughs.
The rhyming is impressive. The timing flows with grand rhythmic groove. Enjoyed reading this!
Spags to note:
Stupid writers always do the dumbest things on earth,
Undertaking far to (TOO)much for rhymed and rhythmic verse.
Pardon my stupidity for thinking that I might,(NO COMMA)
Entertain you with a word I probably won't spell right.
Ridicule me if you must, I thought it would be fun!
Circumstances can't explain, what I have gone and done .
Acrostic poems aren't easy for the poet's hand to write, (period or semicolon)
Loopholes seem to disappear to save one from re-write (period)
Imbeciles, (NO COMMA)like me all say, "Hey, I can pull this off !",(NO COMMA i think)
Foolishly embracing words a knucklehead would scoff.
Repercussions (COMMA) I am sure, will drive me out the door.
Accusations that I'm NUTS.(NO PERIOD) will ring out even more.
"Gadzooks!",(I think the comma is superfluous here as you have an exclamation mark already there. the quotes maybe should go after the entire line?) what was I thinking? My poet days are dead! (End Quotes)
Ignorance does not cause bliss! My contest dreams are shred.
(LOVED THIS LINE AND THE RHYMING WITH SHRED. BRILLIANT!)
Left with just a beggar's cup, my whole world's turned afoul.
I need a friend like Pat Sajak, just for a winning vowel.
"S upercalifragilistic!" You've destroyed my day,
T empting me to write a poem you knew they'd throw away!
I conic stature of your might,(NO COMMA) have led me to my doom,
Catapulting me head first,(NO COMMA) into the deepest gloom.
E xcited I was word-blind to what you had in store,
X-ing me right from the start, without a chance to score.
Placidly you kicked my butt and left a mark of shame!
In my own defense, I know, I've only me to blame.
Atrocious conduct made by me,(NO COMMA) will mark me as a jerk!
Lusting for humungous fame I throttled my own perks.
Ignorant, I should have known,(NO COMMA) the price I'd have to pay.
Dashing of (OFF)full speed ahead one always goes astray.
Oblivious to my own fate(COMMA) I didn't look ahead.
Careless by my own accords, my hopes have slipped to dread.
Impressive? "Well?",(i think the comma is superfluous here as you have an exclamation mark already there. the quotes maybe should go after the entire line?) you just might be, but not inside my head.(End Quotes)
Omnipotent silly words can really be atrocious.
Umbrage fits you to a T, you think you're so precocious.
Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious!
Normally, a poem with so many spag spots would garner a three from me (until fixed), but I throw in en extra star as reward for great hilarity!
Thanks for making me smile.
Love, rd
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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2009
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HI Helvi!
This did make me smile!
You sweetly silly soul!
Still, i find some spags to note and rate accordingly, but I know you know I will upgrade when you make edits to the spag! This is very humorous and entertaining! I am sure it will garner abundant laughs.
The rhyming is impressive. The timing flows with grand rhythmic groove. Enjoyed reading this!
Spags to note:
Stupid writers always do the dumbest things on earth,
Undertaking far to (TOO)much for rhymed and rhythmic verse.
Pardon my stupidity for thinking that I might,(NO COMMA)
Entertain you with a word I probably won't spell right.
Ridicule me if you must, I thought it would be fun!
Circumstances can't explain, what I have gone and done .
Acrostic poems aren't easy for the poet's hand to write, (period or semicolon)
Loopholes seem to disappear to save one from re-write (period)
Imbeciles, (NO COMMA)like me all say, "Hey, I can pull this off !",(NO COMMA i think)
Foolishly embracing words a knucklehead would scoff.
Repercussions (COMMA) I am sure, will drive me out the door.
Accusations that I'm NUTS.(NO PERIOD) will ring out even more.
"Gadzooks!",(I think the comma is superfluous here as you have an exclamation mark already there. the quotes maybe should go after the entire line?) what was I thinking? My poet days are dead! (End Quotes)
Ignorance does not cause bliss! My contest dreams are shred.
(LOVED THIS LINE AND THE RHYMING WITH SHRED. BRILLIANT!)
Left with just a beggar's cup, my whole world's turned afoul.
I need a friend like Pat Sajak, just for a winning vowel.
"S upercalifragilistic!" You've destroyed my day,
T empting me to write a poem you knew they'd throw away!
I conic stature of your might,(NO COMMA) have led me to my doom,
Catapulting me head first,(NO COMMA) into the deepest gloom.
E xcited I was word-blind to what you had in store,
X-ing me right from the start, without a chance to score.
Placidly you kicked my butt and left a mark of shame!
In my own defense, I know, I've only me to blame.
Atrocious conduct made by me,(NO COMMA) will mark me as a jerk!
Lusting for humungous fame I throttled my own perks.
Ignorant, I should have known,(NO COMMA) the price I'd have to pay.
Dashing of (OFF)full speed ahead one always goes astray.
Oblivious to my own fate(COMMA) I didn't look ahead.
Careless by my own accords, my hopes have slipped to dread.
Impressive? "Well?",(i think the comma is superfluous here as you have an exclamation mark already there. the quotes maybe should go after the entire line?) you just might be, but not inside my head.(End Quotes)
Omnipotent silly words can really be atrocious.
Umbrage fits you to a T, you think you're so precocious.
Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious!
Normally, a poem with so many spag spots would garner a three from me (until fixed), but I throw in en extra star as reward for great hilarity!
Thanks for making me smile.
Love, rd
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Comment Written 11-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2009
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Hi rama,
I want to thank you for the incredible amount of time it took for you to write this review... Bless Your Heart!..
I think I've gotten everthing straightened out now. If you come across any new errors I made please let me know. I'm so happy you enjoyed this and thank you for sharing that extra star when you usually don't. Hope the improvements make this worthy of a five now. THank again for the tremndous help. I'm glad I made you smile! :o)
Huge Hug,
Helvi :o)
Comment from pixiemillie
Wow- -you did it and did it well, I might add- -not only to choose such a word for the acrostic contest, but to tell a delightful story in rhyme = =quite a feat. All the self ridicule for even trying such a task- -asking Pat Sajak for a vowel- -too much to comment on that is brilliant.
I saw only 3 possible punctuation probs.
done.
rewrite.
NUTS,
Good luck in the contest. This is genius!
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Wow- -you did it and did it well, I might add- -not only to choose such a word for the acrostic contest, but to tell a delightful story in rhyme = =quite a feat. All the self ridicule for even trying such a task- -asking Pat Sajak for a vowel- -too much to comment on that is brilliant.
I saw only 3 possible punctuation probs.
done.
rewrite.
NUTS,
Good luck in the contest. This is genius!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2009
Comment from Artasylum
i love the quote and to that i say amen...and the rest is funny...i'm not big on acrostics for the reason they seem forced...so good job at forcing...fun read...yours, diana
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i love the quote and to that i say amen...and the rest is funny...i'm not big on acrostics for the reason they seem forced...so good job at forcing...fun read...yours, diana
Comment Written 10-Jun-2009
Comment from VICTIMEYES
well the first line made me look, how did you ever think of this as a word to begin a acrostic type poem i will never know, wow.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2009
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well the first line made me look, how did you ever think of this as a word to begin a acrostic type poem i will never know, wow.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2009
Hi ES,
It just seemed like a fun word to try. The only thing I didn't know was if it could be done. I had to pass up to other acrostic contests, but I finally finished it. I hope you had a lot of fun reading it. Thanks for the great review
Smiles and Hugs,
Helvi :o)
Comment from mjarabrab
Very cute, very creative. The colors you chose makes it apealing to read, and your humor comes through wonderfully in this,
I don't see anything I would suggest to change,
fun to read
take care
Mj
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Very cute, very creative. The colors you chose makes it apealing to read, and your humor comes through wonderfully in this,
I don't see anything I would suggest to change,
fun to read
take care
Mj
Comment Written 10-Jun-2009
Comment from AlvinTEthington
I love the satire of acrostics here. When I write them, I feel like I am writing a crossword puzzle! Good use of lilting rhyming couplets for an amusing poem. In the second line, I think you want "too", not "to." Instead of the plural "beggars", I think you want the singular possessive "beggar's." These are quite minor concerns, however. You describe in a sardonic way very well how I feel about acrostics.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2009
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I love the satire of acrostics here. When I write them, I feel like I am writing a crossword puzzle! Good use of lilting rhyming couplets for an amusing poem. In the second line, I think you want "too", not "to." Instead of the plural "beggars", I think you want the singular possessive "beggar's." These are quite minor concerns, however. You describe in a sardonic way very well how I feel about acrostics.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2009
Thanks Al,
If anyone deserves a smile it's you and I'm glad I was able to give you one. Those two to's always get me. Thanks for pointing out the errors and the wonderful five rating. I appreciate both very much. Glad you enjoyed what I wrote my friend.
Smiles and Hugs,
Nancy
Comment from Jewell McChesney
Insanity my butt! This is genius!
You had me smiling all the way through. It was just the breath of fresh air I needed to read today.
Thanks for that! I don't know how this could not be a winner! Now you have me curious to read the other submissions. I wish I could vote!
Voila! You did it girl! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D lots grins!
Jj
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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2009
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Insanity my butt! This is genius!
You had me smiling all the way through. It was just the breath of fresh air I needed to read today.
Thanks for that! I don't know how this could not be a winner! Now you have me curious to read the other submissions. I wish I could vote!
Voila! You did it girl! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D lots grins!
Jj
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Comment Written 10-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2009
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Thanks my friend,
I'm so glad I added a smile to your day. Even though you can't vote in a site contest contest, the thought that you'd vote for me makes my heart smile. Thanks so much for your joyous review.
HUGS and SMILES,
Helvi :o)