Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Creation Sleeps"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from acerisestory
Very nicely done, GW. The message is beautiful and the accompanying picture complements your poem. The only thing I might do differently is put a period at the end of the first line. Best wishes. Alana
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Very nicely done, GW. The message is beautiful and the accompanying picture complements your poem. The only thing I might do differently is put a period at the end of the first line. Best wishes. Alana
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from Righteous Riter
The photo compliments the piece well as the words bring the photo to life. Good description. Good alliteration with last/look...will/we...sun/sleep. Clear message that is short and simple.
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The photo compliments the piece well as the words bring the photo to life. Good description. Good alliteration with last/look...will/we...sun/sleep. Clear message that is short and simple.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from Smoothiecool
this very short write could not of put the message any clearer
what will each day bring if we wake to the dawn
cheers..Smoothiecool
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this very short write could not of put the message any clearer
what will each day bring if we wake to the dawn
cheers..Smoothiecool
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from Bryan G
A question for the ages. In a few words you have created a very thought provoking poem. There are so many answers from so many points of view. I like your statement, " The last look at perfection through tired eyes of pure mortals". I like your question even more. What can we expect eternal sun or eternal darkness?
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A question for the ages. In a few words you have created a very thought provoking poem. There are so many answers from so many points of view. I like your statement, " The last look at perfection through tired eyes of pure mortals". I like your question even more. What can we expect eternal sun or eternal darkness?
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from elchupakabra
This is a simple two liner that I thought was well written and conveyed a shared human sentiment. You did a solid job putting this together with the image. Solid work here, thanks for sharing.
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This is a simple two liner that I thought was well written and conveyed a shared human sentiment. You did a solid job putting this together with the image. Solid work here, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from Eric1
Who knows Deepwater, we are as you say in Gods hands,these two lines say so much, we go to bed and dream, who knows if we will wake. Wonderful work!
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Who knows Deepwater, we are as you say in Gods hands,these two lines say so much, we go to bed and dream, who knows if we will wake. Wonderful work!
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse gives me this impression that we end with each sunset and are reborn at dawn. If we aren't then each evening is our last. That's a powerful consideration for the day's accomplishments.
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This free verse gives me this impression that we end with each sunset and are reborn at dawn. If we aren't then each evening is our last. That's a powerful consideration for the day's accomplishments.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from Jackarrie
A beautiful poem, it goes straight to the point, we should be aware that when we say goodnight, it is possible it could be the last time. Live in the moment, we just have got to.
Well done
Mary
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A beautiful poem, it goes straight to the point, we should be aware that when we say goodnight, it is possible it could be the last time. Live in the moment, we just have got to.
Well done
Mary
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from Domino 2
Blimey - FOUR top payers in the list - have you won the lottery? :-)
I'm rarely a fan of questions in poetry, as in your 2nd line, and prefer either ambiguity without the 'will' or a definite statement. Mind you, that's just my humble taste.
To die in one's sleep would obviously be the perfect ending, but my snoring keeps waking me up. :-)
Cheers, Ray
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Blimey - FOUR top payers in the list - have you won the lottery? :-)
I'm rarely a fan of questions in poetry, as in your 2nd line, and prefer either ambiguity without the 'will' or a definite statement. Mind you, that's just my humble taste.
To die in one's sleep would obviously be the perfect ending, but my snoring keeps waking me up. :-)
Cheers, Ray
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
Comment from emrpoems
fantastic presentation of your thought provoking poem.
That is something that we all think of but it is not something we should waste much time over. we have no control so why spend a lifetime worrying about it. The end will come when it will come
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fantastic presentation of your thought provoking poem.
That is something that we all think of but it is not something we should waste much time over. we have no control so why spend a lifetime worrying about it. The end will come when it will come
Comment Written 18-Jun-2014
