Comment from Susanne M. Psyris

Excellent

Excellent acrostic for the contest! Good rhythm and rhyme (though not required for this form) and a great read. Thoroughly enjoyed it. Love the artwork you chose to accompany this well-written piece. Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016

Susanne, thanks so much for the warm words and best wishes.

Steve

reply by Susanne M. Psyris on 25-Apr-2016

You are so welcome, Steve...

Comment from tony bronk

Excellent

A charming, enchanting fairy-tail story poem that sings its words as one reads the poem! I enjoyed reading it very much! Excellent write! Tony

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016

Thanks, Tony - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Hello Steve;
-I really like this very imaginative piece of writing that is very inventive and truly ingeniously creative.
- the words seem to dance right off the page and stimulate the reader or me very much.
- your rhyming words were contingent and supportive to the meaning and concept of each of your lines therefore making your rhythm to flow smoothly.
- also none of your rhyming words were forced or labored which was also helpful in the rhythmic flow.
-the meter, cadence, timing and tempo while helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and very easy.
-the picture was very imaginative and also appropriate, supportive and relative to the concept and theme of your writing.
- good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always Steve.
Alex

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016

Alex, thanks for the review, as always.

Steve

reply by krys123 on 27-Apr-2016

You are very welcome Steve.
Alice

Comment from Chrissy710

Excellent

Hi Steve . What an enchanting tale and I loved you yellow letters as they helped bring this to life. an excellent Acrostic for the contest Good luck I really enjoyed reading this Cheers Christine

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016

Thanks, Chrissy. Glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from F. Wehr3

Excellent

This was a fun little acrostic poem. Being a fantasy writer is what attracted me to it. I think you did a really nice job filling it with visual imagery.

Take care,
Russell

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 Comment Written 24-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016

Thanks, Russell. It's certainly better than the excessively gloomy free verse piece I originally planned!

Steve

Comment from Margaret Ford

Exceptional

Wonderful. Just wonderful. Beautifully expressed. And thank you for sticking to the meter; you have no idea how that warms my heart and calms my spirit. Also, the acrostic-ness here is possibly the best I've ever seen--and I've seen some.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016

Margaret, thanks so much for the kind words and the six stars.

Acrostics are a "bunkum" kind of poetry in my opinion - I try to make sure the poem can stand on its own merits. Fortunately, rhyme and meter come fairly easily to me.

Steve

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

Has a great flow, alliteration, and the rhythm of it all just rolled off my tongue as I read it aloud. Nice rhyming, not forced at all. My favorite is the third verse, but the whole poem never eases up on it's quality. Well done. Les

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 Comment Written 24-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2016

Thanks, Les, for the very kind words.

Steve