Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

Good. It is morning and not before bedtime. Your post is the first pumpkin I reviewed this morning.

A cemetery, a stranger in town, a house on Elm Street. Stories about shortcuts through cemeteries never end well. "Run, Jeanie! Run!"

This post is a lot of fun. You are making me a reluctant fan of the genre. You are creative, imaginative, and ghastly inventive. Now it is time for me to have breakfast.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015

Yep, way before bedtime this time around, Sis Cat. Maybe it'll give you something to think about the next time you stroll past an old cemetery one day, heh-heh...
Much obliged for the review...~Dean

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

Great work with this one. I'd love to write one for the book but horror is not my forte...I enjoy reading it but have never had any luck writing one. I'll give it a shot, but don't promise I will submit it...it is supposed to be horror not humor...right???? LOL

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015

Well, just send your story to my message box, and I'll give you any suggestions (if needed), then we'll go from there. How does that sound? I'll share a secret with you, Sasha. I just write about the things that scare the hell out of me. If you do that, you're able to tap in to the horror quite easily. If you try to write about what "might" scare others, it's much more difficult. As you can see, lots of things terrify me, heh-heh...

Thanks for taking the time to R&R this for me. As always, I appreciate it. :)
~Dean

reply by Sasha on 29-Apr-2015

That should be easy, everything scares the shit out of me!

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Poor Jeannie, just casually walking to the pumpkin patch, and powie! Right in the kisser, I liked this firmly established anathema Dean, at least you cleverly leave things to the imagination, the potential victims may even escape, who knows. well done, my friend, well written, my friend, blessings Roy.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015

Yeah, just like in horror movies, you can't tell those young'un's nothin', Roy. They're gonna do what they want to do, regardless. She should've known the ogre looking stranger was setting her up. Oh well, such is life...

Much appreciated...~Dean

reply by royowen on 29-Apr-2015

Most welcome, Dean

Comment from Debbie Noland

Excellent

I like this piece for its creation of an all-encompassing mood that builds from apprehension to pure horror quickly (due to its brevity) but still in discernible stages. Black and orange imagery permeate, even without the illustration. The play on patch/batch is a nice touch as well. Your collection of these short pieces is bound to be fun.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015

Thanks for reading, Debbie. Much obliged...~Dean

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

Hi Dean,

I've never been to a pumpkin patch and, after reading this, I doubt I'll ever go, lol. Good setup, good description, and a nice amount of creepiness. Also, clever of you to replace patch with batch.

Tiny bit of spag: 'An' very large should be 'A.' Also,
there's an extra space between paragraphs at the end.

I guess not too many people can do horror, but you're doing well with this series on your own.

Hugs,
Lou

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015

Thanks for reading, Lou. I think it's all corrected now. ~Dean

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

Excellent photo of these pumpkins that complements your story perfectly. I am sorry, I did not sent you either but I am no good in horror/thriller. The young girl just moved, then goes to a pumpkin field next door to the cemetery. Not only she sees bleeding pumpkins and eyes and a knife.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015

Thanks for taking the time to read and review this short horror story for me, Ine. I sincerely appreciate it. :)
~Dean

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

No fair! This is supposed to be flash fiction, not nonfiction. I mean, we all know how you decorate your porch for Halloween. The real question is, how do you get a candle inside your "pumpkins". And do you carve them with a scalpel? Another great shortie. Just two tiny typos- an very large- a very large; hatched grasped- hatchet grasped.

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 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015

Thanks, Ed. I keep correcting the spelling, but my editing software keeps changing it back to hatched for some reason. It appears as if I'm going to have to change that particular word all together.

I really appreciate your review, buddy. Thanks again! ~Dean :)

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Dean. This is a interestingly chilling little vignette of an ill-fated shortcut taken. Good job, scary. I enjoy reading these little gems.

Suggest fixing typo: "a bloodied hatched (hatchet)."

Marilyn



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 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015

Oh, thanks for catching that, Marilyn! I fixed it twice already, but my crazy auto-spell checker software keeps changing it back! I will get on it ASAP.

Much obliged, my friend. :)

reply by BeasPeas on 29-Apr-2015

You are welcome. We are all another set of eyes for each other. Marilyn

reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015

So true... ;)